Thanks for sharing this essay. I think it would shake out around a 5.5.
You would receive such a high score because the essay is well organized and you make nice supporting points.
You would not, in my opinion, earn a 6 because there's not enough meat in the thesis. Introduce your supporting points in the very first paragraph.
For example: You're thesis could be: playing soccer for your club team is more important than playing soccer for your country. And then you say, in the first paragraph, the reasons are practical, financial, and responsible.
And then your first body paragraph is all about the practical importance of playing for club.
And then your second body paragraph is all about the financial benefits of focusing on club play.
And so on.
Lastly, I think you pay too much deference to the other side of the argument. Don't say "I agree that both" -- just make a strong argument in favor of one perspective.
You're really close to a perfect score!
Thanks. Let me know if you have any more questions about the AWAs in particular or your GMAT preparation
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