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As a baby emerges from the darkness of the womb with a rudimentary sense of vision, it would be rated about 20/500, or legally blind if it were an adult with such vision.

A. As a baby emerges from the darkness of the womb with a rudimentary sense of vision, it would be rated about 20/500, or legally blind if it were an adult with such vision.
B. A baby emerges from the darkness of the womb with a rudimentary sense of vision that would be rated about 20/500, or legally lind as an adult.
C. As a baby emerges from the darkness of the womb, its rudimentary sense of vision would be rated about 20/500; qualifying it to be legally blind if an adult.
D. A baby emerges from the darkness of the womb with a rudimentary sense of vision that would be rated about 20/500; an adult with such vision would be deemed legally blind.
E. As a baby emerges from the darkness of the womb, its rudimentary sense of vision, which would deemed legally blind for an adult, would be rated about 20/500.

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18 Jan 2010, 09:24
E is awkard and wordy. Note that E has 3 commas whereas D conveys the meaning in two sentences separated by a single comma and also keeps the "rudimentary sense of vision" and the rating part together.
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19 Jan 2010, 07:36
D acc to me..E is wrong for the highlighted part
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As a baby emerges from the darkness of the womb with a rudimentary sense of vision, it would be rated about 20/500, or legally blind if it were an adult with such vision.

A. As a baby emerges from the darkness of the womb with a rudimentary sense of vision, it would be rated about 20/500, or legally blind if it were an adult with such vision.
B. A baby emerges from the darkness of the womb with a rudimentary sense of vision that would be rated about 20/500, or legally lind as an adult. alters the intent of the sentence...
C. As a baby emerges from the darkness of the womb, its rudimentary sense of vision would be rated about 20/500; qualifying it to be legally blind if an adult.part after the semi colon cannot stand on its own..hence wrong..
D. A baby emerges from the darkness of the womb with a rudimentary sense of vision that would be rated about 20/500; an adult with such vision would be deemed legally blind.
E. As a baby emerges from the darkness of the womb, its rudimentary sense of vision, which would deemed legally blind for an adult, would be rated about 20/500.

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(E) As a baby emerges from the darkness of the womb, its rudimentary sense of vision, which would deemed legally blind for an adult, would be rated about 20/500.

E is also wrong because the answer choice uses "its". "Its" is a possessive pronoun, for which it needs to have a possessive noun in the beginning to make sense of it. There isn't a possessive noun in the beginning, but only "a baby emerges...". The only way to make sense of the possessive pronoun (its) is if the answer choice began with the construction of "baby's vision", rather than "a baby" alone. Otherwise, the usage of "its" is out of place and has no direct referent.
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21 May 2010, 03:17
SudiptoGmat wrote:
What is wrong with B??

In "B", it seems that its the vision which can be treated as legally blind.

Hence wrong.
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21 May 2010, 05:06
[quote]As a baby emerges from the darkness of the womb with a rudimentary sense of vision, it would be rated about 20/500, or legally blind if it were an adult with such vision.

A. As a baby emerges from the darkness of the womb with a rudimentary sense of vision, it would be rated about 20/500, or legally blind if it were an adult with such vision.
B. A baby emerges from the darkness of the womb with a rudimentary sense of vision that would be rated about 20/500, or legally lind as an adult.
C. As a baby emerges from the darkness of the womb, its rudimentary sense of vision would be rated about 20/500; qualifying it to be legally blind if an adult.
D. A baby emerges from the darkness of the womb with a rudimentary sense of vision that would be rated about 20/500; an adult with such vision would be deemed legally blind.
E. As a baby emerges from the darkness of the womb, its rudimentary sense of vision, which would deemed legally blind for an adult, would be rated about 20/500./quote]

A. is out. the 'it' is not clear as to its antecedent. This same unclear pronoun is later repeated. beginning with as and then the subject is 'it.'
B. This is better than A. Still the second part (or legally blind as an adult is referring to vision not the baby).
C. Also begins with as forcing the subject to be sense. Then it has a semicolon followed by a less than complete second part.
D. Good. We have the baby as the subject. then the second part is very clear with a clear subject.
E. The subject again is sense. The core of the sentence is "sense would be rated" The modifiers should not overwhelm the core of the sentence.

D. is best of the five. B is the least worst of the remainders.

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As a baby emerges from the darkness of the womb with a rudimentary sense of vision, it would be rated about 20/500, or legally blind if it were an adult with such vision.

