Fatal Flaw #3: Clichéd Writing
“As a new company in a new space, we need to exceed client expectations, so first and foremost I drive client projects in the health-care and telecom verticals. But my job requires an internal focus as well, and I spend a ton of time both building and updating scalable systems, from knowledge management to invoicing and payroll.”
Ouch!!! I suppose this fellow is highly intelligent, and I hope he is good at what he does, but don’t write as he talks. Write directly and clearly so people can understand you. Can the buzz! Perhaps a translation would be:
“As a new company entering a new market, we need to impress our clients with outstanding performance. I personally manage projects for clients in the health-care and telecom industries. But in addition to serving our clients, I am striving to build our business by ensuring that all our systems from personnel to invoicing support our growth.”
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Avoid Fatal Flaw #3: Write pointed and direct answers to the questions.
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