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The argument in the local newspaper claims that residents of San Perdito would be best served if they impeached Montoya and reelected Varra as mayor because in Montoya’s tenure as mayor the city experienced a decline in population, an increase in unemployment rates, and the closing of businesses, but conversely experienced an increase in population and a decrease unemployment rate in Varro’s time. However, the argument is flawed because it jumps to the conclusion that Varro was responsible for the prosperity of the city while Montoya was responsible for its deterioration. Furthermore, the argument relies on assumptions for which there is no clear evidence making its conclusion weak and unconvincing.
First, the argument fails to discuss or consider the magnitude of the increase or decrease in population and unemployment rates. Perhaps, in Varro’s time the population increased and unemployment rates decreased by insignificant amounts, and it could also be the case that that population decreased and unemployment rates increased by insignificant amounts in Montoya’s time. If these two situations prove to be true, the change in the metrics in question cannot be used to further the case for Varro over Montoya.
Second, the argument assumes that prosperity of the city in Varro’s time and its downturn in Montoya’s can be attributed solely to the leadership of either mayor failing to consider other factors that could be responsible for the phenomena that occurred in mayors’ periods of leadership. For instance, Montoya could have taken the reigns from Varro at the time a serious pandemic that claimed numerous lives, putt people out of work, and forced businesses to close broke out. One could even argue that as mayor Montoya did the best he could possibly have to curtail the pandemic - much better than Varro probably would have. Without examining factors that could affect the prosperity of the city beyond the efficacy of either mayor’s leadership, the argument’s conclusion remains poor and is left wanting.
Finally, the argument is flawed because it boldly assumes that the people of San Perdito would be better off with Varro and not Montoya as their leader. However, the argument offers no concrete evidence to support said assumption. Admittedly, the information provided in the argument could suggest that Varro is the better leader, but without evidence such as the efficacy of his policies or ratings from citizens, one could argue that the reason the city experienced a downturn in Montoya’s time is because just before Varro left office he put in place certain policies that worsened the economic situations in San Perdito. It could be the case that Montoya actually exceeded expectations in curbing the negative effects that Varro’s policy had. If the aforementioned situations prove to be true, the argument’s conclusion would prove to be completely false.
In conclusion, the argument is flawed for the above-mentioned reasons and is therefore questionable. It could be considerably strengthened if the author clearly mentioned the lack of external factors that could have contributed to the changes in the socio-economic situations in either mayor’s terms, and provided solid evidence to show the efficacy of Varro’s leadership. Without this information, the argument remains unsubstantiated and should be viewed with scepticism.