OFFICIAL EXPLANATIONProject SC Butler: Day 147 Sentence Correction (SC1)
THE PROMPTQuote:
During warmer months, zooplankton, microscopic marine animals that drift in oceans and bodies of fresh water, sink from the water's surface when the sun rises to escape predators, ascending again to feed at night.
• Note: when an animal is mentioned and its number is not clear, GMAC will give us a clue.
"Zooplankton" is plural. In the non-underlined portion of the sentence, zooplankton are described as marine
animals.
Plurality doesn't matter in this question, but it does in many questions involving animals.
• Strip this sentence. Result:
Zooplankton sink from the water's surface when the sun rises to escape predators, ascending again to feed at night. THE OPTIONSQuote:
A) sink from the water's surface when the sun rises to escape predators, ascending
•
the sun does not rise [in order] to escape predators--
to escape predators explains why zooplankton
sink from the water's surface.Those two phrases should be next to each other.
• Nothing is wrong with
ascending.
--
ascending is an elegant way to make a dull sentence change rhythm.
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Ascending again to feed at night is a logical result of the preceding clause.
-- in order to escape predators, zooplankton sink at sunrise.
-- Well, if predators arrive at sunrise, apparently the danger has something to do with light and visibility.
When it gets dark, the zooplankton ascend to eat.
-- although I really like the creativity of the argument,
ascending is not ambiguous.
We know that ascending refers to zooplankton. The sun does not eat.
Quote:
B) sink from the water's surface at the sun's rise to escape predators, to ascend
• in English, when we talk about dawn, we say
when the sun rises or
at sunrise.--
The sun's rise is not idiomatic.
• I say more below about the possessive case. The
water's surface, after all, appears in the correct answer.
• Back to back infinitives? The repetition in
to escape predators, to ascend is awkward
Quote:
C) and sink from the water's surface when the sun rises, escaping predators and ascending
• Put C in the stripped sentence:
Zooplankton and sink from the water's surface when the sun rises, escaping predators and ascending again to feed at night.-- That AND should be a verb. This sentence is nonsensical.
Quote:
D) sink from the water's surface in order to escape predators when the sun rises and ascend
• everything looks good
Quote:
E) sink from the water's surface to escape predators at the sun's rising, and ascend
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at the sun's rising is not idiomatic. If in doubt, compare to D.
-- By the time you take the GMAT, you should have read in English enough to know
immediately whether (D) or (E) is better.
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The correct answer is D.OTHER ISSUES• Possessive nouns:
the sun's rise and
the sun's rising--
Xylan , I would have to mine data before I signed onto what you say is a guideline. What is the source of this guideline?
You seem to be a very thorough student of language. You certainly are conscientious.
I am not saying that the guideline is incorrect. I haven't read official questions with that issue in mind.
How possessive nouns behave is complicated and not something that is easily articulated in part because some inanimate nouns take possessives and others do not, but the difference can turn on many bases. One basis is idiom. Another is words used. (Water's surface = concrete noun, concrete noun whereas the sun's rise = concrete noun, action noun.)
Why is
the water's surface okay?
I would love to know the source. (I have heard this rule mentioned once before. From my review of official questions, I found a
pattern in which inanimate objects in the possessive case that do not fit my guideline below frequently are not in the correct answer. My sense of those words, though, was that the "of X" construction in other options was much easier to follow. In other words, the issue is one of style.)
We have to be a little careful with these guidelines. I pulled three official questions quickly. All use possessive inanimate objects.
• the company's - the question is
HERE• the nation's - the question is
HERE• the planet's - the question is
HERE• the rule about possessives-- There is a rule that I have never seen GMAC violate.
Do not use both OF and ['s] in the same possessive construction.-- GMAC considers such use redundant. Many style guides do not. Ignore them.
Sasha and Artem are cousins.
Correct: I'm going to the cafe to meet Sasha, a cousin
of Artem.
Correct: I'm going to the cafe to meet Sasha, Artem
's cousin.
Wrong: I'm going to the cafe to meet Sasha, a cousin
of Artem
's.• a guideline - avoid plural possessives (nouns that end in "S" and are followed by an apostrophe (--s')
Examples: animals' characteristics (characteristics of animals); humans' diseases (diseases in humans)
About 3/4 of the time—some sources say as often as 90% of the time—these forms are wrong.
COMMENTSManjugupta and
Juliiiii , welcome to SC Butler.
As always, I am glad to see posts by many people.
The analysis in these posts is good. Explanations that exist range from good to excellent.
In order to qualify for kudos, you must
explain your answers.