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Optional 1.Student and alumni engagement has at times led to the creation of innovative classes. For example, through extraordinary efforts, a small group of current students partnered with faculty to create a timely course entitled, “Disaster Response: Haiti and Beyond,” empowering students to leverage the talented Wharton community to improve the lives of the Haiti earthquake victims. Similarly, Wharton students and alumni helped to create “Innovation and the Indian Healthcare Industry” which took students to India where they studied the full range of healthcare issues in India. If you were able to create a Wharton course on any topic, what would it be? (700 words)
How do you guys feel about using "us" and "we" in that essay? I don't know if I should write this essay as if I was definitely going to be a future student at Wharton or not. Is that good for the personal touch or does that overstep a certain boundary one does not want to cross?
Anyone any thoughts on that?
I was thinking about this same issue daybefore while drafting the essay. I've usually just referred to Wharton students without adding a personal reference. I think its better not to come off as presumptuous. In only one instance have I used "we" and even there it is ambiguous whether I am referring to Wharton MBA students or MBA students in general. I need to revisit that piece and see if it needs modifying. Personally, I would refrain from using "we" or "us" to the extent possible. However, I think its ok to use it if you are referring to MBA students in general to describe a common characteristic that is school-independent.
I actually have another dilemma regarding this same essay. I've referenced a particular book in the essay and used quotes from the book. Is that ok? Have any successful applicants used references and quotes in their essays?