This essay unfortunately gets a 2.
It's very short, which isn't in and of itself problematic, but shows of that the language is somewhat simplistic. The reasoning is also limited. The author claims that poor nutrition is the cause of the increase
in diabetes, not the "sole cause" of diabetes as you claim in your second paragraph; you also don't tie together why government control is related to customer preference.
Take a look at the top scoring sample essays in Kaplan's book
and from the Official Guide, to get an idea for the level of writing expected, and keep working on it!
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