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This sentence while conveying the meaning is not [#permalink]
 01 Feb 2006, 14:04
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This sentence while conveying the meaning is not grammatically right. Just came upon it from an email i recieved.
"I just want to convey that I am open to wherever company XYZ can best utilize my skills, while at the same time ensuring that I have a high learning curve, enriching experience and monetarily satisfied"
No OA for this. Hope the gurus in this forum will chew it up and throw the right sentence.
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Re: SC salary negotiations. [#permalink]
01 Feb 2006, 14:20
El Torro wrote: This sentence while conveying the meaning is not grammatically right. Just came upon it from an email i recieved.
"I just want to convey that I am open to wherever company XYZ can best utilize my skills, while at the same time ensuring that I have a high learning curve, enriching experience and monetarily satisfied"
No OA for this. Hope the gurus in this forum will chew it up and throw the right sentence.
One thing i see is Redundency
While and at the same time both means the same thing. So, "at the same time" can be easily removed.
P.S: I am not a guru 
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Re: SC salary negotiations. [#permalink]
01 Feb 2006, 14:24
cool_jonny009 wrote: El Torro wrote: This sentence while conveying the meaning is not grammatically right. Just came upon it from an email i recieved.
"I just want to convey that I am open to wherever company XYZ can best utilize my skills, while at the same time ensuring that I have a high learning curve, enriching experience and monetarily satisfied"
No OA for this. Hope the gurus in this forum will chew it up and throw the right sentence. One thing i see is Redundency While and at the same time both means the same thing. So, "at the same time" can be easily removed. P.S: I am not a guru i think i will second jonny... i suggest we remove while also and use "and" .. waiting for the 700s club to answer 
I just want to convey that I am open to wherever company XYZ can best utilize my skills, and I have a high learning curve, enriching experience and monetarily satisfied
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yup you are right "razrulz"
but "and that" will make the sentence || also
I just want to convey that I am open to wherever company XYZ can best utilize my skills, and that I have a high learning curve, enriching experience and monetarily satisfied
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Oh we need ||ism at the end of the sentence...
I just want to convey that I am open to wherever company XYZ can best utilize my skills, while at the same time ensuring that I have a high learning curve, AN enriching experience and monetarily satisfied monetary satisfaction
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just looking at the response. Thanks guys. I could use the corrected form to diplomatically state my demands to my bosses.
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