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When drafting the Declaration of Sentiments that was adopted at the Seneca Falls Women’s Rights Conventions in 1848, included in it by the author, Elizabeth Cady Stanton, was a call for female enfranchisement.


a When drafting the Declaration of Sentiments that was adopted at the Seneca Falls Women’s Rights Conventions in 1848, included in it by the author, Elizabeth Cady Stanton, was a call for female enfranchisement.

b. Including a call for female enfranchisement, a draft of the Declaration of Sentiments was adopted at the Seneca Falls Women’s Rights Conventions in 1848 that Elizabeth Cady Stanton wrote.

c. When the Declaration of Sentiments drafted by Elizabeth Cady Stanton was adopted at the Seneca Falls Women’s Rights Convention in 1848, a call for female enfranchisement had been included in it .

d. A call for female enfranchisement, included in Elizabeth Cady Stanton’s draft of the Declaration of Sentiments in 1848, that was adopted by the Seneca Falls Women’s Rights Convention.

e. When Elizabeth Cady Stanton drafted the Declaration of Sentiments that was adopted at the Seneca Falls Women’s Rights Convention in 1848, she included in it a call for female enfranchisement.
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When drafting the Declaration of Sentiments that was adopted at the Seneca Falls Women’s Rights Conventions in 1848, included in it by the author, Elizabeth Cady Stanton, was a call for female enfranchisement.

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The way this sentence is written the meaning is not very clear. So let us decipher the meaning first. We get some information from this sentence. Elizabeth Cady Stanton drafted the DoS. She included in it a call for female enfranchisement. This DoS was adopted at the Seneca Falls Women’s Rights Conventions in 1848.

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Error Analysis:

1. Modifier “When drafting …” is ambiguous in its role. We don’t know what it is modifying.
2. This sentence needs to be written in a way so that the meaning is easy to comprehend.

POE:

Choice A: When drafting the Declaration of Sentiments that was adopted at the Seneca Falls Women’s Rights Conventions in 1848, included n it by the author, Elizabeth Cady Stanton, was a call for female enfranchisement. Incorrect for the reason stated above.

Choice B: Including a call for female enfranchisement, a draft of the Declaration of Sentiments was adopted at the Seneca Falls Women’s Rights Conventions in 1848 that Elizabeth Cady Stanton wrote. Incorrect.
1. The opening modifier is illogically modifying “a draft”. The draft did not do the action of including the call.
2. This choice fails to say that who included the call for women enfranchisement in the DoS.

Choice C: When the Declaration of Sentiments drafted by Elizabeth Cady Stanton was adopted at the Seneca Falls Women’s Rights Convention in 1848, a call for female enfranchisement had been included in it. Incorrect. This choice fails to say who included the call in the DoS.

Choice D: A call for female enfranchisement, included in Elizabeth Cady Stanton’s draft of the Declaration of Sentiments in 1848, that was adopted by the Seneca Falls Women’s Rights Convention. Incorrect. This choice lacks a main verb and hence is a fragment.

Choice E: When Elizabeth Cady Stanton drafted the Declaration of Sentiments that was adopted at the Seneca Falls Women’s Rights Convention in 1848, she included in it a call for female enfranchisement. Correct. All the information is clearly given in this choice.

PS- Pronoun “it” clearly refers to DoS because the sentence clearly says that Stanton drafted the DoS, and when she drafted it, she included in “it” (DoS) the call for women enfranchisement.

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A) When drafting the Declaration of Sentiments that was adopted at the Seneca Falls Women's Rights Convention in 1848, included in it by the author, Elizabeth Cady Stanton, was a call for female enfranchisement. - ambiguous it, A person can't be a call, Dependent caluse and main clause dont makes any sens

B) Including a call for female enfranchisement, a draft of the Declaration of Sentiments was adopted at the Seneca Falls Women's Rights Convention in 1848 that Elizabeth Cady Stanton wrote. - That starts a clause- verb missing in the last part;

C) When the Declaration of Sentiments drafted by Elizabeth Cady Stanton was adopted at the Seneca Falls Women's Convention in 1848, a call for female enfranchisement had been included in it. - had been is wrong here.