A. As a baby emerges from the darkness of the womb with a rudimentary sense of vision, it would be rated about 20/500, or legally blind if it were an adult with such vision. - too many 'it' is making the sentence confusing

B. A baby emerges from the darkness of the womb with a rudimentary sense of vision that would be rated about 20/500, or legally blind as an adult. - this appears as the 'vision' would be treated as legally blind

C. As a baby emerges from the darkness of the womb, its rudimentary sense of vision would be rated about 20/500; qualifying it to be legally blind if an adult. - 'its' is wrong. sentence after semicolon cannot stand on its own

D. A baby emerges from the darkness of the womb with a rudimentary sense of vision that would be rated about 20/500; an adult with such vision would be deemed legally blind. - correct

E. As a baby emerges from the darkness of the womb, its rudimentary sense of vision, which would deemed legally blind for an adult, would be rated about 20/500. - should be 'it' and 'would be deemed' not 'would deemed'
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15 Aug 2010, 06:04
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(E) As a baby emerges from the darkness of the womb, its rudimentary sense of vision, which would deemed legally blind for an adult, would be rated about 20/500.

E is also wrong because the answer choice uses "its". "Its" is a possessive pronoun, for which it needs to have a possessive noun in the beginning to make sense of it. There isn't a possessive noun in the beginning, but only "a baby emerges...". The only way to make sense of the possessive pronoun (its) is if the answer choice began with the construction of "baby's vision", rather than "a baby" alone. Otherwise, the usage of "its" is out of place and has no direct referent.

I m not quite sure of the possessive poison here sir..Do you have few more examples on this..
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14 Jan 2011, 21:29
, which...........,would E
The problem with E is it making non essential part which should be essential part of the sentence.
D is correctly using semi colon to connect to independent clauses ,which are closely connected and stand alone
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11 Mar 2012, 13:34
I have chosen D for this question:

A. This answer choice is confusing because of the pronoun "it." The sentence starts off using a subordinate clause, and the main clause starts with the first use of "it." However, this first "it" refers to the baby instead of the rudimentary sense of vision - this is incorrect. Also, the use of the coordinating conjunction "or" is supposed to separate 2 independent clauses. The second clause cannot stand alone, so the use of "or" is also incorrect in this case.

B. The only real mistake is the use of the coordinating conjunction "or." Again, it is supposed to separate 2 independent clauses. In this case, it tries to modify 20/500 - this is incorrect.

C. The verb-ing modifier "qualifying" comes after a semicolon - this makes no sense. Modifiers are usually separated from the clauses by commas. Since this modifier comes after a semicolon, it is supposed to act as an independent clause and because it doesn't, it is a sentence fragment.

D. This answer choice is correct - it clearly identifies the meaning of the sentence. The two sentences are separated by a semicolon and they are related.

E. The use of "which" seems to be misplaced - it should probably be modifying 20/500.
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06 Apr 2012, 08:13
a. it - pronoun ambiguity
b. awkward construction - doesn't convey the authors intent
c. the last part is a fragment
d. correct
e. wrong modification - would be rated ... + awkward construction
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11 Aug 2012, 23:18
I am also confused about: As a baby emerges from the darkness of the "womb with a rudimentary" ....
"a rudimentary" seems to modify womb rather than baby?
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12 Aug 2012, 01:06
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This is here logic helps us. Although structurally it appears okay, a womb cannot indeed have a sense of vision. So we can only fall back on the baby.
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15 Dec 2012, 12:22
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As a baby emerges from the darkness of the womb with a rudimentary sense of vision, it would be rated about 20/500, or legally blind if it were an adult with such vision.

A. As a baby emerges from the darkness of the womb with a rudimentary sense of vision, it would be rated about 20/500, or legally blind if it were an adult with such vision.It is incorrect because the logical prediction of it after or seems that Vision is legally blind i.e. Vision would be rate.....or Vision would be legally blind>>>>>>>>>>Hence its wrong.
B. A baby emerges from the darkness of the womb with a rudimentary sense of vision that would be rated about 20/500, or legally lind as an adult. As cannot be used to compare noun
C. As a baby emerges from the darkness of the womb, its rudimentary sense of vision would be rated about 20/500; qualifying it to be legally blind if an adult.There is no verin the clause after the semi colon
D. A baby emerges from the darkness of the womb with a rudimentary sense of vision that would be rated about 20/500; an adult with such vision would be deemed legally blind.Correct
E. As a baby emerges from the darkness of the womb, its rudimentary sense of vision, which would deemed legally blind for an adult, would be rated about 20/500.which refers to Visio, is not correct.

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29 Nov 2013, 08:35
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I am also confused about: As a baby emerges from the darkness of the "womb with a rudimentary" ....
"a rudimentary" seems to modify womb rather than baby?

"As a baby emerges from the darkness of the (womb with a rudimentary sense of vision"

When you should be grouping it differently as such:

"As a baby {emerges from the (darkness of the womb) } with a rudimentary sense of vision"

How do we know to do this?

We apply the "Cut the Fluff" technique and identify key prepositional words:

1. OF THE WOMB = fluff
2. FROM THE DARKNESS = fluff

The keywords OF and FROM - indicate additional details that you can ignore.

Once you ignore these details, the skeleton becomes:

"As a baby {emerges from the (darkness of the womb) } with a rudimentary sense of vision"

which is:

"As a baby emerges with a rudimentary sense of vision"

So use our "Cut the Fluff" technique to help you find the barebone skeleton of the sentence. Then from there, you can more easily do your analysis.

A video explanation has been provided here:

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29 Nov 2013, 10:03
I had it down to A and D

I didn't like the pronoun "it" in A, so chose D
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conty911 wrote:
I am also confused about: As a baby emerges from the darkness of the "womb with a rudimentary" ....
"a rudimentary" seems to modify womb rather than baby?

"As a baby emerges from the darkness of the (womb with a rudimentary sense of vision"

When you should be grouping it differently as such:

"As a baby {emerges from the (darkness of the womb) } with a rudimentary sense of vision"

How do we know to do this?

We apply the "Cut the Fluff" technique and identify key prepositional words:

1. OF THE WOMB = fluff
2. FROM THE DARKNESS = fluff

The keywords OF and FROM - indicate additional details that you can ignore.

Once you ignore these details, the skeleton becomes:

"As a baby {emerges from the (darkness of the womb) } with a rudimentary sense of vision"

which is:

"As a baby emerges with a rudimentary sense of vision"

So use our "Cut the Fluff" technique to help you find the barebone skeleton of the sentence. Then from there, you can more easily do your analysis.

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Hi,

Can you please explain why "its" is wrong in C and E. I realize that "its" is a possessive but why can't it refer to the baby in this case?

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14 May 2014, 19:32
The use of "its" in C and E is fine. C and E have other problems.

In C, the use of the semicolon makes the portion of the sentence after the semicolon a fragment.

In E, the placement of "which" makes it unclear whether the baby's sense of vision or the 20/500 rating would be deemed legally blind for an adult. Also, it's awkward to say "X vision would be deemed/considered legally blind for an adult" when you can more clearly say "an adult with X vision would be deemed/considered legally blind". Finally, a "be" seems to be missing before "deemed".
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09 Aug 2014, 18:10
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The use of "its" in C and E is fine. C and E have other problems.

In C, the use of the semicolon makes the portion of the sentence after the semicolon a fragment.

In E, the placement of "which" makes it unclear whether the baby's sense of vision or the 20/500 rating would be deemed legally blind for an adult. Also, it's awkward to say "X vision would be deemed/considered legally blind for an adult" when you can more clearly say "an adult with X vision would be deemed/considered legally blind". Finally, a "be" seems to be missing before "deemed".

Hi Prasi,

Thanks for the clarification. I'm having a hard time figuring out why the 2nd clause in C is not an independent clause. "Qualifying it to be legally blind if an adult" -- "it" is the subject and "qualifying" is the verb. What am i missing?
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09 Aug 2014, 21:14
Dear russ9,

"Qualifying" is not used as a verb. You need to be careful with words ending in "ing".

Consider the following sentences.
He is singing. (Singing is used as a verb here -- note the presence of the helper verb "is" before it.)
He is a singing sensation. (Singing is used as an adjective to the noun "sensation".)
Singing is my passion. (Singing is used as a noun.)

Note also that in the above sentences the subject comes before the verb, not after.

If you are still not convinced, try constructing a sentence similar to the portion after the semicolon.
Singing songs to be happy if bored.

The above sentence has no verb. It is a fragment.

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