sunny91 wrote:
Hi Mike,
I want to know what is wrong with option D. some of which were...........here we have verb were (plural), so which correctly modifies posts and not his first term. Please help.
Dear
sunny91,
I'm happy to respond.
My friend, I will begin by telling you something shocking. The GMAT SC is NOT a test of grammar. The GMAT SC is a test of
the quality of writing, and the quality of writing depends on (1) grammar, (2)
logic, and (3)
rhetoric; in a well-written sentence, such as a correct answer on the SC, all three of these strands cooperate to support a single clear
meaning. The folks who write the GMAT SC questions are concerned with all aspects of the quality of writing.
One direct consequence of these facts is that the GMAT SC often has incorrect answers that are 100% grammatically correct. This is particularly befuddling to non-native students who are focused exclusively on grammar: such answers function as traps for these students. You see, a version of a sentence might be 100% grammatically correct, but illogical or awkward or wordy or etc. etc. There are dozens of ways in which a sentence can fall short of the standards of high quality writing.
In this SC question about the late Sen.
Daniel Inouye (a very good man!), choice (D) is precisely such an answer. Choice (D) is 100% correct grammatically, absolutely no grammar flaw at all, and yet, it's not the right answer. Why? consider (C) and (D) side by side:
(C) . . .
during his first term, including assistant majority whip . . .
(D) . . .
during his first term, some of which were assistant majority whip . . .
Notice that, compared to version (C), version (D) uses one more syllable, 66% more letters, and 300% more words! Whether we are speaking or writing the sentence, it takes more effort & more space to use (D) than (C). The paradox is that if (C) didn't exist, (D) could be a perfectly fine right answer, but compared to (C), (D) looks clunky, swollen, and rambling. This is a subtle point: the GMAT SC is not just about black vs. white, absolutely right vs. absolutely wrong, the way math always is; instead, it is quite explicitly about the "
best answer," and this focus means that one choice could be very good but still be beaten out by something better!
It's often hard to give clear simple rules for rhetoric, but one clear rule that the GMAT consistently follows is as follows:
if you can say exactly the same thing correctly with more words or fewer, it's always better to say it with fewer. This is one of the many conditions in which a 100% grammatically correct answer would not be the OA.
Does all this make sense?
Mike