D) A call for female enfranchisement, included in Elizabeth Cady Stanton's draft of the Declaration of Sentiments in 1848, that was adopted by the Seneca Falls Women's Rights Convention. -It means that call was adopted. Original sentence says that draft was adopted

E) When Elizabeth Cady Stanton drafted the Declaration of Sentiments that was adopted at the Seneca Falls Women's Rights Convention in 1848, she included in it a call for female enfranchisement. - Correct choice
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When drafting the Declaration of Sentiments that was adopted at the Seneca Falls Women’s Rights Conventions in 1848, included n it by the author, Elizabeth Cady Stanton, was a call for female enfranchisement.


a When drafting the Declaration of Sentiments that was adopted at the Seneca Falls Women’s Rights Conventions in 1848, included n it by the author, Elizabeth Cady Stanton, was a call for female enfranchisement.

b. Including a call for female enfranchisement, a draft of the Declaration of Sentiments was adopted at the Seneca Falls Women’s Rights Conventions in 1848 that Elizabeth Cady Stanton wrote.

c. When the Declaration of Sentiments drafted by Elizabeth Cady Stanton was adopted at the Seneca Falls Women’s Rights Convention in 1848, a call for female enfranchisement had been included in it .

d. A call for female enfranchisement, included in Elizabeth Cady Stanton’s draft of the Declaration of Sentiments in 1848, that was adopted by the Seneca Falls Women’s Rights Convention.

e. When Elizabeth Cady Stanton drafted the Declaration of Sentiments that was adopted at the Seneca Falls Women’s Rights Convention in 1848, she included in it a call for female enfranchisement.



could you explain why the answer is ( )?


E for direct and active. could be C but didnot like passive and "had been".
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When drafting the Declaration of Sentiments that was adopted at the Seneca Falls Women’s Rights Conventions in 1848, included in it by the author, Elizabeth Cady Stanton, was a call for female enfranchisement.


a When drafting the Declaration of Sentiments that was adopted at the Seneca Falls Women’s Rights Conventions in 1848,included in it by the author, Elizabeth Cady Stanton, was a call for female enfranchisement.

When -> Is to indicate a time frame and some other happened when declaration was adopted.
And also modification is a issue here.

When scoring runs for India, Virat didn't think anything apart from cricket
Here who is doing the action of scoring -> Virat so the noun should come at the start of the independent clause.
Hence we require the author at the head of the independent clause.

And the independent clause "included in it by the author, Elizabeth Cady Stanton, was a call for female enfranchisement" is quite convoluted.


b. Including a call for female enfranchisement, a draft of the Declaration of Sentiments was adopted at the Seneca Falls Women’s Rights Conventions in 1848 that Elizabeth Cady Stanton wrote.

Including -> is a verb+ing modifier (participle modifier) So we need the noun which can get modified by the modifier "Including a call for female enfranchisement" and that is definitely nor "draft "

So modifier error.


c. When the Declaration of Sentiments drafted by Elizabeth Cady Stanton was adopted at the Seneca Falls Women’s Rights Convention in 1848, a call for female enfranchisement had been included in it .

We are talking about two parallel events and that is the reason why we have "when". There is no reason to use "past perfect" as past perfect is used to order two past events occurred at two different times.

d. A call for female enfranchisement, included in Elizabeth Cady Stanton’s draft of the Declaration of Sentiments in 1848, that was adopted by the Seneca Falls Women’s Rights Convention.

Included -> Verb+ed modifier -> this modifier should modify the closest noun which is "enfranchisement". "female" is an adjective which is modifying "enfranchisement".
So "enfranchisement" was included in draft -> which is wrong.
Another issue is

Since we have a modifier 'included in Elizabeth Cady Stanton’s draft of the Declaration of Sentiments in 1848" between the comma pairs so we can remove the modifier as the modifier doesn't change the sentence structure.

So the sentence becomes "A call for female enfranchisement that was adopted by the Seneca Falls Women’s Rights Convention". So that can refer to either "enfranchisement " or a call (in this case as "for female enfranchisement" becomes a essential modifier for "A call" so that can refer to "A call"). Either of them doesn't make sense.


e. When Elizabeth Cady Stanton drafted the Declaration of Sentiments that was adopted at the Seneca Falls Women’s Rights Convention in 1848, she included in it a call for female enfranchisement.

