Could you please rate this essay..

Hi - I am giving my gmat on 8th March and have started practicing the AWA. I have written following essay today, could you please help identify where I can improve:

"The study of history is largely a waste of time because it prevents us from focusing on the challenges of the present."

Discuss the extent to which you agree of disagree...

Many people believe that study of history is largely a waste of time because it prevents us from focusing on the challenges of the present. This statement is immature and I disagree with this conclusion, and I shall put forward my reasons against it.

We all are familiar with the phrase - "History repeats itself". And we have seen in the past how World War II followed World War I, how genocide in Darfur and Rwanda followed holocaust, and how financial crisis is repeating itself after almost every decade. Unless world learns from its past, same mistakes will keep happening.

Also, study of history is a constant reminder for the new generation of the struggles of previous generations and how their present was shaped by the history. It is very important that all points of views are documented about the historical events which provide a complete perspective of the past. Some historical events are written with a biased approach - such as Indo Pak conflicts will be documented in a prejudiced manner by the historians of two countries. If someone does not study all the historical events with a neutral mindset, solution to some of the current problems will never be possible because future generations will be continuously reminded of how their previous generation was right and the other country was wrong. There will never be a rethinking on the conflict without studying history in more depth.

Finally, some of the major challenges of current times have their roots in history. Financial crisis, cold war, occupation conflicts of Israel and Philistine, Indo-Pak conflict etc. Unless new generation looks at these issues with a new angle, they will never be resolved. And for the new generation to have a new angle, someone needs to continuously research on history and find out more and more details about every event that shaped our present.

Unfortunately, some people think that studying history is mostly a waste of time, but they fail to realize that man kind needs to learn from its mistakes whether they were made just yesterday, last week, last month or in last century.

For all above reasons, I strongly believe that studying history is an important part of understanding today's challenges. Without that we will be vulnerable to make same mistakes again and again.