TheUltimateWinner wrote:
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Beatrix Potter, in her book illustrations, carefully coordinating them with her narratives, capitalized on her keen observation and love of the natural world.
(A) Beatrix Potter, in her book illustrations, carefully coordinating them with her narratives,
(B) In her book illustrations, carefully coordinating them with her narratives, Beatrix Potter
(C) In her book illustrations, which she carefully coordinated with her narratives, Beatrix Potter
(D) Carefully coordinated with her narratives, Beatrix Potter, in her book illustrations
(E) Beatrix Potter, in her book illustrations, carefully coordinated them with her narratives and
Request Expert Reply:Q1:Is B ok if THEM is removed from the choice? It seems that everything feel ok after removing 'them' from choice B. Am I missing anything, experts?
Q2:Can we cross out choice D because there is
no COMMA after 'illustrations'? I mean-if we don't use COMMA after 'illustrations' then 'in her book illustrations' will not be considered as
modifier, but 'in her book illustrations' is definitely a
modifier.
Apart from meaning issue!
Q1:Is B ok if THEM is removed from the choice? It seems that everything feel ok after removing 'them' from choice B. Am I missing anything, experts?
Q.1: Coming to the question about whether removing the pronoun ‘them’ would solve the problem, no, I’m afraid it wouldn’t. If you refer to the explanation from
egmat, you will see that the pronoun ‘them’ is part of a participle phrase that is supposedly modifying Beatrix Potter, but is actually an ambiguous modifier because of its placement. Because it is placed after one modifier – In her book illustrations – this modifier does not seem to have an appropriate subject. If we remove the pronoun, the modifier only becomes more confusing because then, we wouldn’t know what is being coordinated.
Option B also contains a modifier error. It contains two modifiers placed one after the other before the subject “Beatrix Potter” is mentioned. The modifiers are “In her book illustrations” and “carefully coordinating them with her narratives”. It is generally seen on the GMAT that when there are multiple modifiers describing one subject, the subject is placed in between the modifiers.
Q2:Can we cross out choice D because there is
no COMMA after 'illustrations'? I mean-if we don't use COMMA after 'illustrations' then 'in her book illustrations' will not be considered as
modifier, but 'in her book illustrations' is definitely a
modifier.
Apart from meaning issue!
Q.2:
The comma would definitely make the sentence clearer. The lack of the comma can be one reason to rule out the option though the stronger reason would the meaning conveyed by the modifier – carefully coordinated with her narratives. The use of the participle ‘coordinated’ implies that Beatrix Potter was the one that was coordinated with her narratives and not her illustrations, as is the intended meaning.
I hope this helps.
Jayanthi Kumar.
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