carcass wrote:
Marcab wrote:
And what about the last prepositional phrase, "in 1909 becoming bla bla bla". Why do you feel that it is incorrect, I am assuming that you feel so.
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As a novelist modifies Selma Lagerlof
turned || with wrote
"becoming the first woman and also the first Swedish writer that won" modifies Selma Lagerlof
How much modifiers should we have ??
In becoming ete etc.......in my logic point out to novelist but at the same time should refers to selma and at the same time novelist modifies selma.......
No way, we would lose the focus and the meaning of the sentence.
I would like to know from souvik if we can have more than a modifiers that modifie at the same time the same thing, especially in a long and complex sentence.
I think the answer is no. let me know what about.
Hey Carcass,
I am not exactly sure of what you mean.
But the above question is completely based on clarity/meaning.
And from what I have seen, back to back modifiers are ALWAYS wrong.
And the sentence that you mentioned, "and" makes the two things very independent and does not make much sense
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Turning away from literary realism to write romantic stories about the peasant life and landscape
of northern Sweden, in 1909 Selma Lagerlöf was the novelist who became the first woman and
was also the first Swedish writer to win the Nobel Prize for Literature.
A. Turning away from literary realism to write romantic stories about the peasant life and landscape
of northern Sweden, in 1909 Selma Lagerlöf was the novelist who became the first woman and
was also the first Swedish writer to win
B. She turned away from literary realism and wrote romantic stories about the peasant life and
landscape of northern Sweden, and novelist Selma Lagerlöf in 1909 became the first woman as
well as the first Swedish writer that won
C. Selma Lagerlöf was a novelist who turned away from literary realism to write romantic stories
about the peasant life and landscape of northern Sweden, and in 1909 she became the first
woman in addition to the first Swedish writer winning
D. A novelist who turned away from literary realism to write romantic stories about the peasant life
and landscape of northern Sweden, Selma Lagerlöf became in 1909 the first woman and also the
first Swedish writer to win
E. As a novelist, Selma Lagerlöf turned away from literary realism and wrote romantic stories about
the peasant life and landscape of northern Sweden, in 1909 becoming the first woman and also
the first Swedish writer that won
B is wrong in that the sentence is INCREDIBLY awkward.
It kind of is similar to : He is smart, and my brother is the topper of his class. "and" makes is independent and it sounds like my brother might not just be the antecedent of "he". VERY weird sentence.
C: "in addition" ruins thins
E is also super awful. Marcab pointed out all the anomalies with E. Though I do think prepositional phrases appearing after comma is not that awkward for example,
Moscow, in Germany, houses Siemens headquaters.
But it is awkward in almost every single way perceivable.
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