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Heightened land erosion, caused by human activity, has many negative effects including the following: algae blooms, coral reef destruction, imbalance of the fish population, and the introduction of harmful chemicals to the ocean's environment.
A) including the following: algae blooms, coral reef destruction, imbalance of the fish population, and the introduction of harmful chemicals to the ocean's environment.
B) including: algae blooms, coral reef destruction, imbalance of the fish population, and harmful chemicals entering the ocean's environment.
C) including: algae blooms, coral reef destruction, imbalance of the fish population, and the introduction of harmful chemicals to the ocean's environment.
D) including the following: algae blooms, coral reef destruction, imbalance of the fish population, and harmful chemicals entering the ocean’s environment.
E) including the following: algae blooms, coral reef destruction, certain fish populations rising, certain fish populations falling, and the introduction of harmful chemicals to the ocean’s environment.

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Re: Heightened land erosion [#permalink] New post 21 Dec 2010, 10:17
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The basic essence of the use of colon is that the preceding clause lying before the mark, should not leave an inkling of incompleteness. It should stand by itself but more importantly should not tend to end abruptly in meaning before the colon and should not lean on the list for completing the meaning. Thus it becomes essential, wordy though, to use the word 'following'. B and C therefore fall by the wayside.

Among A, D and E, D breaks the sense of llism by using an absolute phrase ‘ harmful chemicals entering’ in the fourth arm of the list.
E distorts the meaning in trying to define imbalance of fish population in a weird way.

Maintaining perfect llism, A stands out as the eligible choice, IMO.
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Re: Heightened land erosion [#permalink] New post 21 Dec 2010, 09:48
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I'd go with A

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I thought the shorter version was correct as well at first glance. However, the use of colon requires that the first clause is indepedent.

A slight modification,
"Heightened land erosion has many negative effects including."

Compare with

"Heightened land erosion has many negative effects including the following."

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Re: Heightened land erosion [#permalink] New post 03 Apr 2011, 19:51
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All the options have colons. A colon is typically used to introduce something that follows, such as a list or a quotation.
A colon marks a discontinuity in a sentence with more force than a comma or semicolon.
In C lets say the colon was not there- the sentence would still have been perfect. I have 5 friends including X Y Z A and B.
Use of 'the following' makes the 1st part of the sentence a complete construction gramatically, hence preparing for the discontinuity introduced in the sentence by the use of the colon subsequently.
Also, it prepares the reader that a list is about to be given, which is the indication of the use of colon.
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Re: Heightened land erosion [#permalink] New post 21 Dec 2010, 09:13
IMO, it is B.
"including the following" seems wordy.
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Re: Heightened land erosion [#permalink] New post 21 Dec 2010, 11:11
A... OA pls ? , but this usage of following after colon is really offering new prespective
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Re: Heightened land erosion [#permalink] New post 21 Dec 2010, 18:34
Thanks Daagh and Mackieman. New insights with just a couple of Days left for my D-Day.

Now i have to look into punctuations once again :-(

hirendhanak - What they both said is the OE and the OA is A
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Re: Heightened land erosion [#permalink] New post 21 Dec 2010, 18:36
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IMO, it is B.
"including the following" seems wordy.



Thought the same and was surprised when I knew the OA
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Re: Heightened land erosion [#permalink] New post 03 Jan 2011, 20:44
OA says: The construction of the list in this sentence is incorrect. In a list, the word immediately preceding the colon should rename the items found in the list. Including does not rename the items in the list.

What is the sentence supposed to mean? Pardon, me but I am clueless.
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Re: Heightened land erosion [#permalink] New post 21 Mar 2011, 11:14
Garimavyas, A and C are almost equal. Why is "the following" necessary?

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Heightened land erosion, caused by human activity, has many negative effects including the following: algae blooms, coral reef destruction, imbalance of the fish population, and the introduction of harmful chemicals to the ocean's environment.
A) including the following: algae blooms, coral reef destruction, imbalance of the fish population, and the introduction of harmful chemicals to the ocean's environment.
B) including: algae blooms, coral reef destruction, imbalance of the fish population, and harmful chemicals entering the ocean's environment.
C) including: algae blooms, coral reef destruction, imbalance of the fish population, and the introduction of harmful chemicals to the ocean's environment.
D) including the following: algae blooms, coral reef destruction, imbalance of the fish population, and harmful chemicals entering the ocean’s environment.
E) including the following: algae blooms, coral reef destruction, certain fish populations rising, certain fish populations falling, and the introduction of harmful chemicals to the ocean’s environment.

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Re: Heightened land erosion [#permalink] New post 03 Apr 2011, 18:50
Could someone kindly confirm why C is incorrect ?

