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10 Feb 2014, 00:29
Hi there,

My test date is less than 3 weeks from now, I need some help with the AWA part. Please if someone could review my issue essay below. Thanks so much!

The best way to teach is to praise positive actions and ignore negative ones.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.

We often hear a lot of sayings such as a simple praise goes a long way, or the positive way is most effective way. While it is nice to receive praises from people, endless praises can result in a negative outcome. In a world of teaching, of course teachers would rather give positive than negative feedbacks to their students. It is always better to praise than to critique. However, to always praise the positive actions and ignore negative ones will be not educational, like the saying we also often hear, people learn best from their mistakes.
While to teach with a positive attitude is good, but to ignore negative actions will cause the students to neglect their mistakes and prevent people to learn from them. I fully agree that it is very effective to learn from our own mistakes and the consequences. Because through this experience we will always remember what we did wrong and how to fix it. In order to do this, it is crucial that we have others that can point out the wrong actions we have done. This applies not just in education but in life. To improve our ability and skills in areas of our life, we have to be aware of what the things we do wrong, and sometimes this is not possible without the help of others. Teaching involves giving insightful critiques that can be used to improve oneself. Thus, in teaching we cannot ignore the mistakes people make and just give them praises. Besides, teaching and learning themselves are a process, without realizing the negatives, one will not improve, and it is the teacher responsibility to guide them in improving their skills.
Furthermore, when praises are given endlessly in the process of teaching, it is possible that the student will develop a false confidence that will have a negative effect on the students. When someone is praised all the time even for their wrongdoing, that individual can build up a sense of pride of their achievement. This can result in refusing to be taught further, over confidence that can lead them to failure or embarrassment and so on. A student can continue doing the wrong things without realizing them because the teacher ignores all the mistakes. This alone works against the very definition of teaching. Teaching involves guiding someone to get back up when they are down, to develop a humble heart from experiencing failure but not to give up from it, rather raise up and become a stronger person from failure and mistakes.
However, it is also wrong to always pay attention to the negatives and only pay a small attention at the positive. There has to be a balance between both for an effective teaching method. Positive praises do go a long way and can encourage someone more than we would have imagined. As a good teacher, we must know when to give praise and when to be serious and discuss about the negatives. This applies not just between teachers and students, but also to parents and children, boss and employers etc,.
In conclusion, I do not fully agree that the best way to teach is to prasie positive actions and ignore the negative ones. This can result in negligent of one's mistakes and a sense of false confidence. A good balance between praise and critiques will result in an effective teaching process.
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Hi there,

My test date is less than 3 weeks from now, I need some help with the AWA part. Please if someone could review my issue essay below. Thanks so much!

The best way to teach is to praise positive actions and ignore negative ones.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.

We often hear a lot of sayings such as a simple praise goes a long way, or the positive way is most effective way. While it is nice to receive praises from people, endless praises can result in a negative outcome. In a world of teaching, of course teachers would rather give positive than negative feedbacks to their students. It is always better to praise than to critique. However, to always praise the positive actions and ignore negative ones will be not educational, like the saying we also often hear, people learn best from their mistakes.
While to teach with a positive attitude is good, but to ignore negative actions will cause the students to neglect their mistakes and prevent people to learn from them. I fully agree that it is very effective to learn from our own mistakes and the consequences. Because through this experience we will always remember what we did wrong and how to fix it. In order to do this, it is crucial that we have others that can point out the wrong actions we have done. This applies not just in education but in life. To improve our ability and skills in areas of our life, we have to be aware of what the things we do wrong, and sometimes this is not possible without the help of others. Teaching involves giving insightful critiques that can be used to improve oneself. Thus, in teaching we cannot ignore the mistakes people make and just give them praises. Besides, teaching and learning themselves are a process, without realizing the negatives, one will not improve, and it is the teacher responsibility to guide them in improving their skills.
Furthermore, when praises are given endlessly in the process of teaching, it is possible that the student will develop a false confidence that will have a negative effect on the students. When someone is praised all the time even for their wrongdoing, that individual can build up a sense of pride of their achievement. This can result in refusing to be taught further, over confidence that can lead them to failure or embarrassment and so on. A student can continue doing the wrong things without realizing them because the teacher ignores all the mistakes. This alone works against the very definition of teaching. Teaching involves guiding someone to get back up when they are down, to develop a humble heart from experiencing failure but not to give up from it, rather raise up and become a stronger person from failure and mistakes.
However, it is also wrong to always pay attention to the negatives and only pay a small attention at the positive. There has to be a balance between both for an effective teaching method. Positive praises do go a long way and can encourage someone more than we would have imagined. As a good teacher, we must know when to give praise and when to be serious and discuss about the negatives. This applies not just between teachers and students, but also to parents and children, boss and employers etc,.
In conclusion, I do not fully agree that the best way to teach is to prasie positive actions and ignore the negative ones. This can result in negligent of one's mistakes and a sense of false confidence. A good balance between praise and critiques will result in an effective teaching process.

