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Although improved efficiency in converting harvested trees into wood products may reduce harvest rates, it will stimulate demand by increasing supply and lowering prices, thereby boosting consumption.
(A) in converting harvested trees into wood products may reduce harvest rates, it will stimulate demand by increasing supply and lowering prices, thereby boosting
(B) in converting harvested trees into wood products may reduce harvest rates, demand will be stimulated because of increasing supply and lowering prices, which boost
PriyankaPalit7
generisCan any of the experts please take this one up?
I am stuck between A and B.
PriyankaPalit7The differences are subtle at first glance.
The A/B distinction is hard to describe with the typical code words and splits.
If I were to focus on anything in particular, it would be COMMA + WHICH
That construction creates unclear logic with missing links. Those problems lead to unclear meaning in B.
(I wish the correct answer were positioned as option E. After reading option A, a person is NOT confused. Immediately after reading A, a person reads B, which seems clear. It isn't.
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The COMMA + ___ING construction, on the other hand, creates direct, complete, and clear logic. Meaning in option A is clear.
Separating grammar and meaning in these sentences is not a great idea because ultimately meaning decides the issue.
We can, however, use noticeably different constructions in the options to tease out the meaning.
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SUBJECT + BY v. NO SUBJECT + BECAUSE OFBoth
by and
because of are indicators of causal agency.
Stimulated (increased) demand is a result of P (increased supply) and Q (lower prices)
What causes P and Q?Option A has an answer: improved efficiency.
The pronoun IT = improved efficiency
Improved efficiency creates an increase in supply, and that increase in supply drives down prices.
(Then lower prices create more demand, and more demand leads to more consumption.)
Option A uses one short, direct preposition and a known subject in the main clause.
Option B has no answer.In option B, P and Q are direct objects of the compound proposition "because of."
Objects of prepositions are not very active, and they certainly cannot be subjects of another clause.
This issue might not be problematic if we were dealing with a simple conjunction such as BUT.
We are not dealing with a simple construction. This question tests a different construction, namely,
Although X, YIn option B, we do not know what causes two events. Further, no clear link TO "boost[ed] consumption" exists.
Do P and Q logically do two things?
Do P and Q
cause stimulated demand (as the prepositions indicate) AND
boost consumption?
Causality is much clearer in option A than in option B because
option A is not missing a link.•
PARALLELISMOption A:
Although X, YAlthough
improved efficiency may decrease the number of harvested trees (X),
improved efficiency will [also] stimulate demand and thereby boost consumption (Y)
Option B
Although X, Y in option B is
Although
improved efficiency may decrease the number of harvested trees, (X),
demand will be stimulated by . . . ., which boosts consumption (Y)
Despite the fact that both
efficiency and
demand are nouns, option B shows superficial parallelism compared to option A.
Although connotes contrast.
Option A conveys that ONE agent causes two contrasting and disparate results.
Option B conveys that ONE agent causes one result, and ANOTHER agent causes a contrasting and disparate result.
Two agents would be fine if we knew:
1) what created two agents that then created demand;
and 2) what led to a boost in consumption. That is, we have a
Problem: the second agent in B, stimulated demand, is caused by two other events, both of which seem to come out of nowhere.
Your mind may make the connection between improved efficiency and increased supply,
but option B
contains no actual language from which to infer such a connection.If we had more material, we could probably infer that more efficient conversion causes increased supply.
As the sentence stands, however, we cannot infer that improved efficiency creates increased supply.
Plausible scenario: demand for wood products stays the same whether the conversion process is more efficient or not
People do not need more wood products.
Plausible scenario: demand for wood products skyrockets because wood products that were very expensive got much cheaper because efficiency increased the supply of wood products
People DO need more wood products but could not afford those products
Two plausible but contradictory scenarios from the same fact pattern? Ambiguity. Option B is unclear.Option A is better than Option B in the idiomatic construction Although X, Y
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COMMA + ___ ING: absolutely correct. COMMA + which: almost certainly not correct.COMMA + ---INGIn order to express the result of events or information described
in a previous clause (or phrase), COMMA + ___ING is very effective and economical.
COMMA + ___ING (some people use COMMA + verbING)
-- is an adverbial modifier that uses a participle. COMMA + ____ING can modify an entire clause or phrase
-- in this instance, both
thereby and
boosting indicate the effect of a preceding cause:
BECAUSE improved efficiency will stimulate demand (because efficiency increases supply and thus reduces prices), improved efficiency will also increase consumption
Stripped:
efficiency increases demand, thereby boosting consumptionThe adverbial modifier in the form of a participial phrase is a very effective way to link one clause to subsequent events.
