darren1010 wrote:
rhyme wrote:
I think it depends on the applicant honestly. If you are a 6.0 essay writer and use someone for strategic assistance (i.e. this story over that story) thats one thing. If you are a weak writer and end up with gramatically perfect essays that don't support your verbal score, I think it's more obvious.
Rhyme, you scared me. Now I dare not submit my perfect essays anymore...(know why they are perfect, don't you?)
Yours were fine...
If you look back at what I suggested - it was primarily strategic (i.e. the club suggestion). All I did was tweak some words, suggest some topics which you integrated yourself (on your own) and clean up slightly for clarity. It's still 90% all your own words.
In the above, I'm talking more about the people who clearly don't have a grasp of the English language - sentences that are missing verbs or have verbs subject verb issues like "I going to study finance" or huge clarity issues like "I know the best for me is MBA because demanding program is the study best for me." (a real sentence). In that guy's case, I PMed him that I could edit this, but that his English was poor, and if we truly corrected it, it would likely be obvious. He wrote back he had to write most of them by using a babelfish-like translator.
Your's didn't have any of that. Your sentences were gramatically correct, mostly well written and clear. Furthermore, your story in your optional essay VERY strongly supports your improved English skills.
Personally if I had to pick between submitting essays that were clear vs essays that are incomprehensible, I know which one I'd submit. (Not that yours were unclear, I mean for the people who really truly don't know English)
I wouldn't worry about it - but you should submit whatever you feel comfortable submitting.