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# Originally developed by ancient Hawaiians, surfing appeals

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Originally developed by ancient Hawaiians, surfing appeals to people due to the sport’s unusual confluence of adrenaline, skill, and high paced maneuvering, an unpredictable backdrop that is, by turns, graceful and serene, violent and formidable, and the camaraderie that often develops among people in their common quest to conquer nature.

a surfing appeals to people due to the sport’s unusual confluence of adrenaline, skill, and high paced maneuvering, an unpredictable backdrop that is, by turns, graceful and serene, violent and formidable, and the camaraderie that often develops

b surfing’s appeal is its unusual confluence of adrenaline, skill, and high paced maneuvering, an unpredictable backdrop that is, by turns, graceful and serene, violent and formidable, and the camaraderie that often develops

c surfing’s appeal to people is due to the sport’s unusual confluence of adrenaline, skill, and high paced maneuvering, an unpredictable backdrop that is, by turns, graceful and serene, violent and formidable, and developing camaraderie

d surfing appeals to people due to the sport’s unusual confluence of adrenaline, skill, and high paced maneuvering, a backdrop that is unpredictable and that is, by turns, gracefully and serenely violent and formidable, and the camaraderie that often develops

e surfing appeals to people due to their unusual confluence of adrenaline, skill, and high paced maneuvering, an unpredictable backdrop that is, by turns, graceful and serene, violent and formidable, and the camaraderie that often develops
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17 May 2008, 07:08
OK I think A creats a run-on error..

i think serenly violent and formidable is the right usage of adjectives..

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17 May 2008, 07:15
a surfing appeals to people due to the sport’s unusual confluence of adrenaline, skill, and high paced maneuvering, an unpredictable backdrop that is, by turns, graceful and serene, violent and formidable, and the camaraderie that often develops
Nothing wrong keep it for time being.

b surfing’s appeal is its unusual confluence of adrenaline, skill, and high paced maneuvering, an unpredictable backdrop that is, by turns, graceful and serene, violent and formidable, and the camaraderie that often develops.
What is originally developed (Surfing and not Surfing's appeal), so this option is incorrect.

c surfing’s appeal to people is due to the sport’s unusual confluence of adrenaline, skill, and high paced maneuvering, an unpredictable backdrop that is, by turns, graceful and serene, violent and formidable, and developing camaraderie
What is originally developed (Surfing and not Surfing's appeal), so this option is incorrect.

d surfing appeals to people due to the sport’s unusual confluence of adrenaline, skill, and high paced maneuvering, a backdrop that is unpredictable and that is, by turns, gracefully and serenely violent and formidable, and the camaraderie that often develops.
Uses "that is" twice and makes "gracefully and serenely violent and formidable" as one combined thing rather than separate items.

e surfing appeals to people due to their unusual confluence of adrenaline, skill, and high paced maneuvering, an unpredictable backdrop that is, by turns, graceful and serene, violent and formidable, and the camaraderie that often develops
Surfing (singular subject) does not agree with plural pronoun (their unsusal...)

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17 May 2008, 07:40
abhijit_sen wrote:
a surfing appeals to people due to the sport’s unusual confluence of adrenaline, skill, and high paced maneuvering, an unpredictable backdrop that is, by turns, graceful and serene, violent and formidable, and the camaraderie that often develops
Nothing wrong keep it for time being.

b surfing’s appeal is its unusual confluence of adrenaline, skill, and high paced maneuvering, an unpredictable backdrop that is, by turns, graceful and serene, violent and formidable, and the camaraderie that often develops.
What is originally developed (Surfing and not Surfing's appeal), so this option is incorrect.

c surfing’s appeal to people is due to the sport’s unusual confluence of adrenaline, skill, and high paced maneuvering, an unpredictable backdrop that is, by turns, graceful and serene, violent and formidable, and developing camaraderie
What is originally developed (Surfing and not Surfing's appeal), so this option is incorrect.

d surfing appeals to people due to the sport’s unusual confluence of adrenaline, skill, and high paced maneuvering, a backdrop that is unpredictable and that is, by turns, gracefully and serenely violent and formidable, and the camaraderie that often develops.
Uses "that is" twice and makes "gracefully and serenely violent and formidable" as one combined thing rather than separate items.

e surfing appeals to people due to their unusual confluence of adrenaline, skill, and high paced maneuvering, an unpredictable backdrop that is, by turns, graceful and serene, violent and formidable, and the camaraderie that often develops
Surfing (singular subject) does not agree with plural pronoun (their unsusal...)

