{"id":47708,"date":"2019-12-20T11:58:55","date_gmt":"2019-12-20T18:58:55","guid":{"rendered":"https:\/\/gmatclub.com\/blog\/2019\/12\/before-after-of-an-essay-that-made-it-to-hbs\/"},"modified":"2019-12-20T11:58:55","modified_gmt":"2019-12-20T18:58:55","slug":"before-after-of-an-essay-that-made-it-to-hbs","status":"publish","type":"post","link":"https:\/\/gmatclub.com\/blog\/before-after-of-an-essay-that-made-it-to-hbs\/","title":{"rendered":"Before & After Of An Essay That Made It To HBS"},"content":{"rendered":"

Below you\u2019ll find an excerpt of one of our client\u2019s essays that landed them a spot at HBS. Note: Some changes to personal information have been made to preserve anonymity.<\/p>\n

“Briefly tell us more about your career aspirations” (500 characters)<\/h3>\n

CLIENT’S FIRST DRAFT<\/h3>\n

My goal is to become Spain\u2019s youngest Minister of Public Works and Transportation and transform the financing and delivery of infrastructure in my country. Three intermediary goals will get me there. First, expand my firm’s infrastructure practice in Southern Europe and become a global expert in infrastructure delivery, especially Public-Private Partnerships. Second, leverage global expertise to serve Renfe as a senior executive or consultant. Next, become Madrid\u2019s Secretary of Public Works, City Planning, and Transportation as a stepping-stone to the Ministry.<\/p>\n

CLIENT’S FINAL DRAFT<\/h3>\n

My goal is to become Spain’s youngest Minister of Public Works and Transportation, and transform my country\u2019s infrastructure by establishing a world-class system of Public-Private Partnerships. This is incredibly important to me as, having lived in Tokyo, I\u2019ve seen how great infrastructure can benefit everyone in society. I’m convinced that great public transport, roads and airports are the key to Spain’s continued development. As Public Works Minister, I’ll be best placed to make that a reality.<\/p>\n

WHY THIS WORKS:<\/strong> This candidate blends a real (and very ambitious) dream to bring change to his country with a pragmatic perspective on how he can get there.<\/p>\n

To read the rest of this client’s HBS essays, as well as a structural breakdown of why they\u00a0all\u00a0<\/em>work, grab a copy of our \u201c50 Essays That Worked Vol. 4\u201d<\/a>\u00a0PDF.<\/p>\n

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Now, read up and get smart:<\/p>\n