Hi guys, I am preparing for the test. I will have it very soon.
I would really appreciate your feedback. For each feeback or rating I will give you a kudos.
Please rate my essay from 0 to 30. You may provide additional comments and point out my weaknesses it would be very helpful. But if you are busy, please only rate my essay becasue am concerned a lot with the total score.
Time: I have written it in 30 minutes
Word count: 480.
Topic: Do you agree or disagree with the following topic: Childhood is the happiest time of person's life.
Some people think that childhood is the happiest time of a person's life. Others believe that mature age is happiest time of a person's life. The aforementioned issue is a controversial one but a closer examination reveals that childhood is not the happiest time of a person's life for several reasons.
One reason is that as a person growth he or she understands more and more about the life and surrounding world. Knowledge gives happiness. For example, when I was a child I wanted to grow up as far as possible because I wanted to learn how to read. Later, when I learned reading knowledge I received allowed me to acquire some interests and hobbies and further I enjoyed the life more and feel myself very happy about it. Clearly, if I were to remain a child I would have had only few interests and my vision of the surrounding world would have been limited. Therefore, as a person grows he or she acquires more and more knowledge and experience and this leads to more varied life experience and happiness.
Another reason is that as people grow and acquire knowledge in schools and then in university and then began work, they have earn money. Earned money may provide even more happiness, because people may spend their money on things they like to do. For example, when I was a student in high school I read a lot of stories of Mein Reed, he was my favourite author at that time. His stories are about different exotic countries and what adventures people experienced in that countries. I was dreaming about traveling and visiting a lot of exotic countries. Then, when I started to work I have materialized my dreams and have visited a lot fo countries since then. Thus, money very often makes people happy by allowing them to do what they want.
Perhaps the best reason is that the more mature is the person the more independent he or she becomes and therefore may do whatever he or she wants. For, example, when I was a child my mother did not allow me to go outside after 7 p.m., but when I was a student in university and studied abroad I was free and had a lot of freedom and I am very happy that I had an opportunity to decide myself what to do and where to go without any restrictions from my parents. Hence, the scenes of freedom or let say lack of my parents' supervision made me feel happy.
In summary, while there are arguments to be made for both sides, it is clear that the level of happiness is measured by person's maturity and therefore childhood is not a happiest time of a person's life. Moreover, I believe that when I become older I will be even happier because I will understand a lot of things.
Follow me, if you find my explanations useful.
Audaces fortuna juvat!
Get the best GMAT Prep Resources with GMAT Club Premium Membership