Events & Promotions
|
|
GMAT Club Daily Prep
Thank you for using the timer - this advanced tool can estimate your performance and suggest more practice questions. We have subscribed you to Daily Prep Questions via email.
Customized
for You
Track
Your Progress
Practice
Pays
Not interested in getting valuable practice questions and articles delivered to your email? No problem, unsubscribe here.
Apr 2711:00 AM EDT
-12:00 PM EDT
Prefer video-based learning? The Target Test Prep OnDemand course is a one-of-a-kind video masterclass featuring 400 hours of lecture-style teaching by Scott Woodbury-Stewart, founder of Target Test Prep and one of the most accomplished GMAT instructors
Apr 2601:30 AM EDT
-02:30 AM EDT
Learn how Keshav, a Chartered Accountant, scored an impressive 705 on GMAT in just 30 days with GMATWhiz's expert guidance. In this video, he shares preparation tips and strategies that worked for him, including the mock, time management, and more.
Apr 2610:00 AM EDT
-11:00 AM EDT
The Target Test Prep course represents a quantum leap forward in GMAT preparation, a radical reinterpretation of the way that students should study. Try before you buy with a 5-day, full-access trial of the course for FREE!
Apr 2808:00 AM PDT
-11:00 AM PDT
Whether you are just beginning your MBA journey or fine-tuning your path to a 700+ score, GMAT Day is designed to give you a competitive edge.
Apr 2912:30 AM EDT
-01:30 AM EDT
Learn how Kamakshi achieved a GMAT 675 with an impressive 96th %ile in Data Insights. Discover the unique methods and exam strategies that helped her excel in DI along with other sections for a balanced and high score.
May 0111:00 AM PDT
-12:00 PM PDT
Free- full-length test + 15 concept videos + 150+ short videos + study plan!
May 0306:30 AM PDT
-08:30 AM PDT
Verbal trouble on GMAT? Fix it NOW! Join Sunita Singhvi for a focused webinar on actionable strategies to boost your Verbal score and take your performance to the next level.
09 Nov 2018, 03:39
Kudos
Bookmarks
Hello fellas!
I would be deeply appreciated if you could take 10 minutes of your time to rate this essay and present me some ways of how this essay could be improved.
I have my GMAT scheduled to the 19th and I haven't took much consideration in to the AWA...yet! I need a 4 but I think I'm able to get a 5 or even a 6, if possible.
Here it goes:
The following appeared in the opinion column of a financial magazine:
“On average, middle-aged consumers devote 39 percent of their retail expenditure to department store products and
services, while for younger consumers the average is only 25 percent. Since the number of middle-aged people will
increase dramatically within the next decade, department stores can expect retail sales to increase significantly
during that period. Furthermore, to take advantage of the trend, these stores should begin to replace some of those
products intended to attract the younger consumer with products intended to attract the middle-aged consumer.”
Discuss how well reasoned . . . etc.
The author states in the argument that middle-aged consumers are more prone to expend in department stores than younger consumers. As the number of middle-aged people will increase, the author argues that department stores should replace young people targeted products to middle-aged people products. The argument struggles to demonstrate a clear line of reasoning by ignoring several factors that may have an impact on the correlation showed above.
To begin with, the author cites that an increase in retail sales will follow an increase in middle-aged people population. There is no clear evidence that middle-aged people will face an adjustment in consuming patterns. There is the possibility that middle-aged consumers realize the advantages of online shopping. These shopping system offers benefits such as higher diversity of products and services and do not require the mobility of the consumer.
Secondly, the argument presents the idea that department stores should increase the range of products for middle aged people. The author fails to address that the lack of products and services for younger consumers can already be the problem and the root for these consumers to be a smaller group target for the department stores. There is no information in the argument showing how the products and services are distributed. The small range of products and services developed to target younger consumers is likely one of the factors that may explain the lack of expenditure from this group.
In conclusion, the author fails to consider a bigger scope in the argument. The argument does not consider a change in consuming patters and doesn’t take in account the strategies that the online market business may take after those measures are implemented. Moreover, the argument does not display how products and services were initially distributed. Clear data about the issue could help department store managers fix the problem. Overall, the author should present a broader perspective in the argument and consider some other factors that may influence department store sales.
I would be deeply appreciated if you could take 10 minutes of your time to rate this essay and present me some ways of how this essay could be improved.
I have my GMAT scheduled to the 19th and I haven't took much consideration in to the AWA...yet! I need a 4 but I think I'm able to get a 5 or even a 6, if possible.
