hello, please grade my essay.
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18 Aug 2014, 04:57
hello everyone
i'm new here, i'm taking my TOEFL exam very soon and i've been practice essay writing but i don't have anyone to grade it for me. please grade my essay.
thank you
the essay topic is:Some people spend their entire lives in one place. Others move a number of times throughout their lives, looking for a better job, house, community, or even climate. Which do you prefer: staying in one place or moving in search of another place? Use reasons and specific examples to support your opinion.
“There is no place like home”, a quote a lot of people say once they reach their front house door after an exhausting working day, or after a long trip. Unfortunately, Many people are forced to leave their homes where they have lived for the most period of their lives for many reasons. With the growing population every year, and its impact on the economy, many people have moved out to different place looking for better chances. In my opinion, I would rather stay in one place without ever having to move. For me, being stable at one place is very important socially and emotionally.
Living in one place for a very long time provides emotional and social stability. Being surrounded by the people you know and have grown up with is very securing. In today’s world, we are vulnerable to many difficulties and even crimes. Being well known and a part of a community provide the protection we need. Emotionally wise, we become very attached to our long life friends, and they are there for us when we need them. Moving into different places and having to part them leaves an empty space that cannot be easily replaced. Children are the most effected by constant moving. They tend to become emotionally attached to their schools and friends. They become socially awkward when they have to make new friends every time and then having to part them again.
The change in the in the economy situation have forced many people to move from one place to another. Some are looking for better paid jobs, or more spacious affordable houses or even in search for better schools for their children. One of the economical impacts is the lack of job opportunities in some cities. The rate of unemployment is one the rise and staying in a place where it is difficult to afford a decent living is intolerable. This situation had forced many to flee into different places looking for a better job chances to support their selves and families. Another reason for moving is having a large family that need either a more spacious house to accommodate them comfortably, or a place where they can find better schools for their children.
On the other hand, some people just love to travel. They literally live in their buses where they turn them into moving houses. These buses are called “Motorhome”. For them travelling is fun, they spend few months in every place they visit. They literally love being in the state of moving and see it as a lifetime adventure. Some even have children where they home school them inside the bus. These people love their lives and don’t like settling in one place at all.
In conclusion whether a person prefers to stay in on place or keep on moving is a personal preference. There are many factors that influence this decision. For me, I love settling in one place without having the need to move out. Nevertheless, many people love the change and adventure of moving into different places.