This is the least of the devil and hence correct


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i have a dount in CHOICE E

isnt there a SV dis agreement where THAT refers to sediments and not declaration.

i m in an impression that when ever you use PRONOUN 'THAT' the subject becomes the preceding noun and not the main subject ahead of prep phrase.

a declaration of sediments was adopted is correct.

a declartation of sediments that were adopted is correct ?


please clear my confusion


viper1991 : There is something called as essential modifier.

Consider the below example:

I sold a car with bose speakers that has state of the art air conditioning system.

What does that refer to? Speakers or Car.

Now somethings we need to consider:
That/which can jump over the modifiers to refer to other nouns. The rules for that are:
1) It should be essential modifier.
For example "with bose speakers" is an essential modifier and cannot be placed anywhere else.
2) There is no ambiguity in the meaning.
For example :
Speakers cannot have state of the air AC so it makes sense to modify the cars.

Hence that can refer to cars.

Similarly, you can apply here.

Let me know if you have further doubts.
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I think folks have touched on both the main problems with C, but I want to add some detail to them.

1) It's a problem not to say who included the call for female enfranchisement. Sure, it would be natural to assume that it was the author, but in that case it would be natural to say so. By not saying so, we seem to imply that some other mysterious person included it.

2) The use of the past perfect is a problem here. The past perfect tells us that something happened before some other past event. In this case, that would mean that the call was included before the Declaration was adopted. But why are we saying this? If we assume that the Declaration was written before it was adopted, then wouldn't all of its parts already have been included? Why are we going out of our way to say that this part was included before the adoption? After all, we only use past perfect when we particularly want to stress the order of events. (We wouldn't say "When King Lear made its premiere, Shakespeare had written it.") On the other hand, if the point was that the call was added later as part of the adoption process (and maybe not by Stanton), past perfect wouldn't do the job at all.
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The stimulus says clearly that the call for female enfranchisement was included during the time of drafting the DOS. C on the contrary, says that, when the draft by ECS was adopted, a call for female enfranchisement had already been included in it. The use of past perfect clearly alters the original meaning. As Sukanyar stated, E is more forthright and doesn’t lend room to such an anomaly.
E is the choice.
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Isn't there a pronoun problem in E? Does the pronoun "it" refer to the draft or the convention?
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+1 for E.

I don't like the question. Is it "Convention" or "Conventions" ?

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+1 for E... Would love to know the OA for this
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E is the most direct, but I definitely agree with the problem of "it" that can be resolved if OP clarifies about convention vs conventions.
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Is E not run on sentence. Or it is not because of usage of "when" in first sentence.
I removed E for above reason along with "it" issue.
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OA is E

I encounter the same problem today on GMAT prep and the answer is E
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Is this question really 700 level? It was the first question I got on GMAT prep
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HII experts ,

i have a dount in CHOICE E

isnt there a SV dis agreement where THAT refers to sediments and not declaration.

i m in an impression that when ever you use PRONOUN 'THAT' the subject becomes the preceding noun and not the main subject ahead of prep phrase.

a declaration of sediments was adopted is correct.

a declartation of sediments that were adopted is correct ?


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When drafting the Declaration of Sentiments that was adopted at the Seneca Falls Women’s Rights Conventions in 1848, included in it by the author, Elizabeth Cady Stanton, was a call for female enfranchisement.

d. A call for female enfranchisement, included in Elizabeth Cady Stanton’s draft of the Declaration of Sentiments in 1848, that was adopted by the Seneca Falls Women’s Rights Convention.

Included -> Verb+ed modifier -> this modifier should modify the closest noun which is "enfranchisement". "female" is an adjective which is modifying "enfranchisement".
[b]So "enfranchisement" was included in draft -> which is wrong.
-- I don't see an issue here. call for enfranchisement was included in the draft. Didn't this mean that the 'draft was included in the enfranchisement'


Another issue is

Since we have a modifier 'included in Elizabeth Cady Stanton’s draft of the Declaration of Sentiments in 1848" between the comma pairs so we can remove the modifier as the modifier doesn't change the sentence structure.

