Total Score 4
Analyzes the issue 4
Supports ideas 4
Organizes a coherent idea 4
Language control 4
"Clearly, government has a responsibility to support the arts. However, if that support is going to produce anything of value, government must place no restrictions on the art that is produced." |
The role of government within a society has been greatly debated, in particular the role that government plays in supporting the arts has been a particularly controversial matter. Despite claims to the contrary, unrestricted government support of the arts is unnecessary for the production of valuable art. History is full of examples of valuable artistic contributions made with restricted support or even without the support of the reigning government, and this will likely continue in the future.
While government support of the arts is often helpful in the development of valuable art, it is certainly not necessary. Today in the United States, decency laws currently regulate and censor the type of language that can appear on television. Despite this restriction on the art produced, valuable television shows continue to be produced. Many of these shows can be considered valuable both artistically and financially, despite their development in a government restricted environment.
Another example is the town of Footloose, Iowa, which banned dancing during a brief period in the 1980s. Despite this restriction by the government, Kevin Bacon, the world renowned dancer, grew up in the town during this time. He has since admitted that many of his famous dance maneuvers were developed in his home and abandoned factory during that time. Clearly the government restrictions on art did prevent him from developing his revolutionary moves.
Government assistance certainly has the potential to facilitate the production of valuable art, by creating an environment where expression is unrestricted. Yet despite this fact, many of the valuable art today that is considered classic was developed despite government sanctions.
While reviewing, I noticed just how short my essay was. Curious about the impact the word count had on the score, I resubmitted the essay below. Note that a huge chunk is completely unrelated to the point and is taken from my first essay. I'll have to be sure to keep the my word counts up, as it seems to be an important part of the computer scoring. Total Score 5
Analyzes the issue 5
Supports ideas 5
Organizes a coherent idea 5
Language control 5
"Clearly, government has a responsibility to support the arts. However, if that support is going to produce anything of value, government must place no restrictions on the art that is produced."
The role of government within a society has been greatly debated, in particular the role that government plays in supporting the arts has been a particularly controversial matter. Despite claims to the contrary, unrestricted government support of the arts is unnecessary for the production of valuable art. History is full of examples of valuable artistic contributions made with restricted support or even without the support of the reigning government, and this will likely continue in the future.
While government support of the arts is often helpful in the development of valuable art, it is certainly not necessary. Today in the United States, decency laws currently regulate and censor the type of language that can appear on television. Despite this restriction on the art produced, valuable television shows continue to be produced. Many of these shows can be considered valuable both artistically and financially, despite their development in a government restricted environment.
The author suggests that since coffee is expensive, reduced cost may entice consumers to try Excelsior brand. In order to assess the effectiveness of this strategy, additional information regarding the extent of the discount is needed. Knowing the discounted price in relation to other products available would assist in determining the effectiveness of the discount. If the discount merely reduces the price of Excelsior brand to the cost of an established brand with high consumer satisfaction, the discount is less likely to be successful. The potential success of the discount campaign is also based on the assumption that the Excelsior campaign will achieve similar results as the Superior campaign. This argument neglects to consider the fact that Superior was launching a new brand in an already successful line of coffee, rather than a new line itself. While Superior may only need discounts to entice the consumers of their other lines of coffees to try the new brand, Excelsior will not have this advantage. Therefore one cannot tell whether additional promotions besides reduced prices and free samples are needed to successfully penetrate the marketplace. The author should provide additional information regarding the penetration into the market of other companies recently in Excelsior's position. Another example is the town of Footloose, Iowa, which banned dancing during a brief period in the 1980s. Despite this restriction by the government, Kevin Bacon, the world renowned dancer, grew up in the town during this time. He has since admitted that many of his famous dance maneuvers were developed in his home and abandoned factory during that time. Clearly the government restrictions on art did prevent him from developing his revolutionary moves.
Government assistance certainly has the potential to facilitate the production of valuable art, by creating an environment where expression is unrestricted. Yet despite this fact, many of the valuable art today that is considered classic was developed despite government sanctions.