Events & Promotions
|
|
GMAT Club Daily Prep
Thank you for using the timer - this advanced tool can estimate your performance and suggest more practice questions. We have subscribed you to Daily Prep Questions via email.
Customized
for You
Track
Your Progress
Practice
Pays
Not interested in getting valuable practice questions and articles delivered to your email? No problem, unsubscribe here.
Apr 2512:30 AM EDT
-01:30 AM EDT
At one point, she believed GMAT wasn’t for her. After scoring 595, self-doubt crept in and she questioned her potential. But instead of quitting, she made the right strategic changes. The result? A remarkable comeback to 695. Check out how Saakshi did it.
Apr 2601:30 AM EDT
-02:30 AM EDT
Learn how Keshav, a Chartered Accountant, scored an impressive 705 on GMAT in just 30 days with GMATWhiz's expert guidance. In this video, he shares preparation tips and strategies that worked for him, including the mock, time management, and more.
Apr 2610:00 AM EDT
-11:00 AM EDT
The Target Test Prep course represents a quantum leap forward in GMAT preparation, a radical reinterpretation of the way that students should study. Try before you buy with a 5-day, full-access trial of the course for FREE!
Apr 2711:00 AM EDT
-12:00 PM EDT
Prefer video-based learning? The Target Test Prep OnDemand course is a one-of-a-kind video masterclass featuring 400 hours of lecture-style teaching by Scott Woodbury-Stewart, founder of Target Test Prep and one of the most accomplished GMAT instructors
Apr 2808:00 AM PDT
-11:00 AM PDT
Whether you are just beginning your MBA journey or fine-tuning your path to a 700+ score, GMAT Day is designed to give you a competitive edge.
May 0111:00 AM PDT
-12:00 PM PDT
Free- full-length test + 15 concept videos + 150+ short videos + study plan!
Sajjad1994
Requesting for an evaluation of my Essay on the undermentioned prompt :-
QUESTION
The following appeared in a magazine article on trends and lifestyles :-
"In general, people are not as concerned as they were a decade ago about regulating their intake of red meat and fatty cheeses. Walk into the Heart's Delight, a store that started selling organic fruits and vegetables and whole-grain flours in the 1960's, and you will also find a wide selection of cheeses made with high butterfat content. Next door, the owners of the Good Earth Café, an old vegetarian restaurant, are still making a modest living, but the owners of the new House of Beef across the street are millionaires."
Discuss how well reasoned you find this argument. In your discussion be sure to analyze the line of reasoning and the use of evidence in the argument. For example, you may need to consider what questionable assumptions underlie the thinking and what alternative explanations or counterexamples might weaken the conclusion. You can also discuss what sort of evidence would strengthen or refute the argument, what changes in the argument would make it more logically sound, and what, if anything, would help you better evaluate its conclusion.
ESSAY
The argument under reference, an extract from an article on trends and lifestyles in a magazine, highlights the sole premise regarding sellers' preference for animal fat products vis-a-vis the vegetarian products, and thereby concludes that people are less concerned about regulating their intake of red meat and fatty cheeses. While the argument seems fairly convincing at an initial glance, on a deeper analysis it comes to the fore that the argument suffers from doubtful assumption, and lack of adequate supporting evidence. Besides such limitations, the argument also depicts several critical flaws, which have been enumerated in the succeeding paragraphs.
Firstly, the author rests the reasoning for the argument on the sole assumption that the two stores, Heart's delight and House of Beef, cater to the majority of the buyers. red meat and fatty diseases has significantly decreased over the past decade. Such an overbearing assumption is clearly unwarranted, particularly owing to the existence of several population categories based on socio-economic status, food preferences, and existence of immigrant and non-immigrant population in the city.
Secondly, the author has highlighted the increasing revenue of the new House of Beef as compared to that of the Good Earth Cafe to support the argument in favor of non-vegetarian food preferences. Herein, the author has not cited other factors such as the variety in the offered menu, the amenities provided, parking facilities etc available at the two store locations. A comparative analysis of such factors will present necessary evidence for supporting the conclusion.
