Here are some points I can think of
1. A bit on the short side, you want to try and add at least one more paragraph. Something around 400 words would be a lot better.
2. For your first point, if I understand correctly you are trying to suggest that financial stability leads to order. It is, however, a bit unclear from your example. If Mr. Madoff jeopardized the financial firms that led to a financial crisis, as a reader, it doesn't really help me make the connection between financial well being and order.
3. The last sentence on the first paragraph is unclear. Maybe splitting the sentences would help.
4. Second point would really benefit from a good example. How is it a risk for a country to not invest in the well being of its people? One example could be the state of minorities in several countries. You can suggest that minorities lacking means to support themselves tend to resort to criminal activities.
I think you have some excellent points to support your argument but your examples could use some work. In its current state, I would rate the essay between 3.0 and 4.0.
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