The javelin has a sharp point, which is more obviously dangerous than the discus; moreover, the discus is actually more likely to injure bystanders because, especially when wet, it can slip out of the thrower's hand and fly in a random trajectory.


a) javelin has a sharp point, which is more obviously dangerous than the discus; moreover,
b) javelin has a sharp point and is obviously more dangerous than the discus; however,
c) javelin's sharp point is obviously more dangerous than the discus, even though
d) javelin's sharp point makes it obviously more dangerous than the discus, even though
e) javelin, with its sharp point, is more obviously dangerous than the discus; however,

This one is tricky. You're right to get stuck between B and E, but the problem is the subtle change in meaning in B.

"Is obviously more dangerous" has a different meaning from "is more obviously dangerous" and thus distorts the original sentence's intention. The first means that in fact it is more dangerous, but that's actually not true since the discus apparently is. So while the javelin but appear more obviously dangerous, the discus is apparently (NOW it's obviously) more dangerous.
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However,both have vast difference in their meaning.

b) javelin has a sharp point and is obviously more dangerous than the discus; however,

When we say Javelin is more obviously dangerous, then we are saying that it is very clear that javelin is more dangerous than discus; However that is not so; It is the discus that is more dangerous. So B is against the grain of using the transitional contrast adverb however.

e) Javelin, with its sharp point, is more obviously dangerous than the discus; however,

When we say that the javelin is more obviously dangerous than discus, we are surmising that Javelin is apparently more dangerous than discus; however, in reality discus is more dangerous. Now the contrast adverb however, fits in smugly.
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B – obviously more dangerous is what we say when we speak
E – looks good from gmat perspective but ‘more obviously dangerous’ doesn’t seem to be right. Can one of the experts pls explain..
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Was very easy to get it down to B and E.
Later, I chose E because E is more close to what this sentence wants to say.
"Its because of the sharp point, javelin looks obviously more dangerous".
B - when we use 'and' conjunction, it doesn't show any relationship b/w javelin's sharp point and its being dangerous.
So B gets eliminated. Not sure if everyone agrees with my reasoning, but this is how I got E.
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Wonder no one has chosen D here?.
My take:
a) javelin has a sharp point, which is more obviously dangerous than the discus; moreover,

which modified point instead of javelin.
b) javelin has a sharp point and is obviously more dangerous than the discus; however,

; is used to join independent clauses. however shows dependency from first clause.
c) javelin's sharp point is obviously more dangerous than the discus, even though

Incorrect comparison
d) javelin's sharp point makes it obviously more dangerous than the discus, even though

though bit wordy, doesnt have any grammatical error.
e) javelin, with its sharp point, is more obviously dangerous than the discus; however

incorrect use of ;. Dependent clauses are added. More obviously dangerous doesnt sound right , although I'm honestly not sure about this.

Correct Ans should be D.
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The reason no one has picked D is because you don't compare apples to oranges...that is adjective to a noun....Javelin's and Discus... Comparison entities must be comparable. Hope this helps

Hi there,

This is the sentence with Choice B:

The javelin has a sharp point and is obviously more dangerous than the discus; however, the discus is actually more likely to injure bystanders because, especially when wet, it can slip out of the thrower's hand and fly in a random trajectory.

This choice is not correct because it takes the reason that makes the javelin “more obviously dangerous”. Per this choice, the javelin has two traits:
1. It has a sharp point.
2. It is more dangerous than the discus.

This choice fails to say that the javelin becomes obviously dangerous because it has a sharp point. Choice E corrects this error. It clearly says that the javelin is more dangerous because of its sharp point.

Now let’s see the use of “more obviously dangerous” and “obviously more dangerous”. Notice the placement of the word “more”. In the original sentence, it modifies “obviously” and not “dangerous”. Javelin is obviously dangerous. But what makes it “more” obviously dangerous is its sharp point.

This brings us to the answer of the question you asked. The original sentence always sets the context in which the sentence has been written. It guides us toward the logical intended meaning of the sentence. At e-gmat, we add a lot of importance to spending time with the original sentence to understand the logical meaning. This goes for each and every sentence, easy or difficult.

Hope this helps.
Thanks.
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Hi @archit143,

D) javelin's sharp point makes it obviously more dangerous than the discus, even though: Incorrect.

Notice the use of “it” in this choice. This pronoun stands for “sharp point”. It cannot refer to “javelin’s” because this entity is a modifier, an adjective. So “it” stands for “sharp point”. Now per this choice, “sharp point” has been compared to “discus”. These two entities are not comparable. This illogical comparison makes this choice incorrect.

Also the placement of “more” is not correct in this choice. Read my previous post on the usage of “more” in this sentence.

“however” also starts fresh sentences. We form complete sentences with “however”. This is the reason why use of semicolon is not incorrect in some of the answer choices, including the correct one.

Hope this helps.
Thanks.
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Nice explanation Shraddha!! I thought abount the reason for being dangerous issue but was stumped by "more obviously dangerous"