Thirdly, the author's argument lacks supporting evidence in the form of population surveys, expert analyses and advertising efforts undertaken by these stores towards increasing their revenues compared to such measures undertaken by other stores.
Lastly, the author has drawn conclusions about the peoples' concerns on the basis of analysis regarding revenues and profits of only a restricted sample size of three stores. There is a high probability of a biased sample adopted by the author to favor the required conclusion. Towards supplementing the reasoning, the author needs to widen the sample base of the food stores, particularly in terms of types of food product categories catered to by such stores.
Towards increasing the logical consistency of the argument, the author needs to include the population surveys regarding food preferences, product basket at several other stores, population surveys, and as comparative analyses regarding the offered amenities at a larger sample size of food stores.
In essence, the argument, in its existing state, is logically deficient, in that it is based on doubtful assumption, and lacks adequate supporting evidence. If the author includes the population surveys, comparative analyses and store amenities' comparative matrices, the argument will be significantly strengthened in its efforts to justify the conclusion that people are less concerned about regulating their intake of red meat and fatty cheese than they were during the past decade.
Requesting for an evaluation of my Essay on the undermentioned prompt :-
QUESTION
The following appeared in a magazine article on trends and lifestyles :-
"In general, people are not as concerned as they were a decade ago about regulating their intake of red meat and fatty cheeses. Walk into the Heart's Delight, a store that started selling organic fruits and vegetables and whole-grain flours in the 1960's, and you will also find a wide selection of cheeses made with high butterfat content. Next door, the owners of the Good Earth Café, an old vegetarian restaurant, are still making a modest living, but the owners of the new House of Beef across the street are millionaires."
Discuss how well reasoned you find this argument. In your discussion be sure to analyze the line of reasoning and the use of evidence in the argument. For example, you may need to consider what questionable assumptions underlie the thinking and what alternative explanations or counterexamples might weaken the conclusion. You can also discuss what sort of evidence would strengthen or refute the argument, what changes in the argument would make it more logically sound, and what, if anything, would help you better evaluate its conclusion.
ESSAY
The argument under reference, an extract from an article on trends and lifestyles in a magazine, highlights the sole premise regarding sellers' preference for animal fat products vis-a-vis the vegetarian products, and thereby concludes that people are less concerned about regulating their intake of red meat and fatty cheeses. While the argument seems fairly convincing at an initial glance, on a deeper analysis it comes to the fore that the argument suffers from doubtful assumption, and lack of adequate supporting evidence. Besides such limitations, the argument also depicts several critical flaws, which have been enumerated in the succeeding paragraphs.
Firstly, the author rests the reasoning for the argument on the sole assumption that the two stores, Heart's delight and House of Beef, cater to the majority of the buyers. red meat and fatty diseases has significantly decreased over the past decade. Such an overbearing assumption is clearly unwarranted, particularly owing to the existence of several population categories based on socio-economic status, food preferences, and existence of immigrant and non-immigrant population in the city.
Secondly, the author has highlighted the increasing revenue of the new House of Beef as compared to that of the Good Earth Cafe to support the argument in favor of non-vegetarian food preferences. Herein, the author has not cited other factors such as the variety in the offered menu, the amenities provided, parking facilities etc available at the two store locations. A comparative analysis of such factors will present necessary evidence for supporting the conclusion.
Thirdly, the author's argument lacks supporting evidence in the form of population surveys, expert analyses and advertising efforts undertaken by these stores towards increasing their revenues compared to such measures undertaken by other stores.
Lastly, the author has drawn conclusions about the peoples' concerns on the basis of analysis regarding revenues and profits of only a restricted sample size of three stores. There is a high probability of a biased sample adopted by the author to favor the required conclusion. Towards supplementing the reasoning, the author needs to widen the sample base of the food stores, particularly in terms of types of food product categories catered to by such stores.
Towards increasing the logical consistency of the argument, the author needs to include the population surveys regarding food preferences, product basket at several other stores, population surveys, and as comparative analyses regarding the offered amenities at a larger sample size of food stores.
