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Hi guys,

can anybody help me out with the following 4 questions? would appreciate an explanation about your answer.

69. After the Vietnam war Bettye Granther, a U.S. Army nurse, continued her efforts on behalf of injured Vietnamese children, providing medical care, helping to reunite estranged families, and the establishment of a fund for the children’s future education.
(A) the establishment of a fund for the children’s future education
(B) the establishing of a fund for the future education of children
(C) establishing a fund for the children’s future education
(D) establishing a fund for the childrens’ future education
(E) the establishment of a fund for the childrens’ future education

72. Aho, a Kiowa matriarch, held festivals in her home, they featured the preparation of great quantities of ceremonial food, the wearing of many layers of colorful clothing adorned with silver, and the recounting of traditional tribal jokes and stories.
(A) Aho, a Kiowa matriarch, held festivals in her home, they featured
(B) Festivals were held in Aho, a Kiowa matriarch’s home, which featured
(C) Aho, who was a Kiowa matriarch in her home, held festivals featuring
(D) In her home, Aho, a Kiowa matriarch, held festivals that featured
(E) Aho, a Kiowa matriarch, held festivals in her home that featured

78. Although dozens of New York’s small museums are either devoted to local history or various ethnic groups, there are many one-of-a-kind museums from Manhattan to the Bronx that are open for exploration on summer weekends.
(A) Although dozens of New York’s small museums are either devoted to local history or various ethnic groups, there are
(B) Although dozens of New York’s small museums are devoted to local history or various ethnic groups,
(C) Dozens of New York’s small museums are devoted to local history or various ethnic groups, but there are
(D) Dozens of New York’s small museums are devoted to local history or various ethnic groups, and there are also
(E) Devoted to local history or various ethnic groups, dozens of New York’s small museums and also

80. Although films about the American West depict coyotes as solitary animals howling mournfully on the tops of distant hills, in reality these gregarious creatures live in stable groups that occupy the same territory for long periods.
(A) films about the American West depict coyotes as solitary animals howling mournfully on the tops of distant hills
(B) in films about the American West coyotes are depicted to be solitary animals that howl mournfully on the tops of distant hills
(C) coyotes are depicted as solitary animals howling mournfully on the tops of distant hills in films about the American West
(D) films about the American West depict coyotes as if they were solitary, mournfully howling animals on the tops of distant hills
(E) films about the American West depict coyotes to be solitary and mournfully howling animals on the tops of distant hills
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08 Jun 2008, 23:10
69. After the Vietnam war Bettye Granther, a U.S. Army nurse, continued her efforts on behalf of injured Vietnamese children, providing medical care, helping to reunite estranged families, and the establishment of a fund for the children’s future education.
(A) the establishment of a fund for the children’s future education
(B) the establishing of a fund for the future education of children
(C) establishing a fund for the children’s future education
(D) establishing a fund for the childrens’ future education
(E) the establishment of a fund for the childrens’ future education

***** C
Problem with parallelism - A, E are wrong. Among B, C, D - C is the best answer.
In the case of Plural possessive, for plural nouns not ending in "s," needs - an apostrophe and "s."
Example: Children's toys.

72. Aho, a Kiowa matriarch, held festivals in her home, they featured the preparation of great quantities of ceremonial food, the wearing of many layers of colorful clothing adorned with silver, and the recounting of traditional tribal jokes and stories.
(A) Aho, a Kiowa matriarch, held festivals in her home, they featured
(B) Festivals were held in Aho, a Kiowa matriarch’s home, which featured
(C) Aho, who was a Kiowa matriarch in her home, held festivals featuring
(D) In her home, Aho, a Kiowa matriarch, held festivals that featured
(E) Aho, a Kiowa matriarch, held festivals in her home that featured

