I recently completed the first draft of my Columbia essays. For reference the questions were
1.) Post MBA Goals. Why Columbia?
2.) Entrepreneurship experience
3.) Changing business environment - based on speech
4.) Greatest passion
Now, I got one of my senior colleagues to have a look. His comments are
1.) There is almost no mention of my current job in the essays --- this is my greatest problem. Essay 3 and 4 do not pertain to my current job except in the most superficial way. My Post MBA goal leads to a career change so Essay 1 is also gone. Left is Essay 2 where I mentioned something I did in college. What do I do?
2.) My Why Columbia sounds like a list of whats good about Columbia. He says I should reduce the list and talk in detail about a lesser number of things. Again, what do I do??