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Can someone please evaluate my issue essay :) [#permalink] New post 29 Jan 2011, 11:33
Issue essay:

“Some have argued that the salaries of corporate executives should be linked to those of their lowest-paid employees. This, they argue, will improve relations between management and workers, reducing costly labor disputes and increasing worker productivity. What these people overlook, however, is that these high salaries are necessary to attract the best managers, the individuals whose decisions have the greatest impact on the overall well-being of the company.”
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The question whether a company should increase an employee's salary to keep that employee satisfied at his job, is a controversial and interesting one. Some argue that satisfaction comes from receiving benefits for what they so. On the other hand, others argue that it is the love for what they do that keeps employees satisfied. I, however agree with the latter argument and I will explain my view in the up coming paragraphs.

Firstly, some employee disputes are created from a lack of monetary benefits but others are not related with those kind of benefits at all. People have a need for feeling important,according to Abraham Maslow. That need must be meet in order for an employee to perform. An employee must feel that he or she has made an important contribution to the company to feel a sense of belonging. Furthermore, relations are not improved between subordinate and superior just by increasing the subordinates salary, creating a sense of belonging and belonging and acceptance will improve the employee's self esteem, thereby bringing the company closer toward achieving its goal.

Secondly, most great managers are attracted to jobs that have big salary. They are captivated by those jobs that prove challenging to them. And after they have solved the first challenge they look forward to meeting another challenge greater than the one they already solved. Tackling problems is what keeps an employee satisfied.

Admittedly, salary increases do give employees an incentive to do better and it does prove to them that their superiors give value for their work. However, there are many people in the world who are willing to do what they love for no salary whatsoever just for the sake of doing what they love and doing so well in that endeavor.

All in All, although every person may agree that employees must be happy with their work, I argue that the incentive that motivates an employee to perform exceedingly well is the value that employee has for his or her work and receiving the acknowledgment that that employee performed well.


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Argument essay:

“Without new ideas, any society will stagnate. New ideas can only be introduced in a society that permits freedom of expression. Therefore, if a society is to thrive, all limits on freedom of expression should be eliminated.”
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The author of the argument made above makes a valid statement. However, the author goes to the extreme to make such a couple of statements and uses assumptions to do so without considering several factors. I therefore find that the argument is flawed and unconvincing. I will explain how the argument may be improved in the following paragraphs.

To being with, the author makes a blatant statement that any society would stagnate if new ideas are not developed, a flawed reasoning created because the author fails to consider the fact that communication can play a key role to most society's development. For example, the Ancient Egyptians, the Romans and the Abyssinians were situated around the Mediterranean Sea that enabled them to communicate with civilizations outside of their respective states and ultimately made them one of the most powerful nations of the ancient world.

Secondly, it may be true that a society must permit freedom of expression to introduce new ideas. But that may not necessarily be the case. We can take, China for an example, the people did not practice freedom of expression, yet their society continues to thrive because they are informed citizens of the world and they are encouraged to come up with new ideas.

Thirdly, the statement that all limits on freedom of expression must be eliminated in order for a society to thrive is a bit over reaching, because such freedom of expression would expose children to the negative predicament the world finds itself in. Our children are the ones who will inherit the world from us and they must be nurtured in a positive environment where they are protected from viewing, listening to and or speaking about such negative issues that happen around the world today. In order for them to become positive contributors of society, a limit of freedom of expression is needed.

To conclude, the author of the argument must consider the factors that have been stated above to strengthen his or her argument.
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“Without new ideas, any society will stagnate. New ideas can only be introduced in a society that permits freedom of expression. Therefore, if a society is to thrive, all limits on freedom of expression should be eliminated.” - This is 6/6. Awesome !
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“Without new ideas, any society will stagnate. New ideas can only be introduced in a society that permits freedom of expression. Therefore, if a society is to thrive, all limits on freedom of expression should be eliminated.” - This is 6/6. Awesome !

OMG OMG OMG!!!! Seriously... Thank you, man! Thank you for taking the time.
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“Without new ideas, any society will stagnate. New ideas can only be introduced in a society that permits freedom of expression. Therefore, if a society is to thrive, all limits on freedom of expression should be eliminated.” - This is 6/6. Awesome !

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6/6...kidding. Its 4/6. I think your first para is alright. From the second para I sense a scope shift. And less support to the argument. Go from strength to strength and keep ideas in increasing order of persuasiveness. The most persuasive one at the end and close strong. 8-)

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Re: Can someone please evaluate my issue essay :) [#permalink] New post 15 Feb 2011, 11:48
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6/6...kidding. Its 4/6. I think your first para is alright. From the second para I sense a scope shift. And less support to the argument. Go from strength to strength and keep ideas in increasing order of persuasiveness. The most persuasive one at the end and close strong. 8-)

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Thanks! That's what I thought... I needed a 2nd opinion (other than my own :))
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Re: Can someone please evaluate my issue essay :) [#permalink] New post 15 Feb 2011, 11:56
hey no problem, not at all. Glad it helped.

