Re: Advice on Yale Essay
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11 Aug 2010, 12:11
SnehaC,
Sounds like a neat accomplishment - well done!
As for the essay, I am on the fence about this one. In my opinion, I think the question is asking for an example that describes how you would learn/function/work with your classmates at YSOM. While it is impressive that you were able to convince others to contribute to your cause, I feel it may be difficult to stress the coming together or "community" feel of your accomplishment, as I'm guessing it was you meeting individually with these families to recruit them for your cause, instead of say, you recruiting a number of families who didn't believe in donating to go out and get others to donate as a team/group/community, etc.
I would say that if you are set on using this example, try to frame it by focusing on the coming together for a cause (you really convinced these people to donate not just to get you off their back, but because they really cared to help). However, it may be a bit difficult as there is a bit of ambiguity in regards to the "common goal" as the money has yet to go to a specific cause. Perhaps there may be other examples from you experiences in college to highlight your ability to work well with others with different perspectives in which you were able to lead to achieving a specific goal?
In either case, this is just my two cents - good luck with the essay! I will be applying this fall as well, perhaps we'll meet in New Haven!