applying R1 to Boston College in 2 weeks. and the essay asks me to describe my ST and LT goals. I have most of it written but wanted to lay out my plan of attack in the essay to see if this sounds decent. these are the general themes of my ST and LT paragraphs below.

ST goals : I talk about how i set previous ST goals for myself in the past like work for a top company in my industry, etc, and i landed an internship and then landed the job at the company after graduating. I will apply this same method at BC for my new ST goals, and will network through the school , etc to get an internship. I also want to switch industries, i work for an engineering/construction multinational but i want to go into investments and hedge funds in particular, so i talk about starting off in the energy sector side of a fund, and eventually branching out to gain knowledge in different trading areas outside of just trading energy.

LT goals: ( these are the hardest). i readily admit that the future is uncertain but i would like to branch out from oil and energy even though i'm strongly suited for it but i do not think i can help my employer by being so one dimensional in the long run.I mention training employees at my current job and how i would like to get into a management role eventually but i need to learn the mechanics of 'how' to manage through my mba first. also, i do say that i would ask my professors their opinions on my long term goals bc after all they are experts in their field.< should i say that i would ask for professors input? should i also say that given the uncertain economic times that i could always fall back to my 'bread and butter' energy industry connections in tough times and become an energy trader for an oil operating company?

I would love some feedback.
Thanks.

Hey,
I don't think you need to waste space explaining how you've set ST goals in the past. You're better off using that space to tie your past professional experience to your ST and LT goals. I think you can mention your professors but moreso to leverage them to achieve your goals. Only you can decide what goals are right for you. But maybe your professors can help you accomplish them by giving insights into potential challenges as well as potential opportunities.
I haven't read the essay, but from what you've said above it kind of sounds like a myriad of different goals instead of the different pieces to ONE overall goal. It might be best to present it as more of a step by step action plan. You can definitely put in an alternative route, but ultimately it should lead you to the same end goal. Having 2 different end goals just seems unfocused.

Hope this helps.
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