OFFICIAL EXPLANATIONProject SC Butler: Sentence Correction (SC1)
Quote:
The temperature dropped suddenly last night, which will mean that the shoots emerging from the soil will be killed by the frost.
A) which will mean that the shoots emerging from the soil will be killed by the frost
B) an event that will mean that the frost will kill the shoots emerging from the soil
C) and this will mean that the shoots emerging from the soil will be killed by the frost
D) and the resulting frost will kill the shoots that are emerging from the soil
E) and as a result, the shoots will be killed by the frost, emerging from the soil
• OVERVIEW→ Meaning?
The temperature dropped suddenly last night; the resulting frost will kill new plants that are emerging from the soil.
→ Things to remember:
(1)
which is a relative pronoun.
A
pronoun must refer to a
noun—not a previous clause, not an idea, but rather, a stated noun.
Out of hundreds of official questions, I know of only one in which the word
which seems to be allowed to stand for the preceding clause that did not contain a noun to match with
which. (And I cannot find that one example at the moment.)
(2)
this is not a standalone pronoun 99.9 percent of the time.
This can be an adjective (determiner):
this red plate; this kind of felony; this smaller dog, not that larger one.But in formal speech and writing, the word
this cannot be a standalone pronoun and cannot refer to a previous clause or the idea in a previous clause.
Very few rules are ironclad, but the one I just mentioned holds almost without exception.
That said, in
OG 2020, for the first time that I know of, the correct answer contained a standalone "this" that referred to an entire clause.
That official question is
here.
It is the only question of its kind of which I am aware.
→ If you see a strange-looking noun phrase surrounded by commas in the middle of a sentence, you are probably looking at an appositive.
Purdue OWL is an excellent writing and grammar source.
This article, here explains appositives and takes three—
three —minutes to read.
Why am I talking about appositives? Option B contains one. (Hint: it starts with "an event.")
• Split #1: The case of the missing antecedent or rogue pronounIn option A, the pronoun
which does not have a noun antecedent.
The word
which is improperly trying to refer to the entire preceding clause,
the temperature dropped suddenly last night.That clause, however, contains no noun that could act as an antecedent for
which.
As a matter of logic, which cannot be referring to the nouns
temperature or
night.
No noun referent? No antecedent. Wrong.
Eliminate A
In option C, the word
this tries improperly to accomplish what
which improperly tried to accomplish in option A.
If option C had used the phrase "this event," the option would be on more solid ground, though the option is wordy and stylistically inferior to the correct answer.
Eliminate C
• Split #2: misplaced modifier Noun modifiers should be placed as close as possible to the nouns they modify.
In option E, the phrase
emerging from the soil seems tacked lazily onto the end of the sentence and is too far away from its target, the word
shoots.
In fact, because
emerging . . . looks like an appositive, it seems to refer to
frost.
Frost does not emerge from soil.
Participle modifiers (verbING modifiers) can and do modify the subject of the previous clause, but in this case the modifier is too essential to be placed this far from its noun, and the modifier's distance from the noun is too jarring.
The modifier
emerging from the soil theoretically could modify
shoots.
(If you get too literal with the participle rule, you will not see that the placement of this modifier creates an abysmal sentence.)
That modifier, though, is better placed right next to its noun, and its placement in option E not only makes for strange separation from the noun but also stultifies the sentence.
If you are not sure, hold the option and look for a better one.
Eliminate E
Split #3: Option B or option D? Option D is better than option B.
The meaning in option D, which explicitly mentions "resulting," is clearer than that in option B, which attenuates the connection between event and "will kill."
In formal writing, we do not very often speak of an event
meaning something.
True, the word mean
can connote "result" or "consequence."
That usage is uncommon though not unheard of. (See Oxford online dictionary, #3,
in this dictionary entry. Option D is
-- more concise (many fewer words and streamlined phrasing);
-- more precise (
resulting frost is clearer and crisper than
an event that will mean that)
-- and more "punchy" than is option B.
In option D,
the resulting frost will kill connotes something drastic; "will kill" is drastic.
By contrast, in option B, we must wade through all the words I have stricken here:
an event that will mean that the frost will kill.
Option B is not as good as option D.
Eliminate B.
The correct answer is D.COMMENTSMohsengho , welcome to SC Butler.
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Most of these posters address issues I do not or do not address in depth.
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