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A pioneer journalist, Nellie Bly's exploits included circling the globe faster than Jules Verne's fictional Phileas Fogg

A A pioneer journalist, Nellie Bly's exploits included
B The exploits of Nellie Bly, a pioneer journalist, included
C Nellie Bly was a pioneer journalist, included
D Included in the pioneer journalist Nellie Bly's exploits are
E The pioneer journalist's exploits of Nellie Bly included
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A. A pioneer journalist, Nellie Bly's exploits included –Dangling modifier
B. The exploits of, a pioneer journalist, included: Correct format a pioneer journalist modifies Nellie Bly
C Nellie Bly was a pioneer journalist, included---- a run -on
D Included in the pioneer journalist Nellie Bly's exploits are: Inverted clause SV mismatch
E The pioneer journalist's exploits of Nellie Bly included----- journalist's exploits of Nellie- a clumsy redundancy and may even imply as if the pioneer journalist and Nellie were two different entities
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02 Aug 2012, 09:10
Hi @paras123,

This is the sentence with choice C:

Nellie Bly was a pioneer journalist including in her exploits the circling the globe faster than Jules Verne's fictional Phileas Fogg.

We have a verb-ing modifier “including” here that is modifying the previous noun entity “a pioneer journalist”. Nellie Bly is this pioneer journalist. So “including” is basically modifying Nellie Bly.

Now this modifier does not make sense with the subject “Nellie Bly” here because per this choice, the sentence seems to means that Nellie Bly was a journalist and because of being a journalist she included in her exploits the circling. This is not the intended meaning. It is Bly’s exploits that included the circling. So that should

Also this sentence is not very grammatical. This phrase “the circling the globe” is not grammatical. These are the reasons for this sentence to be incorrect.

Hope this helps.
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05 Apr 2013, 11:29
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Hi @paras123,

This is the sentence with choice C:

Nellie Bly was a pioneer journalist including in her exploits the circling the globe faster than Jules Verne's fictional Phileas Fogg.

We have a verb-ing modifier “including” here that is modifying the previous noun entity “a pioneer journalist”. Nellie Bly is this pioneer journalist. So “including” is basically modifying Nellie Bly.

Now this modifier does not make sense with the subject “Nellie Bly” here because per this choice, the sentence seems to means that Nellie Bly was a journalist and because of being a journalist she included in her exploits the circling. This is not the intended meaning. It is Bly’s exploits that included the circling. So that should

Also this sentence is not very grammatical. This phrase “the circling the globe” is not grammatical. These are the reasons for this sentence to be incorrect.

Hope this helps.
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A pioneer journalist, Nellie Bly's exploits included circling the globe faster than Jules Verne's fictional Phileas Fogg

A A pioneer journalist, Nellie Bly's exploits included
B The exploits of Nellie Bly, a pioneer journalist, included
C Nellie Bly was a pioneer journalist, included
D Included in the pioneer journalist Nellie Bly's exploits are
E The pioneer journalist's exploits of Nellie Bly included

B The exploits of Nellie Bly, a pioneer journalist, included
I marked this answer wrong since i had wrongly interpreted that The exploits of Nellie Bly is a noun modifier, which is incorrectly modifying a pioneer journalist, the noun next to the modifier. I repeatedly do such kinds of mistakes in modifiers. Can you suggest how i can unlearn such misconceptions.
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Why is D wrong? Please clarify.

This is an OG question from OG 13th Ed. GMAC's explanation on option D is:
"Since this event clearly happened in the past, the tense of the verb are is wrong. Piling on too many descriptive words for the noun exploits [the pioneer journalist Nellie Bly's exploits] makes the phrase unwieldy and awkward."

Also, I found that "included" refers to "pioneer" saying "included in the pioneer". Though the intention is to say "included in the exploits", it didn't happen so because of placing many descriptive words between "included in the" and "exploits".
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(A) A pioneer journalist, Nellie Bly's exploits included >>> Wrong modifier. A pioneer journalist should modify Nellie Bly, not her exploits.
(B) The exploits of Nellie Bly, a pioneer journalist, included >>> Correct. "a pioneer journalist" is an appositive modifier that modifies Nellie Bly.
(C) Nellie Bly was a pioneer journalist including in her exploits the >>> Wrong modifier. "including" modifies "journalist"
(D) Included in the pioneer journalist Nellie Bly's exploits are >>> Wrong grammar. "Included in X are Y"
(E) The pioneer journalist's exploits of Nellie Bly included >>> Wrong meaning. "pioneer" is an adjective that modifies Nelly Bly, not the exploits.
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25 Apr 2013, 10:49
Hey guys..
Thanks for the replies.
I'm afraid that I still don't understand.
The Past tense refers to actions that have occurred in the past and have finished by the time the sentence is written.
The coach included Ajay into his team. (By the time the sentence is written Ajay has already been included).
By the same logic, "XYZ's exploits included"... should mean that his/her exploits included something and they don't anymore.
Hence, my question is : shouldn't it be "XYZ's exploits include"... which (IMHO) correctly means that the exploits still include that something.