So the sentence becomes "A call for female enfranchisement that was adopted by the Seneca Falls Women’s Rights Convention". So that can refer to either "enfranchisement " or a call (in this case as "for female enfranchisement" becomes a essential modifier for "A call" so that can refer to "A call"). Either of them doesn't make sense.[/b]

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When drafting the Declaration of Sentiments that was adopted at the Seneca Falls Women’s Rights Conventions in 1848, included in it by the author, Elizabeth Cady Stanton, was a call for female enfranchisement.

d. A call for female enfranchisement, included in Elizabeth Cady Stanton’s draft of the Declaration of Sentiments in 1848, that was adopted by the Seneca Falls Women’s Rights Convention.

Included -> Verb+ed modifier -> this modifier should modify the closest noun which is "enfranchisement". "female" is an adjective which is modifying "enfranchisement".
[b]So "enfranchisement" was included in draft -> which is wrong.
-- I don't see an issue here. call for enfranchisement was included in the draft. Didn't this mean that the 'draft was included in the enfranchisement'


Another issue is

Since we have a modifier 'included in Elizabeth Cady Stanton’s draft of the Declaration of Sentiments in 1848" between the comma pairs so we can remove the modifier as the modifier doesn't change the sentence structure.

So the sentence becomes "A call for female enfranchisement that was adopted by the Seneca Falls Women’s Rights Convention". So that can refer to either "enfranchisement " or a call (in this case as "for female enfranchisement" becomes a essential modifier for "A call" so that can refer to "A call"). Either of them doesn't make sense.[/b]

^^ Please if you can explain the above point, this is not clear




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What is included "A call for female enfranchisement " or "female enfranchisement". Rule for Verb+ed (past participle modifier)is -> it modifies the closest noun. So as per the definition, "female enfranchisement" is included and not call. Yes, verb+ed modifier can jump over essential modifier and can refer to the call but both the meaning is possible and that makes the usage ambiguous.

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anewbeginning wrote:
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When drafting the Declaration of Sentiments that was adopted at the Seneca Falls Women’s Rights Conventions in 1848, included in it by the author, Elizabeth Cady Stanton, was a call for female enfranchisement.

d. A call for female enfranchisement, included in Elizabeth Cady Stanton’s draft of the Declaration of Sentiments in 1848, that was adopted by the Seneca Falls Women’s Rights Convention.

Included -> Verb+ed modifier -> this modifier should modify the closest noun which is "enfranchisement". "female" is an adjective which is modifying "enfranchisement".
[b]So "enfranchisement" was included in draft -> which is wrong.
-- I don't see an issue here. call for enfranchisement was included in the draft. Didn't this mean that the 'draft was included in the enfranchisement'


Another issue is

Since we have a modifier 'included in Elizabeth Cady Stanton’s draft of the Declaration of Sentiments in 1848" between the comma pairs so we can remove the modifier as the modifier doesn't change the sentence structure.

So the sentence becomes "A call for female enfranchisement that was adopted by the Seneca Falls Women’s Rights Convention". So that can refer to either "enfranchisement " or a call (in this case as "for female enfranchisement" becomes a essential modifier for "A call" so that can refer to "A call"). Either of them doesn't make sense.[/b]

^^ Please if you can explain the above point, this is not clear




I have posted my doubts in highlighted text.


What is included "A call for female enfranchisement " or "female enfranchisement". Rule for Verb+ed (past participle modifier)is -> it modifies the closest noun. So as per the definition, "female enfranchisement" is included and not call. Yes, verb+ed modifier can jump over essential modifier and can refer to the call but both the meaning is possible and that makes the usage ambiguous.

Let me know if you have further doubts.



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When drafting the Declaration of Sentiments that was adopted at the Seneca Falls Women’s Rights Conventions in 1848, included in it by the author, Elizabeth Cady Stanton, was a call for female enfranchisement.

d. A call for female enfranchisement, included in Elizabeth Cady Stanton’s draft of the Declaration of Sentiments in 1848, that was adopted by the Seneca Falls Women’s Rights Convention.

