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The argument claims that the deterioration of the postal service can be reversed by an increase in the price of postage stamps and makes the same recommendation to the government. The argument vouches for the effectiveness of the recommendation based on certain assumptions for which no clear evidence is provided. Therefore, the argument is unconvincing and falls apart at the seams.

First, the argument makes the assumption of accrediting the deterioration of postal services to strain on the existing system and low morale. However, no evidence has been provided to support this assumption. There could be other reasons for the deterioration of postal services such as poor management, people preferring alternatives to postal services such as e-mail or private couriers, high prices of postal services, etc. This assumption could have been bolstered by the provision of hard evidence to suggest strain on the existing system and low morale as the reasons for the deterioration of postal services.

Second, the argument claims that raising the price of the postage stamps will generate larger revenues. It predicts that a rise in prices of postage stamps will lead to a decline in the volume of mail but will still generate larger revenues. This statement is a stretch and is not substantiated in any way. The argument would have been much clearer had it provided statistics regarding the prices and usage of the postage stamps. For example, if the initial number of postage stamps used is 50 and the price of each stamp is $1, then the revenue generated is $50; if the price is increased to $2 per postage stamp but the number of stamps used per month declines to 20, then the revenue generated is $40. Hence, the revenue generated might decrease. Due to a rise in the prices, there may be a steep decline in the usage of postage stamps as people may find more economic alternatives to using the postage stamps. Moreover, since the postal services have already deteriorated, increase in price will not be justified to consumers and hence increased revenues will not be reflected at least in the short term. Even if the revenues are increased, the money management at the postal department should also be considered to address the problem at hand.

Finally the argument assumes that a reduction in volume of mail will eliminate the strain on the existing system and contribute to improved morale. However, this could be an incorrect assumption because, if the volume of mail reduces steeply, then it may lead to lay-offs to keep up with falling revenues. This could have a reverse effect and could lead to low morale among workers, which, in turn, may lead to further deterioration of the postal services.

In summary, the argument fails to convince because of the aforementioned faulty assumptions. The argument could have been strengthened by providing effective evidence for stating strain on the existing system and low morale as the reasons behind deterioration of the postal system. If the argument had drawn upon the examples as suggested and plugged in the holes in reasoning, it would have been far sounder on the whole.