Until and unless this is idiomatic, I don't understand why this construction is correct.

Any help would be greatly appreciated.

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29 Sep 2013, 11:53
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egmat wrote:
Hi @paras123,

This is the sentence with choice C:

Nellie Bly was a pioneer journalist including in her exploits the circling the globe faster than Jules Verne's fictional Phileas Fogg.

We have a verb-ing modifier “including” here that is modifying the previous noun entity “a pioneer journalist”. Nellie Bly is this pioneer journalist. So “including” is basically modifying Nellie Bly.

Now this modifier does not make sense with the subject “Nellie Bly” here because per this choice, the sentence seems to means that Nellie Bly was a journalist and because of being a journalist she included in her exploits the circling. This is not the intended meaning. It is Bly’s exploits that included the circling. So that should

Also this sentence is not very grammatical. This phrase “the circling the globe” is not grammatical. These are the reasons for this sentence to be incorrect.

Hope this helps.
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This bug has again resurfaced in this OG13 question. I would really appreciate if u could help me resolve this problem. So here it is-

A pioneer journalist, Nellie Bly's exploits included circling the globe faster than Jules Verne's fictional Phileas Fogg

A A pioneer journalist, Nellie Bly's exploits included
B The exploits of Nellie Bly, a pioneer journalist, included
C Nellie Bly was a pioneer journalist, included
D Included in the pioneer journalist Nellie Bly's exploits are
E The pioneer journalist's exploits of Nellie Bly included

B The exploits of Nellie Bly, a pioneer journalist, included
I marked this answer wrong since i had wrongly interpreted that The exploits of Nellie Bly is a noun modifier, which is incorrectly modifying a pioneer journalist, the noun next to the modifier. I repeatedly do such kinds of mistakes in modifiers. Can you suggest how i can unlearn such misconceptions.
Thanks

I am not sure if you were able to kill the bug but still let me try to attempt this in 2 ways:
1) Meaning :
If The exploits of Nellie Bly is a noun modifier , modifying a pioneer journalist then a pioneer journalist is main subject . So is it the a pioneer journalist included circling or The exploits ? It is the exploits of NB included circling the globe faster than Jules Verne's fictional Phileas Fogg.
2) Grammar and Punctuation :
I feel there is difference between
a. The exploits of Nellie Bly, a pioneer journalist, included and
b. The exploits of Nellie Bly, a pioneer journalist included
In B The exploits of Nellie Bly could mean what you interpreted .
But a pioneer journalist has comma before and after implying that it is a modifier and not main subject.

Please correct me if I am wrong.
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18 Apr 2014, 12:14
Can someone explain the meaning of this sentence with choice B? I feel like there is some ambiguity here. I understand it as follows - is it wrong?

- Nellie Bly did a lot of things and one of the things was the fact that she circle the globe faster than "Jules Verne's fictional Phileas fogg". The part in the apostrophes is a little confusing because I take that as a possessive something?
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26 May 2014, 15:48
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A pioneer journalist, Nellie Bly's exploits included circling the globe faster than Jules Verne's fictional Phileas Fogg

A A pioneer journalist, Nellie Bly's exploits included
B The exploits of Nellie Bly, a pioneer journalist, included
C Nellie Bly was a pioneer journalist, included
D Included in the pioneer journalist Nellie Bly's exploits are
E The pioneer journalist's exploits of Nellie Bly included

The options for above sentence are not clearly written (See option C), mismatched with OG 13. Correct version as below.

A pioneer journalist, Nellie Bly's exploits included
circling the globe faster than Jules Verne's fictional
Phileas Fogg.
(A) A pioneer journalist, Nellie Bly's exploits
included
(B) The exploits of Nellie Bly, a pioneer journalist,
included
(C) Nellie Bly was a pioneer journalist including in
her exploits the
(D) Included in the pioneer journalist Nellie Bly's
exploits are
(E) The pioneer journalist's exploits of Nellie Bly
included
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A A pioneer journalist, Nellie Bly's exploits included --> first sentence modifies exploits
B The exploits of Nellie Bly, a pioneer journalist, included --> CORRECT a pioneer journalist modifies Preceding NOUN Nellie Bly - don't mix it up with the NOUN + NOUN Modifier
C Nellie Bly was a pioneer journalist, included --> included modifies journalist (should modify exploits)
D Included in the pioneer journalist Nellie Bly's exploits are --> what is included in the pioneer journalis - nothing...
E The pioneer journalist's exploits of Nellie Bly included --> pioneer jouralist's exploits included...where is the connection to Nellie Bly....

