Please grade and criticize the following AWA Essay

Over the past decade the restaurant industry in the country of Spiessa has experienced unprecedented growth. This surge can be expected to continue in the coming years fuelled by recent social changes. Personal incomes are rising. More leisure time is available. Single-person house-holds are more common and people have a greater interest in gourmet food as evidenced by a proliferation of publications on the subject.

The previous argument is flawed in numerous ways. The purpose of this essay will be to show and discuss why it lacks credibility, as well as why it’s arguments and conclusions should not be taking into account.

One of the main mistakes identified is that there is no sufficient information about time spaces in the argument. At the beginning, it mentions that the restaurant industry in the country has experienced unmprecedent growth, but it fails to mention any time lapse, which will give the argument much more support. Maybe, the unprecedented growth was from one day to the other due to a holiday, like Mothers Day, which will justify imprecedent growth, but it would not be a clear sample of where the restaurant industry is going. The argument also fails to give further details about time lapses in the proliferation of gourmet restaurant publications, giving no real clues on wether this proliferation is due to a real consumer trend or simply a peak in the number of publications with no effect in real consumer trends.

Another flaw located within the argument it fails to specify what kind of growth it is referring to, misguiding the reader on wether the arguments which support the conclusion (the argument refers to them as “social changes”) justify the writer’s expected restaurant industry growth. Thus, the mentioned growth could be on number of restaurants, which could be a real reflection of the industry’s performance, but it could also be referring to a growth in number of parking spaces in the restaurants, probing nothing about the restaurant industry performance.
Finally, the argument fails to to give further information about the restaurant industry in Spiessa, giving no clarity on wether the mentioned social changes that the writer suggests to justify the expected industry’s growth are correlated tio the restaurant industry. By having further information about the industry, the reader would be certain on judging the social changes impact on the industry. For example, if the argument would have mentioned that there is a strong correlation between the increase of personal incomes and the increase inn restaurants revenues derived from more available economic resources in the consumers pockets, which are usually destined to increase restaurant spending, the reader would be sure that the increase in personal incomes will increase the restaurant industry profits.

The argument is clearly flawed because it does not gives the reader specific information on wether thce writter’s restaurant industry expected increase is fairly justified. So, we can conclude that the argument lacks credibility.