May someone rate my essay? (GRE but my friend recommended this site)
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27 Sep 2014, 14:28
Hi everyone!
This is my first post so I apologize in advance if I am using the wrong section. The essay I wrote is an issue essay not the argument essay hence, requires my opinion.
Topic: People who make decisions based on emotion and justify those decisions with logic afterwards are poor decision makers.
Humans have to constantly make decisions to progress in their worldly activities. While making these decisions many factors come into play and one of the most troublesome factor is emotions. I agree and believe that those who choose due to how they feel and then "attempt" to justify their actions with logic are those who will not succeed in progressing towards becoming a proper human.
One decision can change your entire life and we must strive to first think and try to make this change for the better. Consider for example, a family where the parents are struggling with each other. Suppose that a fight broke out among the parents and makes one or both parents files for a divorce due to their animosity towards each other. Later they justify that the anger they felt could have caused them to commit murder or suicide. However these parents only though about their emotions and never though about the consequences such as a poor upbringing of their children. Thus these parents made a very poor decision only due to their emotions.
Examining the George Zimmerman case where he shot and murdered Martin an African American teenager. George had a strong opposition against African Americans and thus shot Martin due to his dark complexion. Zimmerman later justified his decision and action by stating that he thought Martin was stalking him, and he didn't mean to murder him. This poor decision led to a massive riot and emotional breakdown to many African Americans around the world. Zimmerman and many others are those who choose to follow their emotions and try to prove themselves right by using faulty logic which led to a poor decision.
To summarize, each human is gifted with emotions and the ability to make proper judgement in their life. But the humans that are capable of controlling these emotions when making a choice are those that will mostly make the right choice.
-Thanks alot!