Here it goes:
The following appeared in the opinion column of a financial magazine:
“On average, middle-aged consumers devote 39 percent of their retail expenditure to department store products and
services, while for younger consumers the average is only 25 percent. Since the number of middle-aged people will
increase dramatically within the next decade, department stores can expect retail sales to increase significantly
during that period. Furthermore, to take advantage of the trend, these stores should begin to replace some of those
products intended to attract the younger consumer with products intended to attract the middle-aged consumer.”
Discuss how well reasoned . . . etc.
The author states in the argument that middle-aged consumers are more prone to expend in department stores than younger consumers. As the number of middle-aged people will increase, the author argues that department stores should replace young people targeted products to middle-aged people products. The argument struggles to demonstrate a clear line of reasoning by ignoring several factors that may have an impact on the correlation showed above.
To begin with, the author cites that an increase in retail sales will follow an increase in middle-aged people population. There is no clear evidence that middle-aged people will face an adjustment in consuming patterns. There is the possibility that middle-aged consumers realize the advantages of online shopping. These shopping system offers benefits such as higher diversity of products and services and do not require the mobility of the consumer.
Secondly, the argument presents the idea that department stores should increase the range of products for middle aged people. The author fails to address that the lack of products and services for younger consumers can already be the problem and the root for these consumers to be a smaller group target for the department stores. There is no information in the argument showing how the products and services are distributed. The small range of products and services developed to target younger consumers is likely one of the factors that may explain the lack of expenditure from this group.
In conclusion, the author fails to consider a bigger scope in the argument. The argument does not consider a change in consuming patters and doesn’t take in account the strategies that the online market business may take after those measures are implemented. Moreover, the argument does not display how products and services were initially distributed. Clear data about the issue could help department store managers fix the problem. Overall, the author should present a broader perspective in the argument and consider some other factors that may influence department store sales.
12 Nov 2018, 00:01
Kudos
Bookmarks
Hello,
I think you will probably get a 4 because the essay is quite short.
The first paragraph clearly summed up the overall information about the argument. However, personally, I preferred to also bring the source of the information (The argument published in a financial magazine suggest that... ) This is not mandatory, but it is a good way to beef up the essay. Additionally, you concluded that the flaw is that the author fails to demonstrate..... But, in your essay, you stated that the author failed to do several things more than the flaw you mentioned in the first paragraph. So, if I were you, I would just say that, the argument suffers a number of flaws, ranging from AAA to BBB, that would need to be reorganized before a more solid argument could be carried out.
And the reasonings are good, but again, they are both too short. I think you would need to list out some other alternative outcomes or give more examples. I like to add "had the author provided additional material to establish that CCC, the argument would have been strengthened" or sort of sentence at each of the body paragraph!
Lastly, you might want to use the dictionary and find more vocabulary to use in the essay. You used the word "consider" wayyyyyy too much.
I just got a 6.0 on my AWA so these advice are just what I would have done
Hope it helps x
I think you will probably get a 4 because the essay is quite short.
The first paragraph clearly summed up the overall information about the argument. However, personally, I preferred to also bring the source of the information (The argument published in a financial magazine suggest that... ) This is not mandatory, but it is a good way to beef up the essay. Additionally, you concluded that the flaw is that the author fails to demonstrate..... But, in your essay, you stated that the author failed to do several things more than the flaw you mentioned in the first paragraph. So, if I were you, I would just say that, the argument suffers a number of flaws, ranging from AAA to BBB, that would need to be reorganized before a more solid argument could be carried out.
And the reasonings are good, but again, they are both too short. I think you would need to list out some other alternative outcomes or give more examples. I like to add "had the author provided additional material to establish that CCC, the argument would have been strengthened" or sort of sentence at each of the body paragraph!
Lastly, you might want to use the dictionary and find more vocabulary to use in the essay. You used the word "consider" wayyyyyy too much.
I just got a 6.0 on my AWA so these advice are just what I would have done
Hope it helps x 
14 Nov 2018, 23:46
Kudos
Bookmarks
There are some assumptions which may help to improve your writing:
1. This argument assumed the expenditure of the middle age people will be still high
2. This argument assumed the expenditure of the young people will be still low
So if you negate, the conclusion will be collapsed.
To evaluate, just rise the questions for "these stores should begin to replace some of those
products intended to attract the younger consumer with products intended to attract the middle-aged consumer."
So you will have 3 paragraphs, then your essay will be longer.
Hope this helps.
1. This argument assumed the expenditure of the middle age people will be still high
2. This argument assumed the expenditure of the young people will be still low
So if you negate, the conclusion will be collapsed.
To evaluate, just rise the questions for "these stores should begin to replace some of those
products intended to attract the younger consumer with products intended to attract the middle-aged consumer."
So you will have 3 paragraphs, then your essay will be longer.
Hope this helps.