Correct: The tornado touched down for three minutes, destroying everything in its path.
COMMA + WHICH boost consumption
This construction is typically not very good for conveying complex causality.If the noun or nouns that precede "which" are direct causes of whatever comes after which, the construction will usually work, but it is
not as effective as a participial phrase.
COMMA + WHICH
-- is a relative clause. Almost always, COMMA WHICH must refer to an immediately preceding noun or nouns, or a noun phrase
--
boost is plural verb, indicating that the antecedent of
which is plural.
This construction creates a hot mess. What is the antecedent of "which"?
Does that antecedent fit in logically?
Does THAT antecedent boost consumption?
Logically, how do we get TO the boosted consumption?(1) If the antecedent of
which is
lower prices, then
only lower prices boost consumption (if "which" modifies only the nearest noun).
The two other causal agents (supply and demand) in the main clause can't simply be eliminated or ignored.
(2) If the antecedent of which is the process in which
increasing supply leads to lowering prices, then we lose "demand."
(3) If we allow "which" to "hop over" BOTH prepositional objects in order to reach "demand," we have a subject/verb error.
In (1), we cannot simply eliminate those other two causal agents (supply and demand); lower prices are part of a causal chain that includes those two agents.
In (2), we cannot simply eliminate "demand."
-- Demand is the result of greater supply and lower prices
-- Stimulated demand MAY be the direct cause of boosted consumption. (see the logical chain below).
This question is hard.
Option A is far better than Option B.
ANSWER AI hope that analysis helps. (Whew!)
I have separated causality from grammar cues in an artificial way because it is really difficult to explain the chain of events, the logical sequence.
The meaning of the sentence is tied directly to that sequence.
We have nested agents of change (the "Russian doll" scenario).
The logical line of causation is direct.
The words and phrasing do not seem to be direct.
MEANING depends on CLARITY and COMPLETENESS of logic If you can analyze the meaning of the two sentences, the correct answer becomes obvious.
The sentence means that
-- more efficient conversion of trees to wood products may
reduce the number of trees that must be chopped down,
but
the improved efficiency will lead to
an increase in supply, which leads to
a decrease in price, which leads to
an increase in demand, which finally leads to
an increase in consumption.
Overall meaning: Although improved efficiency may lead to a Good Thing, improved efficiency [also] will lead to a Bad Thing. CAUSALITY The final outcome is
boosted (increased) consumptionThat outcome tacitly leads companies to chop down more trees, a result that nullifies the saving of trees created by improved efficiency.
What directly causes increased consumption?
Option A: Stimulated demand.Option B: unclear-- Reduced prices do not cause increased consumption.
-- Increased supply does not cause increased consumption.
-- Those two events create greater demand.
More accurately, increased supply results in reduced prices, and reduced prices result in stimulated demand.
For example, reduced prices would not cause an increase in supply. Greater supply comes first.
Think about the matter from a profiteer's perspective.
Why would I produce MORE wood products in a market in which I get paid LESS for them?
We do not have to be economists. The logic of the prepositions
by and because
of is
EFFECT (demand) by CAUSE (greater supply that leads to lower prices)
EFFECT (demand) because of CAUSE (greater supply that leads to lower prices)
We cannot jump from improved efficiency to stimulated demand (higher demand).
Other causal agents intervene.Option A contains this causal sequence:Improved efficiency → increased supply → reduced prices → stimulated (higher) demand → boosted (higher) consumption
Improved efficiency (1) increases supply (2).
Increased supply (2) decreases prices (3).
Lower prices (3) stimulate demand (4).
Higher demand (4) boosts (increases) consumption (5).
In option A
The
word order in the causal sequence of the main clause is 1 → 4 → 2→ 3, →5
The
logical order 1→2→3→4→5, however, is intact.
The meaning of the sentence is also intact. Although improved efficiency may reduce rates (X), improved efficiency will also stimulate demand by __ and ___, increasing consumption (Y)Option B contains this causal sequence:Increasing supply (1) causes a lowering of prices. (2)
Lower prices (2) create stimulated demand. (3)
SOMETHING unclear causes boosted consumption (4)
The word order in the main clause is 3 → 1→2,[??] →4
The logical order is not intact.
The meaning of the sentence has changed. Although improved efficiency may reduce rates (X), demand will be stimulated by __ and __, and something will boost consumption. (Y)ANSWER A