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17 May 2008, 10:31
Brutal one.
Took me close to 2 min to even eliminate some of the choices.
I choose A.
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17 May 2008, 18:59
Source is MGMAT test 3. I took it yesterday and got this questions wrong. I have the full OE.
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17 May 2008, 19:23
sondenso wrote:
bsd_lover wrote:
Originally developed by ancient Hawaiians, surfing appeals to people due to the sport’s unusual confluence of adrenaline, skill, and high paced maneuvering, an unpredictable backdrop that is, by turns, graceful and serene, violent and formidable, and the camaraderie that often develops among people in their common quest to conquer nature.

a surfing appeals to people due to the sport’s unusual confluence of adrenaline, skill, and high paced maneuvering, an unpredictable backdrop that is, by turns, graceful and serene, violent and formidable, and the camaraderie that often develops

b surfing’s appeal is its unusual confluence of adrenaline, skill, and high paced maneuvering, an unpredictable backdrop that is, by turns, graceful and serene, violent and formidable, and the camaraderie that often develops

c surfing’s appeal to people is due to the sport’s unusual confluence of adrenaline, skill, and high paced maneuvering, an unpredictable backdrop that is, by turns, graceful and serene, violent and formidable, and developing camaraderie

d surfing appeals to people due to the sport’s unusual confluence of adrenaline, skill, and high paced maneuvering, a backdrop that is unpredictable and that is, by turns, gracefully and serenely violent and formidable, and the camaraderie that often develops

e surfing appeals to people due to their unusual confluence of adrenaline, skill, and high paced maneuvering, an unpredictable backdrop that is, by turns, graceful and serene, violent and formidable, and the camaraderie that often develops

I lost the way, I eliminated only E and B

you should eliminate B and C right away.
Hawaiians developed surfing NOT surfing's appeal

'their' in E is wrong. surfing is singular.
'an unpredictable backdrop that is' in A is less wordy than 'a backdrop that is unpredictable and that is' in D.
I will go with A.
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17 May 2008, 19:33
saravalli wrote:
you should eliminate B and C right away.
Hawaiians developed surfing NOT surfing's appeal

'their' in E is wrong. surfing is singular.
'an unpredictable backdrop that is' in A is less wordy than 'a backdrop that is unpredictable and that is' in D.
I will go with A

Thanks Saravalli, but I whisper with only you that I dont know what "surfing" is!
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17 May 2008, 19:37
Choosing between A, D and E.B and C uses..surfing's which is incorrect.
E has ..'their' which is wrong
out of A and D ,D is wordy so can be eliminated
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18 May 2008, 03:27
OA is A.

OE :
This sentence contains three parallel elements: “the unusual confluence,” “an unpredictable backdrop,” and “the camaraderie.” Additionally, the introductory modifying phrase “originally developed by ancient Hawaiians” correctly modifies the noun “surfing.”

(A) CORRECT. This choice properly follows rules of parallel construction and uses the introductory phrase to correctly modify the noun “surfing.”

(B) The introductory modifying phrase “originally developed by ancient Hawaiians” incorrectly describes “surfing’s appeal” rather than surfing itself. Additionally, the pronoun “its” has no clear antecedent to refer to.

(C) The introductory modifying phrase “originally developed by ancient Hawaiians” incorrectly describes “surfing’s appeal” rather than surfing itself. Furthermore, the third element of the sentence, “developing camaraderie among people,” is not parallel to the other two elements.

(D) This choice lacks clarity of meaning by stating “a backdrop that is unpredictable and that is, by turns, gracefully and serenely violent and formidable.” The original intent of the sentence is to use the adjectives graceful, serene, violent, and formidable to describe surfing’s “unpredictable backdrop”; this choice improperly separates this into two distinct ideas. Additionally, this choice incorrectly changes the adjectives “graceful” and “serene” to adverbs “gracefully” and “serenely”; thus, the adverbs incorrectly modify the adjectives “violent” and “formidable” rather than the noun “backdrop.”

(E) The plural pronoun “their” incorrectly refers to the plural noun “people,” making it seem that people, rather than surfing, contain the three parallel elements found in the sentence.
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18 May 2008, 19:00
Yay! I got this one right. I picked A. Thanks for the nice post, bsd_lover. BTW, I don't know how to deliver Kudos.. Had I know I would have delivered one for this darn tough question.

Edit: I just learned how to do the Kudos and delivered one to you without a delay. Thanks for sharing these interesting questions.
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19 Sep 2010, 10:00
somewhere I read that "due to" should be replaced by "caused by" and not by "because of". Is my understanding correct? If so, the above answer has an inherent error. Please clarify.
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