Please review my TOEFL independent writing essay.
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18 May 2013, 13:08
Question : Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time. Which of these situations do you think is better?
"The greatest responsibility you will ever have is to yourself".
I strongly advocate that young adults should start their independent life as soon as possible. Yes, there will be many difficulties but the true essence of an independent life lies in facing them. I believe living independent life is a gateway to responsibility and accountability. Additionally, this distance strengthens the emotional bond with the family. As it is said, "Love is amplified by distances". I would like to illustrate two basic reasons why I support the decision of living independently at an earlier stage of adulthood.
First, a person living independent life becomes more responsible. He will face many difficult situations and in turn become a stronger person. Taking his own decisions will fill him with a sense of responsibility because his future will dwell on these little decisions. Only the person himself will be responsible for the outcomes of his choices resulting in accountability. I have some real-life examples to support my opinion. In my office, there is a girl who still lives with her parents at an age of twenty-eight! Almost everyone notices immaturity in her behavior. Whenever there is a new project in the team, she is reluctant to take the responsibility. She baffles very easily when circumstances are not in her favor. On the other hand, my manager is a very influential person. His sound decision-making and accountability make him a great leader. I could guess the reason behind his strengths when I came to know about his background. Due to his parent's death, he had to start an independent life at a very young age. Such examples depict the advantages of autonomous living.
In addition to building of a strong personality, distance between you and your family increase the affection. Generation gap has always been there. When a person enters the adult age, his many opinions may differ from parent's opinions. This difference may sometimes cause disputes in families. I have seen it in my family. My brother became financially independent when he entered his twenties and his involvement in many important family matters increased. Many times he and my father had different point of views, which caused clashes in their egos. If the person is living away from his family, there will be no interference. We value something most when we do not have it. So, these distances increase the value of relationships.
Definitely, an independent life develops overall personality, making us strong and responsible. It also increases the affability in relationships with the family members. A young adult should choose to live an independent life as soon as possible.
As they say, "It’s a magical world. Let’s go exploring!"