Last week, we had discussed the use of specific details and examples for making our stories in application essays engaging and persuasive. This week, we will discuss how we can use transitional expressions to make these specific anecdotes\/ details cohere and stick together so the reader is able to move smoothly from one bit of information to the other. The use of transition words and phrases not only helps us write clearly and coherently, but also helps our readers (in this case the AD Com) follow our story and stay focused. These transitional expressions act like road signs that help the reader follow the direction of our thought.<\/p>\n
True, we all are familiar with these most commonplace words and phrases, but we sometimes forget to use them, thereby making our ideas appear disconnected and choppy.<\/p>\n
Here are some common ones, listed in categories according to their meaning:<\/p>\n
Addition:<\/b>\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0 also, in addition, too, and, besides, furthermore, next, then, finally<\/p>\n
Contrast:\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0 <\/b>on the other hand, but, yet, however, nevertheless, in contrast, on the contrary, in contrast, still, at the same time<\/p>\n
Comparison:\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0 <\/b>in comparison, similarly, likewise, in the same way, in the same manner<\/p>\n
Result:\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0 <\/b>consequently, so, therefore, thus, due to this, as a result, hence, in conclusion, on the whole, finally<\/p>\n
Example:\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0 <\/b>for example, for instance, namely, specifically<\/p>\n
Time:\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0 <\/b>first, second, third, next, then, finally, soon, later, afterwards, during, before, meanwhile, eventually, currently, immediately, in the past, in the future, originally<\/p>\n
To understand the significance of these simple transitional devices that act like glue to hold the sentences together and lead the reader from one paragraph to another in making our stories coherent, let\u2019s look at the following examples:<\/p>\n
My job was at stake. I resolved to remain calm, accept the challenge and started pounding my way through in a planned manner.<\/em><\/p>\n My job was at stake. Nevertheless,<\/span><\/b> I resolved to remain calm, accept the challenge and started pounding my way through in a planned manner.<\/em><\/p>\n I was sent to a regular elementary school in our neighborhood. Regular study was given the utmost importance; my father inculcated in me an interest to love numbers and play around with them. <\/em><\/p>\n I was sent to a regular elementary school in our neighborhood. Apart from<\/b> giving importance to regular studies at school, my father also inculcated in me an interest to love numbers and play around with them.<\/em><\/p>\n I consider this my best mistake because this experience taught me valuable lessons early in my career.\u00a0\u00a0 I learned that it is important to take necessary action to resolve or mitigate the effects of the issue than worrying about the consequences. I learned that mistakes can be turned into opportunities through which something good can be done. <\/em><\/p>\n I consider this my best mistake because this experience taught me valuable lessons early in my career.\u00a0 First<\/span>,<\/b> I learned that it is important to take necessary action to resolve or mitigate the effects of the issue than worrying about the consequences. I also<\/span><\/b> learned that those mistakes can be turned into opportunities through which something good can be achieved. <\/em><\/i><\/p>\n As you can see, the addition of just one word<\/span> in the above examples has articulated the ideas.<\/p>\n Transitional expressions not only help in connecting ideas between sentences but also help smooth transitions between paragraphs. Let\u2019s look at the following example from INSEAD\u2019s essay on \u2018extra -professional activities\u2019, where the writer\u2019s description of his third extra- curricular interest is completely disconnected from his previous activity.<\/p>\n In 2012, my father who works at Ashalata \u2013 an NGO dedicated to assist children with special needs to learn, to grow, to get jobs, to get married, and lead a normal life \u2013 reached out to me to help procure some specialized hardware to create books in Braille. \u00a0I am heavily involved with Ashalata, an NGO dedicated to assist the children with special needs, and I have been working to organize seminars and cultural events to promote the work done by the organization.<\/em><\/p>\n Now take a look at the following revised version where the addition of a \u2018transition sentence\u2019 and summarizing of some details have resulted in smooth transition of ideas from the previous paragraph, so the two\u00a0 activities that the writer is\u00a0 discussing no longer read like \u00a0isolated pieces.<\/p>\n Another extra- professional activity that I am passionate about is helping children with special needs. Since 2012, I am heavily involved with Ashalata, an NGO dedicated to assist the children with special needs, and I have been working to organize seminars and cultural events to promote the work done by the organization. <\/em><\/p>\n Note: Even though transition words and phrases are useful in bridging the gaps between your ideas, please don\u2019t overuse them. Not every sentence needs a transitional phrase so use one only when the relationship between your thoughts needs clarification.<\/p>\n Stay Tuned for Tip# 10 of the story development process next week J<\/span><\/p>\n For more MBA articles, visit myEssayReview<\/a> blog.<\/p>\nGood Example:<\/h2>\n
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