osbornecox,
thanks so much for the feedback. i wrote this is a rough first draft late last night when i was on duty. i definitely need to make this much more coherent.
your input and time and effort helping me is very much appreciated. I will definitely use your advice and clean this up significantly.
lastly, i am taking the essay and your comments off the discussion board.i received a few messages from people advising me to do this. i am a newbie on here and did not realize i was not supposed to do this.
i definitely appreciate it and if you ever need anything please send me a message on here and i'd do anything i can to help.