Here are some exceptions to the TOUCH RULE for noun modifiers:

1. A “mission-critical” modifier falls between. This modifier is often an Of-phrase that defines the noun. The less important modifier refers to the noun plus the first modifier.

- He had a way OF DODGING OPPONENTS that impressed the scouts
dodging opponents defines the noun way; that impressed the scouts modifies the entire
noun phrase a way of dodging opponents

2. A very short predicate falls between, shifting a very long modifier back.
- Right: A new CEO has been hired who will transform the company bv decentralizing authority to various division heads while increasing their accountability through the use of public scorecards.

3. A short non-essential phrase intervenes and is set off by commas.
- Right: Our system of Presidential elections favors states, such as Delaware, that by population are over-represented in the Electoral College ( That modifies -> States)

4. The modifier is part of a series of parallel modifiers, one of which touches the noun

- In heraldry, the term "tincture" refers to a color emblazoned on a coat of arms and labeled with a special French word. (here, 2 Modifiers are placed fort he noun Color , it’s ok)

5. Normally a relative clause should touch the noun that it modifies, but we are generally allowed to place an appositive between a relative clause and the modified noun.

- Mary buys cookies made with SugarFree, an artificial sweetener, which tastes as sweet as the corn syrup that her brother loves but where there are fewer calories than in an equivalent amount of corn syrup.

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An appositive is a re-naming or amplification of a word that immediately precedes it.

My favorite teacher, a fine chess player in her own right, has won several state-level tournaments. [Noun phrase as appositive]
The best exercise, walking briskly, is also the least expensive. [Gerund phrase as appositive]
Tashonda's goal in life, to become an occupational therapist, is within her grasp this year, at last. [Infinitive phrase as appositive]

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A pioneer journalist, Nellie Bly's exploits included circling the globe faster than Jules Verne's fictional Phileas Fogg

A A pioneer journalist, Nellie Bly's exploits included
-Here pioneer Journalist is referring to exploits not to Nellie Bly. -Dangling modifier issue.

B The exploits of Nellie Bly, a pioneer journalist, included
-Correct

C Nellie Bly was a pioneer journalist, included
- Nellie Bly included something... Doesn't make any sense. It's her exploits that included something.

D Included in the pioneer journalist Nellie Bly's exploits are
We should have "is" in place of "are" because Author counted only one exploit.

E The pioneer journalist's exploits of Nellie Bly included
Here we lost the original intend of the sentence i.e. Nellie Bly is the Pioneer Journalist.
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I really cannot understand which one is compared to "Jules Verne's fictional Phileas Fogg."

Phileas Fogg is a protagonist, so he is a human being. Hence, Phileas Fogg should be compared to Nellie Bly.

According to the answer (B), it seems that circling the globe is faster than Phileas Fogg. It doesn't make sense to me.

In my opinion, answer should be like below:
The exploits of Nellie Bly, a pioneer journalist, included that she circled the globe faster than did Jules Verne's Phileas Fogg.

Please remember that you should not be doubting the correctness of an official question be it in the official guides or in GMATPREP software. Official questions provided by GMAC are irrefutable.

In SC, you dont have to find the BEST POSSIBLE answer but you need to find the BEST OUT OF THE GIVEN 5 OPTIONS.

The other options are egregiously incorrect either grammatically or logically (altered meaning).

I agree, B is the best out of the given options and may not necessarily be the best possible. There might be variants that are more succinct and better but as we are not given those options to play with, you have to go with B.
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Hi experts,

D) Included in the pioneer journalist Nellie Bly’s exploits are
I totally got the verb tense error in D,
and felt that "Included in the pioneer journalist Nellie Bly’s exploits" is awkward,
anyone can point the why awkward?

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(A) A pioneer journalist, Nellie Bly's exploits included
(B) The exploits of Nellie Bly, a pioneer journalist, included
(C) Nellie Bly was a pioneer journalist including in her exploits the -uurnalist was not included instead his exploits
(D) Included in the pioneer journalist Nellie Bly's exploits are - What was included?
(E) The pioneer journalist's exploits of Nellie Bly included

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In answer choice B, isn't the "a pioneer journalist" incorrectly modifies the "exploits" and not "Nellie Bly"? There are two nouns, how do you determine what the sentence is supposed to modify?

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Check this out for noun modification.

Should help.

https://e-gmat.com/blogs/noun-noun-modi ... ny-entity/

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Hi Experts,

I have a doubt regarding choice B here. My understanding is that a modifier can never modify objects of the preposition (Nellie Bly in this case). Clearly, based on OG, this is possible in the current case. Can you tell me when this rule and applicable and when we shouldn't use it?

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