GKomoku wrote:
generis wrote:
Project SC Butler: Day 81 Sentence Correction (SC2)
For SC butler Questions Click Here The painter James Whistler used dark colors to emphasize the melancholy mood of his works, best known as a tonalist, and played on haunting shadows in his most well-known piece, "Whistler's Mother."Meaning analysis:1. The painter James Whistler used dark colors to emphasize the melancholy mood of his works
2. The painter James Whistler played on haunting shadows in his most well-known piece, "Whistler's Mother."
3. Also The painter James Whistler was best known as a tonalist.
Error analysis: let's see sentence (A) structure -->
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We have 1 subject with 2 verbs perfectly // to each other. This is two separate actions that the painter did, not connected with one anoter. Only v-ed modifier seems weird. It has to modify "painter", but illogically modifiy "workd". I've never seen the case when v-ed modifier was placed so far from the modifying entity.
POEA) The painter James Whistler used dark colors to emphasize the melancholy mood of his works,
best known as a tonalist, and
B) The painter James Whistler used dark colors to emphasize the melancholy mood of his works
, being a tonalist, and
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(sentence structure is exactly same as (A) but now we have "v-ing" modifier in face with "being" - which is not welcome on GMAT, exept 2 cases: 1. part of the passive voice progressive tence 2. as subject of the clause (noun), in our situation none of them acceptable)C) The painter James Whistler, best known as a tonalist, used dark colors to emphasize the melancholy mood of his works
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(we have our v-ed modifier close to its modifying entity, but have another problem. comma + FANBOYS introduces new IC, but we don't have any subject for our new IC. In fact this 2 active verbs "used" and "played" can be connected with simple "and" without any comma, we do not need any new IC, just one clause with two equal verbs.)D) The painter James Whistler, best known as a tonalist, used dark colors to emphasize the melancholy mood of his works
, which he
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("which" preceded by comma can modify only preceding noun, "which" can jump over pp if this pp cannot be placed anywhere in the sentence without distorting its meaning. here "which" cannot refer nither "works" or "melancholy mood" - illogical)E) The painter James Whistler, best known as a tonalist,
used to emphasize the melancholy mood of his works with dark colors
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(same as in (C), no IC, also placement change of emphasize slightly changes the meaning of the sentence)I've eliminated all answer choices
I'm 100% sure that (D), 90% that (C) and (E) are wrong.
So let's back to (A) and (B)
A) The painter James Whistler used dark colors to emphasize the melancholy mood of his works, best known as a tonalist, and
B) The painter James Whistler used dark colors to emphasize the melancholy mood of his works, being a tonalist, and
(please don't get confused comma before "and", this is a comma pair of modifier , best known as a tonalist, and it goes with modifier, so there is no comma between two active verbs of the sentence)The only divverence between them is modifier.
v-ed vs
v-ingAs I told I've never seen the case when v-ed modifier was placed so far from the modifying entity and be correct, it usually comply with touch rule.
But v-ing is more flexible.
Let's choose different path. Ignore red tag "being" - but not always wrong, we've just alerted when we see "being".
Let's replace "being" with another v-ing modifier "acting", "performing" whatever...
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v-ing modifier preceded by comma modifies whole preceding clause and has subject as a doer of the action.
So Acting as a tonalist, The painter James Whistler used dark colors to emphasize the melancholy mood of his works and and played on haunting shadows in his most well-known piece, "Whistler's Mother."
This has perfect sence.
I think
B is the answer
generis please help untangle this gordian knot
A
Gordion knot. Perfect metaphor.
GKomoku , in a very strict technical sense, and depending on the manual of style,
yes: a single subject who does two verbs creates a compound predicate.
A compound predicate should not be separated by comma + conjunction unless the subject is mentioned again after the comma.
The GMAT will never test this rule because this usage of commas is dictated by different manuals.
Chicago says that the comma is obligatory.
Another that I can't recall at the moment says that the comma is not obligatory if the meaning is evident.
• Comma testing?
The GMAT does test whether there is a comma before
which, though more rarely in recent years if OGs are to be believed.
The GMAT does test the Oxford comma, again, less frequently than GMAC used to do.
The GMAT does test comma splices
The GMAT does test whether commas are ineffective in a complicated list and should be replaced by semicolons.
Those four areas with respect to commas are the Big 4 of GMAC comma testing.
Sometimes we need commas even if they are allegedly prohibited.
For the purposes of incredibly strict adherence to rules of most style guides,
the comma before "and played" probably should not be in the sentence.
This sentence is not a run-on. If the definition of comma spice were stretched a lot,
this sentence might qualify as one. I doubt it.
Whatever you want to call this option's error, it not the sort that you will be expected to use to eliminate GMAC choices.
Comma splice errors are
very obvious when they are tested by GMAC.
GMAC puts in the comma and leaves out the conjunction (the FANBOY). This way:
Comma splice: He smiled as he poured the wine, he handed her the glass.
So now what? In A and B, plural works cannot be modified by the singular "a tonalist."
You have to choose among C, D, and E.
--
which can never refer to a clause. Ever. The issue is tested fairly frequently.
-- Option E does not help in terms of the extra comma, and the word "used" is not correct
This art-craft-science business of sentence correction is hard.
Sometimes we find ourselves bound up in a Gordian knot.
Cut the knot by choosing the lesser of two evils.
"comma + which" can never modify a clause
-- this rule is among the most airtight of GMAC rules
-- comma usage other than the 4 areas mentioned above is not tested.
-- except in the case of a splice, which is connected to the absence of a conjunction, comma usage is considered a matter of
style.
-- choose grammar over style
I am glad that you did not automatically reject "being."
But in B, plural
works are not a singular
tonalist.
The answer is C.
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