aviroop wrote:
I finished one essay - used a phrase from Lao-Tse to make it sound all happening - sent it to one of my post MBA buddies, His response:
1) there is no 'in the professional frontier', (expletive)...'ON the professional frontier'
So what? its a minor issue with language and English proficiency. It won't keep you out of school. Most indians write Till Date everywhere. I notice it every time, and its wrong, but its not the end of the world... Moreover, if you really want to get picky, referring to a career as "on the professional frontier" is probably a little akward whether you say "in" or "on" anyway. Usually theres a more succinct or clearer way of saying the same thing "Professionally... " "From a professional standpoint...." etc.. But even so, at WORST, its an "OK" choice of words to convey your meaning... Nothing serious enough that will keep you out of a school.
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2) trading division of the investment banking industry ...LOL
A little bit strangely phrased, as an industry doesnt have a division (companies do), and could be more accurately referred to just as Sales and Trading, but doesn't strike me as especially egregious of a mistake. The only person I know who would really LOL at that would be someone who wants to go into IB or is in IB and is being arrogant. Its not perfect, but no adcom is going to deny you because you refer to an area with less than perfect familiarity.
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3) economic development of south asia ... ROTFL
Whats ROTFL about economic development of asia? Seems like a plausible subject to be discussing.
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4) three phones on the NYSE ... Hysterical
Out of context, hard to judge.
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5) Lao-Tse....Premature death due to laughter...
Probably true, he probably deserved to laugh - Lao-Tse stuff is likely to be a bit cliche - .... but maybe not.