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Re: Can someone please evaluate my issue essay :) [#permalink] New post 24 Apr 2011, 01:32
“Some have argued that the salaries of corporate executives should be linked to those of their lowest-paid employees. This, they argue, will improve relations between management and workers, reducing costly labor disputes and increasing worker productivity. What these people overlook, however, is that these high salaries are necessary to attract the best managers, the individuals whose decisions have the greatest impact on the overall well-being of the company.”

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As per the issue, some people have argued that the salaries of corporate executives should be linked to those of their lowest-paid employees. They believe that this will improve relations between management and workers, reducing costly labor disputes and increasing worker productivity. However, the fact which has been overlooked is that high salaries are necessary to attract the best managers whose decisions have the greatest impact on the overall well-being of the company.
While each side has its strengths and weaknesses, I believe that the salaries of corporate executives cannot be linked to their lowest-paid employees practically. To further substantiate my viewpoint, I would like to state various reasons in the coming paragraphs.

Firstly, a corporate employee is one of the biggest assets to an organisation. It is him, who shapes the future growth path of an organisation. A corporate employee can either make or break an organisation and thus, recruiting and retaining one who is the most suitable to the organisation is a very important task of the company. Generally, such corporate executives are highly educated and possess a holistic approach in managing an organisation. Clearly, recruiting and retaining such employees cannot come cheap to an organisation. Considering the competition in the industry which is quite fierce in today's corporate environment, it is important that the corporate employee is paid well and his salary is in tandem with the industry standard.

Secondly, when an organisation pays its lowest-paid employees, it definitely has to do that as per the market standards. Under such circumstances, the organisation is already paying its employees what they are worth of. If they are not doing so, it boils down to attrition because of fierce competition within the industry. No organisation would want to have high attrition rates because the next employee who takes the place of an old once has to come at a costly price; both in terms of salary and knowledge. If this approach is assumed, the salaries are already as per the standards and thus the question of an employee being demotivated doesn't arises in the first place.

Some may argue that the employees see the salaries of corporate executives too high which is almost 100-200 times what lowest paying employees get. However, this argument is flawed since they should understand the value of a corporate employee, the kind of decisions he makes to grow an organisation and the way the brand of the organisation is built. Clearly, lowest paid employees are at fault if they ask their salaries to be linked to the salary of corporate executives.

In conclusion, we understand that the corporate executives bring a lot to the table of organisation and thus retaining them is very important. If that needs to be done, they have to be paid challenging salaries in tandem with the industry standard and the lowest paid employees shouldn't ask their salaries to be linked to the salaries of corporate executives
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Re: Can someone please evaluate my issue essay :) [#permalink] New post 11 Sep 2011, 13:07
Hi,

i have also written an essay on this topic in a mock CAT. this was written in 30 mins . Can anyone please please evaluate this.




Although some people argue that the salaries of corporate executives should be linked to those of their lowest-paid employees for improving relations between management and workers, reducing costly labour disputes and increasing worker productivity, I personally don’t agree with this point of view. I fully support the other side as high salaries are necessary to attract the best managers, the individuals whose decisions have the greatest impact on the overall well-being of the company. In this essay I will highlight various reasons and examples in the favour of my viewpoint.

The corporate executives are the people who are entrusted with the very important job of making the defining decisions which govern the state of the their company. These decisions can be very complex and difficult with a number of options available. In such situations only a person with a very high knowledge about the field in question and years of experience in that field is capable of taking such situations. An executive of such calibre cannot be expected to work for a salary comparable to the salary of a worker whose job is much simpler. The high knowledge level and and years of experience deserves equally high pay packages. The more the important work carried out, the higher should be the salary.

Another serious effect of linking the salary corporate executives to those of the lowest paid employees is demotivation of the employees. If all the salaries are linked, lower level workers may not remain motivated enough to climb the corporate hierarchy to gain promotions as there will be no incentive of huge advances in pay packages. Currently one of the biggest employee motivator is the prospect of higher wages earned by achieving promotion. As an example we should take a look at the C.E.O. of Pepsi, Indra Nooyi. Indra might be one of the highest paid CEOs in the world, but she has reached such a position by climbing the corporate ladder from the lower levels in the Indian division of Pepsi. Today she heads the worldwide operations of Pepsi. This effect directly negates the benefit this proposal desired to achieve, increasing worker productivity.

This factor can also effect the higher corporate executives as they will not have the burden to justify their extremely high pay packages which they had previously. They might start to lax in their work. And they may also start to look at other opportunities elsewhere, where they could get getter pay packages. And this could get frequent with every executive that arrives resulting in instability.

In conclusion, I would say that the salaries of corporate executives should not be linked to those of their lowest-paid employees. This will ensure that the best people are recruited to take the biggest and the toughest decisions and make sure that the motivation levels are maintained in the workers at lower level.
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