I keep receiving low scores, from Princeton Review
grader service, for my argument analysis. I dont really care much about essays, but I at least want to get 4.0. So, after reading their suggestions, I realized I need to come up with another paragraph.
Let me explain you how I organize my analysis of an argument essay on an example.The following appeared as part of an annual report sent to stockholders by Olympic Foods, a processor of frozen foods:
“Over time, the costs of processing go down because as organizations learn how to do things better, they become more efficient. In color film processing, for example, the cost of a 3-by-5-inch print fell from 50 cents for five-day service in 1970 to 20 cents for one-day service in 1984. The same principle applies to the processing of food. And since Olympic Foods will soon celebrate its 25th birthday, we can expect that our long experience will enable us to minimize costs and thus maximize profits.”
Discuss how well reasoned . . . etc.
I first the assumptions (there are always two!) and the conclusion.
A1. Argument assumes that color film processing and processing of food shares same business principals.
A2. Argument assumes that Olympic Food was in the business for the past 25 years (it may have been founded but did not operate say until 5 years ago).
C: Longer in the business; lower costs.
Than I write an introduction restating conclusion and explaining how it relies on these assumptions.
Paragraph1 : I restate the first assumption and discredit it. One example here.
Paragraph 2 : I restate the second assumption and discredit it. One example here.
Conclusion standard conclusion. I also add one sentence like "the conclusion would have been stronger if such such evidences provided for the assumptions identified earlier bla bla".
What am I missing?