In essence, the argument, in its existing state, is logically deficient, in that it is based on doubtful assumption, and lacks adequate supporting evidence. If the author includes the population surveys, comparative analyses and store amenities' comparative matrices, the argument will be significantly strengthened in its efforts to justify the conclusion that people are less concerned about regulating their intake of red meat and fatty cheese than they were during the past decade.
18 Aug 2023, 00:26
Kudos
Bookmarks
AWA Score: 5 out of 6
Coherence and Connectivity: 5
The essay generally maintains coherence and connectivity throughout. The points are logically organized, and each paragraph addresses a specific aspect of the argument's weaknesses. There is a clear progression of ideas from one paragraph to the next. However, there are a few instances where the transition between sentences could be smoother, and some points could be more tightly connected to the overall argument.
Word Structure: 5
The word structure is quite strong. The essay employs a varied range of vocabulary and sentence structures, which enhances its readability and demonstrates a good command of language. Sentences are generally well-constructed and convey ideas clearly.
Paragraph Structure and Formation: 5
The essay is divided into well-defined paragraphs, each discussing a distinct aspect of the argument's shortcomings. However, some paragraphs could be more focused on a single key point, and the concluding paragraph could be stronger in summarizing the main criticisms and potential improvements.
Language and Grammar: 5
The language and grammar are proficient, with only a few minor errors. Some sentences could be rephrased for clarity or conciseness. There are instances where articles, prepositions, or word order could be adjusted for smoother expression. Overall, the essay demonstrates a good grasp of grammar and language usage.
Vocabulary and Word Expression: 5
The vocabulary and word expression are strong, showcasing a diverse range of words and phrases. However, in a few instances, word choices could be slightly more precise or contextually appropriate. Some sentences might benefit from more precise vocabulary to enhance the depth of analysis.
Overall, the essay is well-structured and effectively critiques the provided argument. It addresses various weaknesses, offers alternative perspectives, and suggests improvements. With some minor refinements in coherence, paragraph structure, language, and vocabulary usage, the essay could achieve an even higher level of clarity and effectiveness in conveying its analysis. The essay scores around 5 out of 6 points.
PS: How many more essays you are going to attempt? I don't think it will make any difference. The practice of 5-10 essays is usually enough.
Coherence and Connectivity: 5
The essay generally maintains coherence and connectivity throughout. The points are logically organized, and each paragraph addresses a specific aspect of the argument's weaknesses. There is a clear progression of ideas from one paragraph to the next. However, there are a few instances where the transition between sentences could be smoother, and some points could be more tightly connected to the overall argument.
Word Structure: 5
The word structure is quite strong. The essay employs a varied range of vocabulary and sentence structures, which enhances its readability and demonstrates a good command of language. Sentences are generally well-constructed and convey ideas clearly.
Paragraph Structure and Formation: 5
The essay is divided into well-defined paragraphs, each discussing a distinct aspect of the argument's shortcomings. However, some paragraphs could be more focused on a single key point, and the concluding paragraph could be stronger in summarizing the main criticisms and potential improvements.
Language and Grammar: 5
The language and grammar are proficient, with only a few minor errors. Some sentences could be rephrased for clarity or conciseness. There are instances where articles, prepositions, or word order could be adjusted for smoother expression. Overall, the essay demonstrates a good grasp of grammar and language usage.
Vocabulary and Word Expression: 5
The vocabulary and word expression are strong, showcasing a diverse range of words and phrases. However, in a few instances, word choices could be slightly more precise or contextually appropriate. Some sentences might benefit from more precise vocabulary to enhance the depth of analysis.
Overall, the essay is well-structured and effectively critiques the provided argument. It addresses various weaknesses, offers alternative perspectives, and suggests improvements. With some minor refinements in coherence, paragraph structure, language, and vocabulary usage, the essay could achieve an even higher level of clarity and effectiveness in conveying its analysis. The essay scores around 5 out of 6 points.
PS: How many more essays you are going to attempt? I don't think it will make any difference. The practice of 5-10 essays is usually enough.
pintukr
Moderator:
