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As criminal activity on the Internet becomes more and more sophisticated, not only are thieves able to divert cash from company bank accounts, they can also pilfer valuable information such as business development strategies, new product specifications, and contract bidding plans, and sell the data to competitors.

This is supposed to be choice A, the OA.

Let me now rephrase it for easy understanding by flipping the subject and verb.

1. As criminal activity on the Internet becomes more and more sophisticated, thieves are not only able to divert cash from company bank accounts,
2. they can also pilfer valuable information such as business development strategies, new product specifications, and contract bidding plans, and sell the data to competitors.

The question is about the structure of this sentence. Isn't part 1 a complex sentence with a dependent clause and an independent clause?
2. For all that, part 2 seems to be an IC. Therefore, the whole scheme is that this is a complex- compound sentence with two ICs. Eventually when there are two ICs, then there should a valid conjunction or punctuation such as semi colon or period to conjugate both the ICs. If a comma alone conjugates both, then it will turn out to be a comma splice.

Is my reasoning missing something n error or does this sentence belong to some other type of sentence structure that I haven't known.

P.S:It has been pointed out that GMAC spends anywhere from $1500 to $3000 on each of these questions. Therefore, I feel strongly that I must be wrong.
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Daagh, you're bringing this to a whole new level of grammar intensity! Always fun. (And yes, apparently I'm a grammar nerd or something. I guess it says that in my job title...?)

Disclaimer: unless you really love grammar, just stop reading right now. This isn't an important rant for most test-takers -- there are dozens (hundreds?) of far more important things to worry about on the GMAT.

OK, so answer choice (A) has three components:

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As criminal activity on the Internet becomes more and more sophisticated


So component #1 is clearly a dependent clause. On to #2:

Quote:
not only are thieves able to divert cash from company bank accounts


Ah, here it is: this can't stand alone as a sentence, either. Sure, it doesn't have a standard "marker" that "turns" an independent clause into a dependent clause (although, but, and, because, etc.), but it's still a dependent clause: it has a subject and a verb, but can't stand alone -- at least not the way it's written in (A).

So we have two dependent clauses so far. On to part #3:

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they can also pilfer valuable information such as business development strategies, new product specifications, and contract bidding plans, and sell the data to competitors.


And there's our independent clause. So we don't have a comma splice here, and GMAC didn't actually make a mistake in this case -- it's just that the middle clause is super-sneaky.

I hope this helps! And seriously: if you're not daagh and you didn't follow this explanation, please don't worry about it. Again, parallelism and other issues are way more important here.
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can I take a lesion as the following:

if we use full form "not only... but also", the parallelism is required.

if we use only "not only" and cut off "but, also" or both, the parallelism is not required

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Welcome and best wishes. Thanks for the response
Yes true! In GMAT, I agree we should not too bother about such flexible things as sentence structure, correlatives etc as much as we would do with the broader things such as list parallelism, verb parallelism or modifications etc to name a few. It also seems to be a trick that the entire attention has been diverted to the use of a popular idiom, while the real errors have been obscured though not deliberately in the incorrect choices. Test takers must be wary of this not so uncommon ploy.
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As criminal activity on the Internet becomes more and more sophisticated, not only are thieves able to divert cash from company bank accounts, they can also pilfer valuable information such as business development strategies, new product specifications, and contract bidding plans, and sell the data to competitors.

A. they can also pilfer valuable information such as business development strategies, new product specifications, and contract bidding plans, and sell

B. they can also pilfer valuable information that includes business development strategies, new product specifications, and contract bidding plans, and selling

C. also pilfering valuable information including business development strategies, new product specifications, and contract bidding plans, selling

D. but also pilfer valuable information such as business development strategies, new product specifications, and contract bidding plans to sell

E. but also pilfering valuable information such as business development strategies, new product specifications, and contract bidding plans and selling
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As criminal activity on the Internet becomes more and more sophisticated, not only are thieves able to
divert cash from company bank accounts, they can also pilfer valuable information such as business
development strategies, new product specifications, and contract bidding plans, and sell the data to
competitors.

Notice the construction “Not Only + Subject (thieves)….” So the other part of the sentence shall also have a Subject + Verb to make both the parts parallel…

A. they can also pilfer valuable information such as business development strategies, new product
specifications, and contract bidding plans, and sell
Correct as it is…

B. they can also pilfer valuable information that includes business development strategies, new product
specifications, and contract bidding plans, and selling
Last part of the sentence “, and selling” this gives and impression that “thieves can pilfer …..and selling” as apparent even these two things are part of the parallel items of the list, pilfer and selling are NOT parallel at all …

C. also pilfering valuable information including business development strategies, new product
specifications, and contract bidding plans, selling
Subject is missing. As explained above , the construction is “Not Only + Subject (thieves)….” So the other part of the sentence shall also have a Subject + Verb to make both the parts parallel

Had the “thieves” been outside of the “not only” structure …this would have been better…

D. but also pilfer valuable information such as business development strategies, new product
specifications, and contract bidding plans to sell
Same issue as C

E. but also pilfering valuable information such as business development strategies, new product
specifications, and contract bidding plans and selling
Same issue as C
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look at the problem simply

not only... but also require paralelism

not only .. also dose not require paralelism

these are two patterns quite different . that is all . simple.

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As criminal activity on the Internet becomes more and more sophisticated, Thieves are able to not only divert cash from company bank accounts, but also pilfer valuable information such as business development strategies, new product specifications, and contract bidding plans to sell the data to competitors.

Is this modified sentence correct ?

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As criminal activity on the Internet becomes more and more sophisticated, Thieves are able to not only divert cash from company bank accounts, but also pilfer valuable information such as business development strategies, new product specifications, and contract bidding plans to sell the data to competitors.

Is this modified sentence correct ?

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Hello rishabhdxt,

I will be glad to help you out with this one. :-)

The modified version of the sentence is grammatically correct. However, it does not present the same meaning as the original sentence does.

The original sentence says that the thieves able to divert cash from company bank accounts. But the sentence presents just possibility of other actions mentioned as they can also pilfer valuable information such as business development strategies, new product specifications, and contract bidding plans, and (can) sell the data to competitors.

Use of can in the original sentence presents possibility of an action while the modified sentence presented by you presents actions that take place for sure. This change does lead to change in the meaning of the original sentence.

I understand that our first instinct is to look for but also Y whenever we see not only X, especially when it appears in the non-underlined portion of the sentence.

But the structure of the not only X portion in this official sentence is such that writing the remaining information in but also Y manner will be difficult.

So here we get to learn a new usage from this official sentence. In certain cases, not only X can be used just by itself if the structure of the sentence demands so.


Hope this helps. :-)
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What is wrong in (D) that we selected (A) ?

With due respect to chetan2u I think we can assume subject as (they) in D to link with verb - pilfer.

Let me know your views.

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