It sounds like you would benefit from some topic-focused review on Sentence Correction. You need to make the transition from understanding the concepts that are taught in the study guides to recognizing the errors on GMAT questions. If you've studied with the
Manhattan GMAT SC book, you know that it contains lists of questions on the various topics (SV Agreement, Parallelism, Modifiers, etc.). Take one topic at a time and work out the related
OG questions. Try to make connections between theses questions of the same topic and take notes on any key points you feel you need to consider for the topic (ie watch out for "and" on parallelism, and "wh" words are common noun modifiers). Work on a topic until you feel confident in your ability to recognize the issue and answer it correctly. Then move on to the next topic.
Once you get through a few topics, do some practice without knowing the topics that are being tested. As you eliminate answers on these problems, try to categorize your reason for elminating the choice. For example, you may use a SV Agreement issue to eliminate 2 answer choices, but the other 2 eliminations come from parallelism (you can't use "it didn't sound good" as a reason!!!). Check with the
OG explanations to see how accurate you are in your practice. Spend plenty of time reviewing the explanation to see what things you got right and what things you missed.
If you see yourself struggling to recognize or correctly deal with a certain topic, you have to go back to your study materials until you get mastery.
It's a bit of a laborious process, but that's what the GMAT requires! I've worked with several people who have been very successful in improving their SC performance using this methodical, topic-based approach.
Best,
KW