OFFICIAL EXPLANATIONProject SC Butler: Sentence Correction (SC2)
Quote:
Since its opening in 1869, the Suez Canal has made transportation by water among Europe and Asia easier by providing a connection between the Mediterranean Sea and the Red Sea.
A) the Suez Canal has made transportation by water among Europe and Asia easier by providing a connection between the Mediterranean Sea and the Red Sea.
B) the Suez Canal has eased transportation between Europe and Asia by water to a greater degree by providing a connection between the Mediterranean Sea and the Red Sea.
C) the Suez Canal has facilitated maritime transportation between Europe and Asia by connecting the Mediterranean Sea and the Red Sea.
D) transportation by water between Europe and Asia has been facilitated by the Suez Canal, which connects the Mediterranean Sea to the Red Sea.
E) Europe and Asia maritime transportation has been relieved thanks to the Suez Canal, a connection between the Mediterranean Sea and the Red Sea.
• Split #1: Improper modificationAfter the introductory phrase "Since its opening in 1869," we should be reading about the Suez Canal.
That adjective phrase modifies the noun
Suez canal.
Noun modifiers should be as close as possible to their nouns.
Options D and E place "Suez canal" far from its modifier and worse, place the wrong noun after that introductory phrase ("transportation by water" and "Europe and Asia maritime transportation," respectively)
Eliminate D and E.
In addition, the passive voice in option D is not as effective as the active voice in option C.
This sentence does not aim to downplay the importance or "agency" of the Suez Canal, an effect that the passive voice often creates.
To the contrary, this sentence highlights the importance of the Suez Canal. Active voice is better than passive voice in this case.
In option B, the modifier
by water is separated from its noun,
transportation.
In order to preserve clarity and follow the "Touch Rule" (noun modifiers should be as close as possible to their targets),
by water should be placed right next to
transportation.
Option B also contains some strange phrasing: The Suez Canal
has eased . . . transportation between X and Y . . .
to a greater degree.
→ this coupling is strange: "eased XYZ to a greater degree" at worst is nonsensical and at best is not nearly as good as the language in option C.
→
to a greater degree is not necessary; the verb
eased already implies improvement.
ELIMINATE B, D, AND E
• Split #2: Among v. BetweenThe general rule is that we use
between if we are comparing two items and
among if we are comparing more than two items.
That general rule is not the whole story; there are exceptions, though you will probably never see them and if you do, it will be on a hard SC.
That said, when we are talking about a connection that goes from one place to one other place (two places total), we always use
between to describe that connection.
Wrong:
The cozy relationship among Trump and Putin disturbs many national security analysts.Option A incorrectly uses
among Europe and Asia. The correct phrase is
between Europe and Asia.
ELIMINATE A
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