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Heightened land erosion, caused by human activity, has many negative effects including the following: algae blooms, coral reef destruction, imbalance of the fish population, and the introduction of harmful chemicals to the ocean's environment.
A) including the following: algae blooms, coral reef destruction, imbalance of the fish population, and the introduction of harmful chemicals to the ocean's environment.
B) including: algae blooms, coral reef destruction, imbalance of the fish population, and harmful chemicals entering the ocean's environment.
C) including: algae blooms, coral reef destruction, imbalance of the fish population, and the introduction of harmful chemicals to the ocean's environment.
D) including the following: algae blooms, coral reef destruction, imbalance of the fish population, and harmful chemicals entering the ocean’s environment.
E) including the following: algae blooms, coral reef destruction, certain fish populations rising, certain fish populations falling, and the introduction of harmful chemicals to the ocean’s environment.

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Re: Heightened land erosion [#permalink] New post 03 Apr 2011, 23:35
A conveys the same meaning as C with two more words. Still not convinced. Is there any explanation from Ron?
The common sense says use less words when both the options convey same meaning.

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Re: Heightened land erosion, caused by human activity, has many [#permalink] New post 30 Jan 2012, 12:15
Heightened land erosion, caused by human activity, has many negative effects including the following: algae blooms, coral reef destruction, imbalance of the fish population, and the introduction of harmful chemicals to the ocean's environment.
A) including the following: algae blooms, coral reef destruction, imbalance of the fish population, and the introduction of harmful chemicals to the ocean's environment.
B) including: algae blooms, coral reef destruction, imbalance of the fish population, and harmful chemicals entering the ocean's environment.
C) including: algae blooms, coral reef destruction, imbalance of the fish population, and the introduction of harmful chemicals to the ocean's environment.
D) including the following: algae blooms, coral reef destruction, imbalance of the fish population, and harmful chemicals entering the ocean’s environment.
E) including the following: algae blooms, coral reef destruction, certain fish populations rising, certain fish populations falling, and the introduction of harmful chemicals to the ocean’s environment.
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Re: Heightened land erosion, caused by human activity, has many [#permalink] New post 13 May 2012, 22:28
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Heightened land erosion, caused by human activity, has many negative effects including the following: algae blooms, coral reef destruction, imbalance of the fish population, and the introduction of harmful chemicals to the ocean's environment.
A) including the following: algae blooms, coral reef destruction, imbalance of the fish population, and the introduction of harmful chemicals to the ocean's environment.
B) including: algae blooms, coral reef destruction, imbalance of the fish population, and harmful chemicals entering the ocean's environment.
C) including: algae blooms, coral reef destruction, imbalance of the fish population, and the introduction of harmful chemicals to the ocean's environment.
D) including the following: algae blooms, coral reef destruction, imbalance of the fish population, and harmful chemicals entering the ocean’s environment.
E) including the following: algae blooms, coral reef destruction, certain fish populations rising, certain fish populations falling, and the introduction of harmful chemicals to the ocean’s environment.

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Can someone help on the usage of "including:" / "including the following:" ... I though A is wordy
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Re: Heightened land erosion, caused by human activity, has many [#permalink] New post 28 Aug 2012, 03:36
Great Explanation Daagh! I was breaking my head what was the difference! Thank U
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Re: Heightened land erosion, caused by human activity, has many [#permalink] New post 05 Jul 2014, 02:05
If the sentence does not contain ':' colon would it be correct to omit the ' the following' then ... I mean including will makes complete sense in that case .. please suggest
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Re: Heightened land erosion, caused by human activity, has many [#permalink] New post 07 Jul 2014, 04:22
Heightened land erosion, caused by human activity, has many negative effects including the following: algae blooms, coral reef destruction, imbalance of the fish population, and the introduction of harmful chemicals to the ocean's environment.
A) including the following: algae blooms, coral reef destruction, imbalance of the fish population, and the introduction of harmful chemicals to the ocean's environment.
B) including: algae blooms, coral reef destruction, imbalance of the fish population, and harmful chemicals entering the ocean's environment - parallellism issue.
C) including: algae blooms, coral reef destruction, imbalance of the fish population, and the introduction of harmful chemicals to the ocean's environment.
D) including the following: algae blooms, coral reef destruction, imbalance of the fish population, and harmful chemicals entering the ocean’s environment.
E) including the following: algae blooms, coral reef destruction, certain fish populations rising, certain fish populations falling, and the introduction of harmful chemicals to the ocean’s environment

"including the following: " wrng semi colon usage issue - Source MGMAT - Sentence Correction - Ed . 5 - Chapter 10 and also refer http://academics.smcvt.edu/writingctr/semicolons.htm
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