Vercules wrote:
Unlike Acanthus, whose wedding was sparsely attended being married in a low profile community church, Tom’s was attended by more than seven-hundred guests and his marriage’s location lies in a famous 15th-century Odescalchi Castle in Bracciano, Italy.
"Unlike x, y." X and Y must not be disparate. I.e. one cannot compare Acanthus to a wedding.
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A) being married in a low profile community church, Tom’s was attended by more than seven hundred guests and held in a 15th century Odescalchi Castle which is famous and in Bracciano, Italy.
"Unlike Acanthus, Tom's was" - No.
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B) being married in a low profile community church, Tom’s wedding was attended by more than seven hundred guests and his marriage’s location lies in a famous 15th-century Odescalchi Castle in Bracciano, Italy.
"Unlike Acanthus, Tom's wedding was" - No.
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C) and he was married in a low profile community church, Tom had a wedding attended by more than seven hundred guests and held in a famous 15th century Odescalchi Castle in Bracciano, Italy.
"Unlike Acanthus, Tom had a wedding" - Yes.
But: "and he was married": No. "he" is shortly preceded by "whose" and such combination is sloppy.
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D) and who was married in a low profile community church, Tom’s wedding was attended by more than seven hundred guests and held in a famous 15th century Odescalchi Castle in Bracciano, Italy.
"Unlike Acanthus, Tom's wedding was" - No.
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E) and who was married in a low profile community church, Tom had a wedding attended by more than seven hundred guests and held in a famous 15th century Odescalchi Castle in Bracciano, Italy.
"Unlike Acanthus, Tom had a wedding" - Yes. Wedding was attended and held - OK. My choice.