*****E, here that refers to the festivals held by Aho, a Kiowa matriarch.

78. Although dozens of New York’s small museums are either devoted to local history or various ethnic groups, there are many one-of-a-kind museums from Manhattan to the Bronx that are open for exploration on summer weekends.
(A) Although dozens of New York’s small museums are either devoted to local history or various ethnic groups, there are
(B) Although dozens of New York’s small museums are devoted to local history or various ethnic groups,
(C) Dozens of New York’s small museums are devoted to local history or various ethnic groups, but there are
(D) Dozens of New York’s small museums are devoted to local history or various ethnic groups, and there are also
(E) Devoted to local history or various ethnic groups, dozens of New York’s small museums and also

***A.

80. Although films about the American West depict coyotes as solitary animals howling mournfully on the tops of distant hills, in reality these gregarious creatures live in stable groups that occupy the same territory for long periods.
(A) films about the American West depict coyotes as solitary animals howling mournfully on the tops of distant hills
(B) in films about the American West coyotes are depicted to be solitary animals that howl mournfully on the tops of distant hills
(C) coyotes are depicted as solitary animals howling mournfully on the tops of distant hills in films about the American West
(D) films about the American West depict coyotes as if they were solitary, mournfully howling animals on the tops of distant hills
(E) films about the American West depict coyotes to be solitary and mournfully howling animals on the tops of distant hills

****C In the above statement, "these gregarious creatures" indicates the subject is "coyotes", not films.

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31 Jul 2008, 10:56
Well i agree with all the solutions provided by gkalidasu , except one : 72

In my opinion the answer to 72 should be D

Reason :

-In A the pronoun "they" as quite odd.
-B is awkward and passive.
-C distorts the meaning by saying that "Kiowa matriarch in her home"
-E should not be the solution as towards the end of the sentence , it distorts the meaning slightly :
"held festivals in her home that featured" ; It looks as if the home features something whereas its the festival which should feature.
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31 Jul 2008, 11:26
Please post one question at a time.
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69. After the Vietnam war Bettye Granther, a U.S. Army nurse, continued her efforts on behalf of injured Vietnamese children, providing medical care, helping to reunite estranged families, and the establishment of a fund for the children’s future education.
(A) the establishment of a fund for the children’s future education
(B) the establishing of a fund for the future education of children
(C) establishing a fund for the children’s future education
(D) establishing a fund for the childrens’ future education
(E) the establishment of a fund for the childrens’ future education

Sentence has parallelism issue (Eliminate A, B and E):
After the Vietnam war Bettye Granther, a U.S. Army nurse Continued…, providing…, helping … and establishing …
Between C and D:
D: has plural issue – children is plural of child
Childerns’ is incorrect as a child is not ending in s.

72. Aho, a Kiowa matriarch, held festivals in her home, they featured the preparation of great quantities of ceremonial food, the wearing of many layers of colorful clothing adorned with silver, and the recounting of traditional tribal jokes and stories.
(A) Aho, a Kiowa matriarch, held festivals in her home, they featured
(B) Festivals were held in Aho, a Kiowa matriarch’s home, which featured
(C) Aho, who was a Kiowa matriarch in her home, held festivals featuring
(D) In her home, Aho, a Kiowa matriarch, held festivals that featured
(E) Aho, a Kiowa matriarch, held festivals in her home that featured

A - Missing coordination issue
B - Passive
C – Wordy and awkward
D – Illogical - In her home held festivals

78. Although dozens of New York’s small museums are either devoted to local history or various ethnic groups, there are many one-of-a-kind museums from Manhattan to the Bronx that are open for exploration on summer weekends.
(A) Although dozens of New York’s small museums are either devoted to local history or various ethnic groups, there are
(B) Although dozens of New York’s small museums are devoted to local history or various ethnic groups,
(C) Dozens of New York’s small museums are devoted to local history or various ethnic groups, but there are
(D) Dozens of New York’s small museums are devoted to local history or various ethnic groups, and there are also
(E) Devoted to local history or various ethnic groups, dozens of New York’s small museums and also

The sentence is describing two different types of museums. No contrast is required.
Eliminate - A, B, C
Between D and E:
E – Changes the meaning

