The common notion that workers are generally apathetic- essay review
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06 May 2015, 22:17
Hi,
I am new to the forum and this is my first essay. I will really appreciate if you could review the essay and point out the mistakes.
The following appeared in the editorial section of a corporate newsletter:
“The common notion that workers are generally apathetic about management issues is false, or at least outdated: a recently published survey indicates that 79 percent of the nearly 1,200 workers who responded to survey questionnaires expressed a high level of interest in the topics of corporate restructuring and redesign of benefits programs.”
The presented argument is flawed because of the assumptions it made without providing proper reasoning. First, 1200 workers that are surveyed cannot represent all the workers. Also, even the workers who responded showed their interest only in topics of corporate restructuring and redesign of benefits, and not for all the management issues.
Argument wrongly assumes that 1200 workers that are surveyed represent the whole population of the workers. It is quite possible that the surveyed group of workers is all from same class of workers and has certain interests in management while the remaining classes of workers are still apathetic about management issues. Argument could be stronger if some information regarding the type of workers surveyed would have been provided. The conclusion drawn would be convincing if it could be proved that surveyed workers belongs to all the classes of workers.
Secondly, Even the workers that responded in the survey showed their interest only in topics of corporate restructuring and redesign of benefits. This does not mean that workers are interested in all the management issues. There are chances that workers are only interested in the above-mentioned issues, because those issues benefit them directly, and are apathetic about rest of the management issues.
Argument could be made stronger if details of surveyed workers would have been provided. Also, Management issues is a vast set and having interest in just two topics does not necessarily means that one has an interest in all the management issues