Included -> Verb+ed modifier -> this modifier should modify the closest noun which is "enfranchisement". "female" is an adjective which is modifying "enfranchisement".
[b]So "enfranchisement" was included in draft -> which is wrong.
-- I don't see an issue here. call for enfranchisement was included in the draft. Didn't this mean that the 'draft was included in the enfranchisement'


Another issue is

Since we have a modifier 'included in Elizabeth Cady Stanton’s draft of the Declaration of Sentiments in 1848" between the comma pairs so we can remove the modifier as the modifier doesn't change the sentence structure.

So the sentence becomes "A call for female enfranchisement that was adopted by the Seneca Falls Women’s Rights Convention". So that can refer to either "enfranchisement " or a call (in this case as "for female enfranchisement" becomes a essential modifier for "A call" so that can refer to "A call"). Either of them doesn't make sense.[/b]

^^ Please if you can explain the above point, this is not clear




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D) A call for female enfranchisement , included in Elizabeth Cady Stanton’s draft of the Declaration of Sentiments in 1848, that was adopted by the Seneca Falls Women’s Rights Convention

", included in Elizabeth Cady Stanton’s draft of the Declaration of Sentiments in 1848, " -> is a modifier within a comma pair . So we can remove the modifier to check the sentence structure. Removing a modifier shouldn't impact the core sentence at all.

After removing the modifier, the sentence becomes:
A call for female enfranchisement that was adopted by the Seneca Falls Women’s Rights Convention

that should refer to the nearest noun -> "female enfranchisement" or "A call" -> Either of them wasn't adopted by the Seneca Falls Women’s Rights Convention

In fact, "Declaration of Sentiments" was adopted at the Seneca Falls Women’s Rights Convention as per the original meaning of the sentence

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Hi All,

When drafting the Declaration of Sentiments that was adopted at the Seneca Falls Women’s Rights Conventions in 1848, included in it by the author, Elizabeth Cady Stanton, was a call for female enfranchisement.

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The way this sentence is written the meaning is not very clear. So let us decipher the meaning first. We get some information from this sentence. Elizabeth Cady Stanton drafted the DoS. She included in it a call for female enfranchisement. This DoS was adopted at the Seneca Falls Women’s Rights Conventions in 1848.

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Error Analysis:

1. Modifier “When drafting …” is ambiguous in its role. We don’t know what it is modifying.
2. This sentence needs to be written in a way so that the meaning is easy to comprehend.

POE:

Choice A: When drafting the Declaration of Sentiments that was adopted at the Seneca Falls Women’s Rights Conventions in 1848, included n it by the author, Elizabeth Cady Stanton, was a call for female enfranchisement. Incorrect for the reason stated above.

Choice B: Including a call for female enfranchisement, a draft of the Declaration of Sentiments was adopted at the Seneca Falls Women’s Rights Conventions in 1848 that Elizabeth Cady Stanton wrote. Incorrect.
1. The opening modifier is illogically modifying “a draft”. The draft did not do the action of including the call.
2. This choice fails to say that who included the call for women enfranchisement in the DoS.

Choice C: When the Declaration of Sentiments drafted by Elizabeth Cady Stanton was adopted at the Seneca Falls Women’s Rights Convention in 1848, a call for female enfranchisement had been included in it. Incorrect. This choice fails to say who included the call in the DoS.

Choice D: A call for female enfranchisement, included in Elizabeth Cady Stanton’s draft of the Declaration of Sentiments in 1848, that was adopted by the Seneca Falls Women’s Rights Convention. Incorrect. This choice lacks a main verb and hence is a fragment.

Choice E: When Elizabeth Cady Stanton drafted the Declaration of Sentiments that was adopted at the Seneca Falls Women’s Rights Convention in 1848, she included in it a call for female enfranchisement. Correct. All the information is clearly given in this choice.

PS- Pronoun “it” clearly refers to DoS because the sentence clearly says that Stanton drafted the DoS, and when she drafted it, she included in “it” (DoS) the call for women enfranchisement.

Hope this helps.
Thanks.
Shraddha


Hi Shraddha

Just a thought. In option C, where its mentioned that Elizabeth Cady Stanton drafted the DoS, wouldn't it be obvious who included the call? Do we have anything else, that makes it a wrong choice?

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