80. Although films about the American West depict coyotes as solitary animals howling mournfully on the tops of distant hills, in reality these gregarious creatures live in stable groups that occupy the same territory for long periods.
(A) films about the American West depict coyotes as solitary animals howling mournfully on the tops of distant hills
(B) in films about the American West coyotes are depicted to be solitary animals that howl mournfully on the tops of distant hills
(C) coyotes are depicted as solitary animals howling mournfully on the tops of distant hills in films about the American West
(D) films about the American West depict coyotes as if they were solitary, mournfully howling animals on the tops of distant hills
(E) films about the American West depict coyotes to be solitary and mournfully howling animals on the tops of distant hills

Depict as – correct idiom

D – if they were – changes the tone to hypothetical
Depict to be – unidiomatic
Eliminate: B, E

Between A and C
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31 Jul 2008, 18:49
x2suresh wrote:
Please post one question at a time.
also underline the sentence

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I agree with this .
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07 Jun 2010, 10:27
But the OA is A. Though I also think its C.
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First of all, RobRoy, please don't do this again. It's impossible for people to keep track of which question is being discussed in which post. Instead, post every question you have in a separate thread.

I was asked in a PM to take on just this question, which everyone here seems to have answered incorrectly:

80. Although films about the American West depict coyotes as solitary animals howling mournfully on the tops of distant hills, in reality these gregarious creatures live in stable groups that occupy the same territory for long periods.
(A) films about the American West depict coyotes as solitary animals howling mournfully on the tops of distant hills

(B) in films about the American West coyotes are depicted to be solitary animals that howl mournfully on the tops of distant hills
PROBLEM: "Depict to be" is incorrect, even though "in films" and "in reality" are very nicely paralleled.

(C) coyotes are depicted as solitary animals howling mournfully on the tops of distant hills in films about the American West
PROBLEM: This totally wrecks the meaning. Most of you seemed to interpret this correctly (using logic from previous answer choices). One possible meaning is that "coyotes are depicted as solitary animals howling mournfully on the tops of distant hills WHEN THEY ARE in films about the American West". But the way this reads is that "coyotes are depicted (BY SOMEBODY, SOMEWHERE, SOMETIME) as solitary animals howling mournfully on the tops of distant hills in films about the American West". See? It's as if they're depicted elsewhere as if they were in films. The modifiers here are modifying all the wrong stuff.

(D) films about the American West depict coyotes as if they were solitary, mournfully howling animals on the tops of distant hills
PROBLEM: Depict "as if" is also incorrect. Also reversing "mournfully howling" is awkward (though probably not grammatically incorrect).

(E) films about the American West depict coyotes to be solitary and mournfully howling animals on the tops of distant hills
PROBLEM: Depict "to be" is wrong.

Voila!

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09 Jun 2010, 06:50
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Hi guys,

can anybody help me out with the following 4 questions? would appreciate an explanation about your answer.

69. After the Vietnam war Bettye Granther, a U.S. Army nurse, continued her efforts on behalf of injured Vietnamese children, providing medical care, helping to reunite estranged families, and the establishment of a fund for the children’s future education.

(A) the establishment of a fund for the children’s future education
(B) the establishing of a fund for the future education of children
(C) establishing a fund for the children’s future education
(D) establishing a fund for the childrens’ future education
(E) the establishment of a fund for the childrens’ future education
C,D are the same here, the concepts being tested here are paralellism, so the sentence needs to be parallel with the rest of the sentence.

72. Aho, a Kiowa matriarch, held festivals in her home, they featured the preparation of great quantities of ceremonial food, the wearing of many layers of colorful clothing adorned with silver, and the recounting of traditional tribal jokes and stories.
D
(A) Aho, a Kiowa matriarch, held festivals in her home, they featured
A is confusing, it sounds as if they refers to home the home featured ... but the festivals featured ...
(B) Festivals were held in Aho, a Kiowa matriarch’s home, which featured
confusing, aho is not the home
(C) Aho, who was a Kiowa matriarch in her home, held festivals featuringstates that Aho was ... only in her home
(D) In her home, Aho, a Kiowa matriarch, held festivals that featuredThis is the closest that sounds to be the answer
(E) Aho, a Kiowa matriarch, held festivals in her home that featuredconfusing as that pronoun refers to antecedent home