Hi Anjani,
Your essay shows that you have good ideas and good organization. However, there are many grammatical mistakes in your essay. Rather than mistakes, I would say, the sentence corrections are improper and in some areas immature. The sentences are convoluted in some cases and the meaning is ambiguous. The constructions appear immature at times. Also there seems to repetition of some points, which can be avoided. Some superior vocabulary can be demonstrated but dont show-off. I have included a quick review and have attached it to the post.

Just to give an example:

Besides, teaching and learning themselves are a process, without realizing the negatives, one will not improve, and it is the teacher responsibility to guide them in improving their skills.

There are too many phrases in the above sentences and one can get lost reading it. Also the pronoun “one” is hanging loose, and not clearly pointing to a noun. A simpler way of writing it would be:

Teaching and learning are a process and without recognizing and critiquing the student’s negatives, it is not possible to guide the students effectively.
OR
It is the teacher’s responsibility to guide the students to improve their skills, and this will not be possible without critiquing the negatives while praising the positives.
In the examples which I have re-written, you see that the sentence has a clear subject (teacher’s responsibility), a verb (to guide..) and an object( the students..)
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05 Mar 2014, 15:30
hey HarishLearner

Can you please evaluate my essay on the same theme?

Here is my version:

The best way to teach is to praise positive actions and ignore negative ones.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.

The argument claims that the best way to teach is to praise positive actions and ignore negative ones. Stated in this way the argument fails to mention several key factors, on the basis of which it could be evaluated. The conclusion relies on assumptions, for which is no clear evidence. Therefore the argument is rather weak, unconvincing and has several flaws.

First, the argument readily assumes that the best way to teach is to praise positive position actions. This statement is stretch and not sustained in any way. Nowadays children are more spoiled than they were before. It is good to praise children that they know that they do something good. But not every action, otherwise he will get used on it, and praise will not be a prize anymore. The perfect balance is to praise child only for things that he put some effort in it. For example: when he get good mark in a school, win competition.

Second, the author is saying that the best way to teach is to ignore negative actions. This is again a very weak and stretch statement is stretch. On the market there is a lot of new technology, and children do know much more things than our grandparents did, since they can asses to networks almost from everywhere. They also do more bad things, since they are playing violent video games. If parents/teachers ignore negative actions, child will not learn what is right to do and what is wrong to do. Parents should punished children for negative actions, for example: clean the house, no usage of computer.

In conclusion, the argument is flawed for the above mentioned reasons and is therefore unconvincing. It could be considerably strengthened if the author clearly mentioned all the relevant facts. In order to assess the merits of a certain situation it is essential to have full knowledge of all contributing factors. Without this information, the argument remains unsubstantiated and open to debate.
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08 Mar 2014, 00:03
Hey every one;
I hope this is with regard to the AWA issue prompt for the GRE.
The Issue task on the GMAT has been replaced with the Integrated Reasoning task.

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08 Mar 2014, 08:50
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hey HarishLearner

Can you please evaluate my essay on the same theme?

Here is my version:

The best way to teach is to praise positive actions and ignore negative ones.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.

The argument claims that the best way to teach is to praise positive actions and ignore negative ones. Stated in this way the argument fails to mention several key factors, on the basis of which it could be evaluated. The conclusion relies on assumptions, for which is no clear evidence. Therefore the argument is rather weak, unconvincing and has several flaws.

First, the argument readily assumes that the best way to teach is to praise positive position actions. This statement is stretch and not sustained in any way. Nowadays children are more spoiled than they were before. It is good to praise children that they know that they do something good. But not every action, otherwise he will get used on it, and praise will not be a prize anymore. The perfect balance is to praise child only for things that he put some effort in it. For example: when he get good mark in a school, win competition.

Second, the author is saying that the best way to teach is to ignore negative actions. This is again a very weak and stretch statement is stretch. On the market there is a lot of new technology, and children do know much more things than our grandparents did, since they can asses to networks almost from everywhere. They also do more bad things, since they are playing violent video games. If parents/teachers ignore negative actions, child will not learn what is right to do and what is wrong to do. Parents should punished children for negative actions, for example: clean the house, no usage of computer.

In conclusion, the argument is flawed for the above mentioned reasons and is therefore unconvincing. It could be considerably strengthened if the author clearly mentioned all the relevant facts. In order to assess the merits of a certain situation it is essential to have full knowledge of all contributing factors. Without this information, the argument remains unsubstantiated and open to debate.

I believe that you have written an argument essay for an issue topic. I don't think you will get an argument topic which is so brief, because there is no scope for making assumptions and incomplete evidence.

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