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# ARGUMENT

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Manager
Joined: 19 Feb 2010
Posts: 80

Kudos [?]: 35 [0], given: 6

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04 Jul 2010, 10:27
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Yogesh Agarwal
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Kudos [?]: 35 [0], given: 6

Manager
Joined: 19 Feb 2010
Posts: 80

Kudos [?]: 35 [0], given: 6

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04 Jul 2010, 10:28
This is my first attempt on a mock writing my AWA. Please give in your valuable feedback. Thanks.
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Yogesh Agarwal
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Manager
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13 Jul 2010, 13:06
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Yogesh Agarwal
yogeshagarwala@gmail.com

CONSIDER AWARDING KUDOS IF MY POST HELPS !!!

Kudos [?]: 35 [0], given: 6

Manager
Status: Waiting to hear from University of Texas at Austin
Joined: 24 May 2010
Posts: 76

Kudos [?]: 75 [0], given: 4

Location: Changchun, China
Schools: University of Texas at Austin, Michigan State

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20 Jul 2010, 20:12
My impressions are:
*Good structure
* On the first essay, your arguments can apply to any survey (bad selection of sample, poorly designed survey, wrong sample). You could diversify the paragraphs a bit, maybe have one paragraph that discusses what are "management issues"
* On the second essay, good job on digging at a number of the assumptions related to the quality of the laid off employees. This would be a great essay to use a current example from the automotive industry, however you also have an opportunity to attack a need for "any" additional employees. Is Alpha's action a result of lost market share, or a shrinking market?

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