“Education has become the main provider of individual opportunity in our society. Just as property and money once were the keys to success, education has now become the element that most ensures success in life.”
In your opinion, how accurate is the view expressed above? Explain, using reasons and examples based on your own experience, observations, or reading.

I do agree with the view expressed above because in this world, which is moving towards knowledge economy, education and knowledge have become the key drivers for success. Better the education and knowledge you have, better is your chances of achieving success. Now a days, an idea, which is creative and innovative and supported by timely knowledge to convert it into an end product, is more important than money and capital because it is easier to find people with money who are ready to support bright ideas. Not only that, education has helped people from all strata of society- from top to bottom- to move up in their life and achieve success.


In order to support my views, let me take an example and illustrate how education has transformed many people in India. India, as we know, has one of the largest population of poor people. Yet many poor people were able to grab the opportunities provided by IT revolution and become successful in life just because of their good education. People who had property and money without any education have remained where they are but people who had education in addition to money and property have become successful entrepreneurs.

In the present world, no one can deny the fact that education will open up a number of opportunities in myriad fields such as engineering, medicine, information technology, biotechnology etc. Your education and knowledge can be put to use in any one of these fields to achieve success. That is the reason behind strong competition to enter prestigious institution such as IITs and IIMs. For example more than 3, 00, 000 students are appearing for the IIM's entrance examination and competing for just about 1000 plus odd seats available.

On the other hand, people without a good education are struggling to come up in their lives. Without proper education they are finding it hard to find jobs to meet their daily basic needs, let alone achieving success. Without any knowledge and skill sets it has become next to impossible to make these people employable in this fast growing knowledge sector. Computers and machine automation is adding to the owes of uneducated people by replacing them in many industries.

It can be easily concluded that level of education is directly proportional to the opportunities one gets and the success one achieves. Education and knowledge have become more important factors in the barometer of success, far ahead of money and property.


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