78. Although dozens of New York’s small museums are either devoted to local history or various ethnic groups, there are many one-of-a-kind museums from Manhattan to the Bronx that are open for exploration on summer weekends.
A
(A) Although dozens of New York’s small museums are either devoted to local history or various ethnic groups, there are
This clearly and logically presents the answer.
(B) Although dozens of New York’s small museums are devoted to local history or various ethnic groups,
When although is given, there needs to be a comparision made Although this, that also. Removing, there are, will remove the logical nature of although, comparision.
(C) Dozens of New York’s small museums are devoted to local history or various ethnic groups, but there are
(D) Dozens of New York’s small museums are devoted to local history or various ethnic groups, and there are also
(E) Devoted to local history or various ethnic groups, dozens of New York’s small museums and also

80. Although films about the American West depict coyotes as solitary animals howling mournfully on the tops of distant hills, in reality these gregarious creatures live in stable groups that occupy the same territory for long periods.
B
(A) films about the American West depict coyotes as solitary animals howling mournfully on the tops of distant hills
Does not maintain parallelism
(B) in films about the American West coyotes are depicted to be solitary animals that howl mournfully on the tops of distant hills
This maintains the parallelism, i.e. in films about the american west coyotes are...in reality these gregarious creatures...
(C) coyotes are depicted as solitary animals howling mournfully on the tops of distant hills in films about the American West
awkward
(D) films about the American West depict coyotes as if they were solitary, mournfully howling animals on the tops of distant hills
awkward
(E) films about the American West depict coyotes to be solitary and mournfully howling animals on the tops of distant hills

awkward
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27 Jun 2010, 23:03
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Hey All,

First of all, RobRoy, please don't do this again. It's impossible for people to keep track of which question is being discussed in which post. Instead, post every question you have in a separate thread.

I was asked in a PM to take on just this question, which everyone here seems to have answered incorrectly:

80. Although films about the American West depict coyotes as solitary animals howling mournfully on the tops of distant hills, in reality these gregarious creatures live in stable groups that occupy the same territory for long periods.
(A) films about the American West depict coyotes as solitary animals howling mournfully on the tops of distant hills

(B) in films about the American West coyotes are depicted to be solitary animals that howl mournfully on the tops of distant hills
PROBLEM: "Depict to be" is incorrect, even though "in films" and "in reality" are very nicely paralleled.

(C) coyotes are depicted as solitary animals howling mournfully on the tops of distant hills in films about the American West
PROBLEM: This totally wrecks the meaning. Most of you seemed to interpret this correctly (using logic from previous answer choices). One possible meaning is that "coyotes are depicted as solitary animals howling mournfully on the tops of distant hills WHEN THEY ARE in films about the American West". But the way this reads is that "coyotes are depicted (BY SOMEBODY, SOMEWHERE, SOMETIME) as solitary animals howling mournfully on the tops of distant hills in films about the American West". See? It's as if they're depicted elsewhere as if they were in films. The modifiers here are modifying all the wrong stuff.

(D) films about the American West depict coyotes as if they were solitary, mournfully howling animals on the tops of distant hills
PROBLEM: Depict "as if" is also incorrect. Also reversing "mournfully howling" is awkward (though probably not grammatically incorrect).

(E) films about the American West depict coyotes to be solitary and mournfully howling animals on the tops of distant hills
PROBLEM: Depict "to be" is wrong.

Voila!

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Explanation was good but this one is very difficult unless one knows the right idiom - DEPICT AS. In choices, A B E only one error type to be checked - idiom or not. Don't think I could have cracked in limited time in actual GMAT
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28 Jun 2010, 18:54
Hey Aagar,

Keep in mind that even idiom splits shouldn't be particularly time-consuming. What will kill you is AGONIZING over a decision. If you see an idiom split, first recognize it ("This question wants to know if I know what preposition(s) come after the verb "to depict"), then try it out in your own mini-sentence ("It was depicted as a monkey."), then pick the one that sounds best. Don't let it take more than ten or fifteen seconds. Overthinking won't help you.

Hope that makes sense!

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