This essay lays out many assumptions and does some analysis but the lack of organization and paragraph structure hurt the overall effect. I would give this essay a 2.5 or 3 as written.
your introduction does not need to list all of the points you are going to make in the article and doing so in this paragraph takes away from the point of the introduction, which is that the argument is logically unconvincing.
your body paragraph should be separated by ideas. ideally each paragraph should bring up one point and analyze it carefully.
your conclusion isn't quite on point as the argument can be evaluated whether or not it has the recommended items - it is just not logically cohesive.
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